Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your current preference, then briefly contrast with past habits and give a specific health reason. Use 2–3 sentences and avoid fillers.

예시: I used to love chocolate, but now I rarely eat it because I'm concerned about my weight and sugar intake. For example, I try to avoid sugary snacks to maintain my fitness and energy levels.

제안: Give a clear frequency and a precise reason with correct grammar. Use linking words to connect the frequency and the reason. Avoid vague phrases and incomplete sentences.

예시: I usually eat chocolate about twice a month, mostly as a small treat when I'm stressed by work. For instance, I might have a piece after a long meeting to relax and boost my mood.

제안: Answer directly and use past tense consistently. Briefly explain how habits changed and give a specific example or consequence. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I ate chocolate very often as a child because I didn't worry about diet or health. For example, I remember having chocolate bars after school almost every day, which I no longer do.

제안: State your main reason clearly, then support it with 1–2 specific points. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Avoid repetition and improve grammar (e.g., 'main reasons', 'taste is sweet').

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and is convenient to eat. For example, children enjoy its sweet flavour and many people continue to buy chocolate as a snack or gift when they're older.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence naming the favourite, then give 1–2 specific reasons using correct grammar. Avoid unclear phrases like 'not much be bitten'.

예시: My favourite is milk chocolate because its flavour is mild and creamy rather than very bitter. I find it pleasant as a small snack since it isn't too sweet or intense.

제안: Give a direct opinion and support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words and correct sentence structure; mention occasions when chocolate is an appropriate gift.

예시: Yes, chocolate makes a good gift because most people enjoy it and it often comes in attractive packaging. For instance, a box of chocolates is a popular present for birthdays or as a small thank-you gift.

× When I was younger, I do love chocolate so much, but this day I don't eat chocolate that much because I'm concerned about my health issue. Mm-hmm.

✓ When I was younger, I loved chocolate very much, but these days I don't eat chocolate that much because I'm concerned about my health.

This sentence mixes past and present incorrectly. 'When I was younger' requires past tense 'loved' (Grammar problem type 6). 'This day' is unnatural; use 'these days' for current habitual actions. Also 'health issue' is countable here so use 'health' or 'a health issue' depending on meaning.

× I eat chocolate normally twice a month as a snack, especially when I feel so stirred about my work. I always use chocolates at and my assistant to release my.

✓ I normally eat chocolate twice a month as a snack, especially when I feel stressed about my work. I often have chocolate with my assistant to help me relax.

Use present simple for habits: 'I normally eat' rather than 'I eat chocolate normally' is fine but reorder for naturalness (Grammar problem type 6). 'Feel so stirred' is incorrect; use 'feel stressed'. The second sentence was ungrammatical and incomplete; 'have chocolate with my assistant to help me relax' corrects verb choice and completes the idea.

× As I mentioned before, when I was younger I loved chocolate so much. In that time I didn't think much about health problem or my diet, so I kind of eat it so much more than this day.

✓ As I mentioned before, when I was younger I loved chocolate very much. At that time I didn't think much about health problems or my diet, so I ate it much more than I do these days.

Maintain past tense when referring to past habits: 'ate' instead of 'eat' (Grammar problem type 5). Use 'at that time' for past reference and plural 'health problems' or 'a health problem'. Compare past and present with 'much more than I do these days'.

× One of the mainly that chocolate is popular around the world is that chocolate taste is sweet and easy to consume and I think most of children like that taste and when they grow up they still consume it continually.

✓ One of the main reasons chocolate is popular around the world is that its taste is sweet and it is easy to consume. I think most children like that taste, and when they grow up they continue to eat it.

'One of the mainly' is incorrect; use 'one of the main reasons' (Grammar problem type 14). 'Chocolate taste' needs possessive 'its taste'. 'Most of children' should be 'most children'. 'Consume it continually' is awkward; use 'continue to eat it'.

× I like milk chocolate because it's taste so mild and easy to eat, is not much be bitten and not much sweet is delicious.

✓ I like milk chocolate because its taste is mild and it is easy to eat; it is not too bitter and not too sweet, which I find delicious.

Use possessive 'its taste' not 'it's taste' (Grammar problem type 13). Sentence fragments and incorrect adjectives 'not much be bitten' should be 'not too bitter'. Also combine clauses with conjunctions and proper comparative 'not too'.

× Uh, chocolate is popular around the world, so is is suitable to give chocolate as a gift to others because others tend to like chocolate and it's. Come with cute package some.

✓ Chocolate is popular around the world, so it is suitable to give chocolate as a gift because many people tend to like it, and it often comes in cute packaging.

Multiple structural errors: repeated 'is is', incorrect pronoun 'it' and fragmented sentences (Grammar problem type 26). 'Come with cute package some' is ungrammatical; correct to 'comes in cute packaging'. Combine ideas into one coherent sentence.