Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to correct minor grammar errors and improve sentence flow. For example, say "the sweet and bitter tastes are perfectly balanced" instead of "the sweet and bitter taste are both balance perfectly". Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas.

예시: Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate, especially dark chocolate that contains 70% cocoa. I like this ratio because the sweet and bitter tastes are perfectly balanced, making it very appealing to me.

제안: Improve grammar by using plural forms and articles correctly, e.g., "important meetings" instead of "important meeting". Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly, such as "because" and "so that". Avoid repeating similar phrases like "I eat chocolate frequently" and "I eat chocolate almost every day".

예시: I eat chocolate almost every day, usually after lunch and sometimes during my tea break because it helps boost my energy and keeps me alert. Additionally, if there are important meetings, I take some chocolate so that I can focus and perform well.

제안: Correct grammar mistakes such as "a nutritional snacks" should be "a nutritional snack". Also, complete the last sentence properly and avoid incomplete thoughts. Use linking words like "although" and "because" to make the answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I have had this habit since I was a child. Although most parents don't allow their children to eat chocolate, my parents thought differently because they believe chocolate is a nutritional snack that contains vitamins and antioxidants.

제안: Improve sentence structure and word choice. For example, say "nobody can resist having a bite" instead of "nobody can reject to have a bite on it". Also, use linking words like "besides" or "moreover" to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I think the main reason chocolate is popular worldwide is that it is so delicious that nobody can resist having a bite. Moreover, chocolate is a common gift option because of its wide acceptance.

제안: Correct grammar and word choice, e.g., "contains a higher nutritional content than milk chocolate, making it healthier." Use linking words like "because" and "also" to improve coherence. Avoid awkward phrasing like "make it the most outstanding one."

예시: I always prefer dark chocolate that contains 70% cocoa because at this ratio, the bitter and sweet flavours blend perfectly, making it the best choice. Also, dark chocolate contains a higher nutritional content than milk chocolate, making it healthier.

제안: Improve grammar and sentence clarity. For example, say "especially those that are high quality and handmade." Also, use linking words like "although" and "unless" correctly. Avoid awkward phrasing like "it not the wrong one."

예시: Yes, I believe chocolate is an excellent gift option, especially those that are high quality and handmade. Although chocolate may not always be the best gift for everyone, it is not a bad choice unless the person is allergic to it.

× I like this ratio because the sweet and bitter taste are both balance perfectly and this taste is very appealing to me.

✓ I like this ratio because the sweet and bitter tastes are both balanced perfectly and this taste is very appealing to me.

The word 'taste' should be plural 'tastes' because it refers to two different tastes: sweet and bitter. Also, 'balance' should be in past participle form 'balanced' to correctly describe the state of the tastes. This improves subject-verb agreement and adjective usage.

× I eat chocolate almost every day, usually after lunch and sometimes during my tea break.

✓ I eat chocolate almost every day, usually after lunch and sometimes at my tea break.

The correct preposition for specific times like 'tea break' is 'at' rather than 'during'. 'During' is used for longer periods or events, while 'at' specifies a point in time.

× If there are important meeting, I will also take some chocolate to make me focus and perform.

✓ If there is an important meeting, I will also take some chocolate to help me focus and perform.

'Meeting' is singular, so 'are' should be 'is' and 'important meeting' needs the article 'an'. Also, 'make me focus' is better expressed as 'help me focus' for natural English usage.

× Although most parents don't allow their children to have chocolate, my parents thought differently.

✓ Although most parents don't allow their children to have chocolate, my parents thought differently.

This sentence is correct as is. 'Don't allow' is present tense referring to general fact, and 'thought' is past tense referring to past belief. No correction needed.

× They believe that chocolate is a nutritional snacks that contains vitamins and antioxidants that.

✓ They believe that chocolate is a nutritional snack that contains vitamins and antioxidants.

'Snacks' should be singular 'snack' because it refers to chocolate as a type of snack. The sentence also had an unnecessary 'that' at the end which is removed for clarity.

× I think the main reason for chocolate popularity around the world is that chocolate is so delicious and nobody can reject to have a bite on it.

✓ I think the main reason for chocolate's popularity around the world is that chocolate is so delicious and nobody can refuse to have a bite of it.

'Chocolate popularity' needs possessive form 'chocolate's popularity'. 'Reject to have a bite on it' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'refuse to have a bite of it'. 'Refuse' is the correct verb and 'of' is the correct preposition here.

× Other than that, chocolate also a common gift option due to its wide acceptance.

✓ Other than that, chocolate is also a common gift option due to its wide acceptance.

The verb 'is' is missing after 'chocolate'. This is a sentence structure error but also relates to subject-verb agreement.

× I always prefer dark chocolate that contains 70% of cocoa because at the ratio the bitter and sweet flavours integrate perfectly and make it the most outstanding one.

✓ I always prefer dark chocolate that contains 70% cocoa because at that ratio the bitter and sweet flavours integrate perfectly and make it the most outstanding one.

'70% of cocoa' should be '70% cocoa' without 'of'. Also, 'at the ratio' should be 'at that ratio' to specify the particular ratio mentioned.

× Other than that, dark chocolate contains higher nutrition content than make milk chocolate, make it a healthier.

✓ Other than that, dark chocolate contains higher nutritional content than milk chocolate, making it healthier.

'Nutrition content' should be 'nutritional content'. 'Than make milk chocolate' is incorrect; it should be 'than milk chocolate'. 'Make it a healthier' is incorrect; it should be 'making it healthier' to correctly link the clauses.

× Yes, I believe that chocolate is an excellent option for gift, especially that are high graded and handmade.

✓ Yes, I believe that chocolate is an excellent option for a gift, especially those that are high grade and handmade.

'Option for gift' needs an article 'a gift'. 'That are high graded' is incorrect; it should be 'those that are high grade'. 'High graded' is not a correct adjective form; 'high grade' is the correct term.

× Although chocolate is not always the best gift for the receiver, it not the wrong one unless the person is allergic to chocolate.

✓ Although chocolate is not always the best gift for the receiver, it is not the wrong one unless the person is allergic to chocolate.

The verb 'is' is missing after 'it'. This is a sentence structure error affecting pronoun usage and verb agreement.