Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，且内容有些重复。建议简化句子结构，避免使用多余的填充词，并且注意时态一致性。

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and sweet, which makes me feel happy. However, as I grew older, I have to control my intake since chocolate is high in calories and can cause weight gain.

제안: 回答时态混乱，且表达不够连贯。建议使用正确的时态，并用连接词使回答更流畅。

예시: When I was a child, I used to eat chocolate every day because I loved it. However, in junior high school, I started to limit my consumption to about once a month to avoid gaining weight. I prefer dark chocolate because it is healthier and contains less sugar than milk chocolate.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不够清晰。建议直接回答问题，避免重复，并使用正确的时态和词汇。

예시: Yes, I ate chocolate every day when I was a kid because it made me very happy. It was a special treat for me during my childhood.

제안: 回答中有许多填充词，影响流畅性。建议减少口头语，使用更自然的表达，并且注意语法和词汇的准确性。

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is delicious and many people enjoy trying new foods. Additionally, it is often given as a romantic gift during special occasions like Valentine's Day.

제안: 回答中充满了填充词，且表达不够连贯。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并用适当的连接词连接句子。

예시: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it is sweet. Scientific studies have shown that sugar can increase happiness and reduce stress and anxiety.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和口语化表达，建议使用更正式和准确的句子结构，减少填充词。

예시: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift, especially during festivals like Valentine's Day. Boys often give chocolates to their girlfriends as a symbol of romance, which usually makes them very happy.

× because its flavour was really delicious, uh, really low.

✓ because its flavour is really delicious, uh, really light.

这里描述的是巧克力的味道，应该用现在时态，因为味道是持续存在的。原句中使用了过去时态“was”，不符合语境。建议使用现在时态“is”。

× really low

✓ really light

“low”通常用来形容数量或程度，描述味道时应使用“light”表示味道清淡。原句用词不当，建议改为“light”。

× The whipped chocolate because it's sweet and can bring more happiness and pleasure.

✓ I like whipped chocolate because it's sweet and can bring more happiness and pleasure.

句子缺少主语，导致表达不完整。应加上“I like”使句子完整。

× so I must control the amount I eat.

✓ so I have to control the amount I eat.

“must”用于表达强制性，口语中表达习惯用“have to”更自然。这里建议用“have to”替换“must”。

× when I was a kid, I usually eat every day because I really love it.

✓ when I was a kid, I usually ate every day because I really loved it.

描述过去习惯时，动词应使用过去时态。原句中“eat”和“love”应改为“ate”和“loved”。

× But when I was in junior high school, I must control it because I don't want to be a fat girl.

✓ But when I was in junior high school, I had to control it because I didn't want to be a fat girl.

描述过去的义务或必要性时，应该用“had to”而不是“must”。

× And I usually eat black chocolate because it's more healthy than milk chocolate, which has less sugar.

✓ And I usually eat dark chocolate because it's healthier than milk chocolate, which has less sugar.

“more healthy”应改为比较级“healthier”。“black chocolate”应为“dark chocolate”更常用。

× because I've been very happy and exciting to eat chocolate.

✓ because I have been very happy and excited to eat chocolate.

“exciting”是现在分词，形容人时应使用过去分词“excited”。

× chocolate, uh, is from foreign country

✓ chocolate, uh, is from a foreign country

“foreign country”前应加不定冠词“a”。

× if you send this gift, uh, to your girlfriends, she must think it's romantic.

✓ if you send this gift, uh, to your girlfriend, she must think it's romantic.

“girlfriends”复数与单数代词“she”不匹配，应统一为单数“girlfriend”。

× a lot of science research, uh, has showed that, uh, sugar can bring people more happiness and, uh, can make us feel less stressed and anxiety.

✓ a lot of scientific research, uh, has shown that, uh, sugar can bring people more happiness and, uh, can make us feel less stressed and anxious.

“science research”应为“scientific research”。“showed”应为过去分词“shown”。“anxiety”是名词，形容词应为“anxious”。

× And boys usually send chocolates as gift to their girlfriends and, uh, it's a symbol of romantic.

✓ And boys usually send chocolates as gifts to their girlfriends and, uh, it's a symbol of romance.

“gift”应为复数“gifts”。“romantic”是形容词，名词应为“romance”。

× I think, uh, it must make their girlfriends feels much happy.

✓ I think, uh, it must make their girlfriends feel very happy.

“feels”应为原形“feel”，因为前面有情态动词“must”。“much happy”应为“very happy”。