Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ਤੁਹਾਡੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਬਣਤਰ ਸਹੀ ਨਹੀਂ ਹੈ ਅਤੇ ਵਾਕਾਂਸ਼ ਅਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਹਨ। ਤੁਹਾਨੂੰ ਸਿੱਧਾ ਅਤੇ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਜਵਾਬ ਦੇਣਾ ਚਾਹੀਦਾ ਹੈ ਅਤੇ ਵਧੀਆ ਵਾਕਾਂਸ਼ ਬਣਾਉਣ ਲਈ ਸਹੀ ਕ੍ਰਿਆਵਾਂ ਅਤੇ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਵਰਤੋਂ ਕਰਨੀ ਚਾਹੀਦੀ ਹੈ।

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and can boost my mood after a long day.

제안: ਤੁਹਾਡੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਗ੍ਰਾਮਰ ਦੀਆਂ ਗਲਤੀਆਂ ਹਨ ਅਤੇ ਵਾਕਾਂਸ਼ ਲੰਬੇ ਅਤੇ ਕੁਝ ਹੱਦ ਤੱਕ ਅਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਹਨ। ਤੁਸੀਂ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਅਤੇ ਸੰਖੇਪ ਜਵਾਬ ਦੇਣ ਲਈ ਵਾਕਾਂਸ਼ਾਂ ਨੂੰ ਸੁਧਾਰ ਸਕਦੇ ਹੋ ਅਤੇ ਲਿੰਕਿੰਗ ਸ਼ਬਦਾਂ ਦੀ ਵਰਤੋਂ ਕਰ ਸਕਦੇ ਹੋ।

예시: I don't eat chocolate regularly, but sometimes when I feel tired, I eat it because it refreshes me and makes me feel relaxed.

제안: ਤੁਹਾਡੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਬਣਤਰ ਗਲਤ ਹੈ ਅਤੇ ਵਾਕਾਂਸ਼ ਬਹੁਤ ਲੰਬੇ ਅਤੇ ਅਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਹਨ। ਤੁਸੀਂ ਸਿੱਧਾ ਜਵਾਬ ਦੇ ਕੇ ਅਤੇ ਸਹੀ ਕ੍ਰਿਆਵਾਂ ਦੀ ਵਰਤੋਂ ਕਰਕੇ ਇਸਨੂੰ ਸੁਧਾਰ ਸਕਦੇ ਹੋ।

예시: When I was a child, I often ate chocolate regularly because I loved its sweet and delicious taste.

제안: ਤੁਹਾਡੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਬਣਤਰ ਬਹੁਤ ਗਲਤ ਹੈ ਅਤੇ ਵਾਕਾਂਸ਼ ਅਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਹਨ। ਤੁਸੀਂ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਅਤੇ ਲਾਜ਼ਮੀ ਤੱਥਾਂ ਨਾਲ ਜਵਾਬ ਦੇਣਾ ਚਾਹੀਦਾ ਹੈ ਅਤੇ ਲਿੰਕਿੰਗ ਸ਼ਬਦਾਂ ਦੀ ਵਰਤੋਂ ਕਰਨੀ ਚਾਹੀਦੀ ਹੈ।

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because of its sweet taste, it refreshes the mind, and people often give it as a gift on special occasions like anniversaries and birthdays.

제안: ਤੁਹਾਡੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਗ੍ਰਾਮਰ ਅਤੇ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਬਣਤਰ ਵਿੱਚ ਗਲਤੀਆਂ ਹਨ। ਤੁਸੀਂ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਅਤੇ ਸੰਖੇਪ ਜਵਾਬ ਦੇਣ ਲਈ ਵਾਕਾਂਸ਼ਾਂ ਨੂੰ ਸੁਧਾਰ ਸਕਦੇ ਹੋ ਅਤੇ ਸਹੀ ਕ੍ਰਿਆਵਾਂ ਦੀ ਵਰਤੋਂ ਕਰ ਸਕਦੇ ਹੋ।

예시: My favorite chocolate flavor is vanilla because I liked it since childhood, and it gives me more energy when I eat it.

제안: ਤੁਹਾਡੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਬਣਤਰ ਬਹੁਤ ਗਲਤ ਹੈ ਅਤੇ ਅਰਥ ਸਮਝਣਾ ਮੁਸ਼ਕਲ ਹੈ। ਤੁਸੀਂ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਅਤੇ ਲਾਜ਼ਮੀ ਤੱਥਾਂ ਨਾਲ ਜਵਾਬ ਦੇਣਾ ਚਾਹੀਦਾ ਹੈ ਅਤੇ ਗ੍ਰਾਮਰ ਦੀਆਂ ਗਲਤੀਆਂ ਨੂੰ ਸੁਧਾਰਨਾ ਚਾਹੀਦਾ ਹੈ।

예시: Yes, chocolate is a good gift because it is easy to give and lasts for a reasonable time, making it suitable for many occasions.

× I guess I like to eating chocolate because it's that good for the health if I have to eat after that time, after some time.

✓ I guess I like eating chocolate because it's good for health if I eat it after some time.

The verb 'like' should be followed by the gerund form 'eating' instead of the infinitive 'to eating'. Also, 'that good for the health' is awkward; 'good for health' is more natural. 'If I have to eat after that time' is unclear and corrected to 'if I eat it after some time' for clarity.

× So yeah, given the some benefit to the health.

✓ So yeah, it gives some benefits to health.

The phrase 'given the some benefit' is incorrect. 'Given' is not appropriate here; 'it gives' is better. Also, 'some benefit' should be plural 'some benefits' to match the context, and 'to the health' should be 'to health'.

× I'm not to eat the chocolate in the regular basis but sometimes I will feel tired on that time.

✓ I don't eat chocolate regularly, but sometimes I feel tired at that time.

The phrase 'I'm not to eat' is incorrect; 'I don't eat' is correct. 'In the regular basis' should be 'regularly'. 'On that time' should be 'at that time'.

× I want to eat chocolate because they refreshed me and I feel more relaxed and positive after eating the chocolate.

✓ I want to eat chocolate because it refreshes me and I feel more relaxed and positive after eating chocolate.

'Chocolate' is singular and uncountable, so the pronoun should be 'it' not 'they'. Also, 'refreshed' should be present tense 'refreshes' to match the habitual action.

× In the childhood time I have to I often eat the chocolate and the regular basis for that time I eat the chocolate like as a sweet but because it's more delicious into the taste.

✓ In my childhood, I often ate chocolate regularly because it tasted delicious.

'Have to I often eat' is incorrect; past tense 'ate' is needed. 'The regular basis' should be 'regularly'. 'Like as a sweet' is awkward and unnecessary. 'More delicious into the taste' is incorrect; 'tasted delicious' is correct.

× Travelers are more popular all over the world course sweet taste at the refresh the mind and people can to gift to any other person for the special occasion like the anniversary, manufactions and birthday parties.

✓ Chocolate is popular all over the world because of its sweet taste that refreshes the mind, and people can gift it to others on special occasions like anniversaries, marriages, and birthday parties.

The original sentence is confusing and has incorrect subject 'Travelers'. The correct subject is 'Chocolate'. 'Course sweet taste at the refresh the mind' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'because of its sweet taste that refreshes the mind'. 'Can to gift to any other person' should be 'can gift it to others'. 'Manufactions' is likely a misspelling of 'marriages'.

× My favorite favorite flavor in the chocolate is the vanilla was I like that is flavor in my childhood time and I feel more energy if I have to eat the that flavor into the chocolate.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is vanilla because I liked that flavor in my childhood, and I feel more energetic when I eat chocolate with that flavor.

Repeated 'favorite' is redundant. 'In the chocolate' should be 'of chocolate'. 'Was I like that is flavor' is incorrect; corrected to 'because I liked that flavor'. 'Feel more energy' should be 'feel more energetic'. 'If I have to eat the that flavor into the chocolate' is awkward; corrected to 'when I eat chocolate with that flavor'.

× Uh definitely is a very good way as a gift.

✓ Uh, it is definitely a very good gift.

The sentence lacks a subject 'it'. 'Is a very good way as a gift' is awkward; 'a very good gift' is clearer.

× God is the very easy to hear and it not can be destroyed in the short time period in the long life known about as a long life people can't to zoom for.

✓ Chocolate is very easy to store and it cannot be destroyed in a short period; it has a long shelf life, so people can't consume it quickly.

'God' is likely a typo for 'Good' or 'Chocolate'. 'Very easy to hear' is incorrect; likely meant 'easy to store'. 'It not can be destroyed' should be 'it cannot be destroyed'. The rest is unclear and corrected for clarity and grammar.