Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for a more natural flow. For example, instead of repeating 'I eat chocolate' twice, combine your ideas into one concise sentence. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because of its sweet taste. I usually have it three or four times a week as a dessert after my main meal, which gives me great pleasure.

제안: Your answer is relevant but a bit repetitive and could be more concise. Try to avoid repeating the same information and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, watch out for small grammar mistakes like 'in a mood' which should be 'in the mood'.

예시: I eat chocolate quite often, usually three or four times a week as a dessert after my main meal. Sometimes, I also have it as a snack when I'm in the mood.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be improved by correcting grammar and avoiding filler words like 'uh'. Use past tense consistently and provide a more natural sentence structure. Also, try to add a linking word to connect your ideas.

예시: No, not really. My parents didn't allow me to eat much chocolate because they believed it was unhealthy and bad for my teeth. Therefore, I rarely ate chocolate when I was young.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but contains some grammar errors and awkward phrasing. Avoid contractions like 'it's' for 'its' and use correct word forms. Also, try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence clarity by restructuring sentences and using linking words.

예시: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide because of its sweet and milky flavour, especially among young children. Even older people enjoy it despite health concerns.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about the types of nuts or varieties you like.

예시: I don't have a fixed favourite, but I enjoy milk chocolate with nuts inside. The crunchy texture complements the milky flavour, and I really like those varieties.

제안: Your answer is thoughtful but could be improved by avoiding filler words and repetitive phrases. Use linking words to make your points clearer and more coherent. Also, try to use more natural expressions like 'may not be appropriate' instead of 'not much appropriate'.

예시: I think it depends on the person's age and preferences. For example, young children would definitely enjoy chocolate as a gift, but it may not be appropriate for older people due to health concerns. Overall, chocolates make a great gift.

× I eat the chocolate 3 or 4 times a week as a dessert after my main meal.

✓ I eat chocolate 3 or 4 times a week as a dessert after my main meal.

The use of 'the' before 'chocolate' is incorrect here because we are talking about chocolate in general, not a specific chocolate. Removing 'the' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× It gives me a pleasure.

✓ It gives me pleasure.

The phrase 'give me a pleasure' is incorrect because 'pleasure' is an uncountable noun here. We do not use 'a' with uncountable nouns. The correct phrase is 'gives me pleasure'.

× I have a chocolate 3 or 4 times a week after my main meal as a dessert, or even when I am in a mood for a snack, I usually have a chocolate.

✓ I have chocolate 3 or 4 times a week after my main meal as a dessert, or even when I am in the mood for a snack, I usually have chocolate.

The use of 'a' before 'chocolate' is incorrect when referring to chocolate in general. Also, the phrase 'in a mood' should be 'in the mood' as it is a fixed expression.

× So when I was young I rarely eat a chocolate as a sweet.

✓ So when I was young I rarely ate chocolate as a sweet.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was young'), so the verb should be in the past tense 'ate' instead of 'eat'. Also, 'a chocolate' should be 'chocolate' as it is uncountable here.

× I believe most of the people like it's sweet flavor and the Milky taste, especially among young children.

✓ I believe most people like its sweet flavour and the milky taste, especially among young children.

The pronoun 'it's' is a contraction of 'it is' which is incorrect here. The possessive pronoun 'its' should be used to indicate possession. Also, 'most of the people' is better as 'most people' in this context. 'Milky' should not be capitalised.

× It's really quite popular and I even elders like to have a chocolate rather than uh, concerning about their health matters.

✓ It's really quite popular and even elders like to have chocolate rather than, uh, be concerned about their health matters.

The phrase 'I even elders' is incorrect; 'even elders' is correct. Also, 'concerning about' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'be concerned about'. 'A chocolate' should be 'chocolate' as it is uncountable here.

× I do not have a fixed preference, but I enjoy eating milk chocolate in which has some nuts or uh inside it.

✓ I do not have a fixed preference, but I enjoy eating milk chocolate which has some nuts inside it.

The phrase 'in which has some nuts or uh inside it' is awkward and incorrect. 'Which has some nuts inside it' is the correct relative clause. Also, 'or uh' is unnecessary and should be removed.

× It gives a crunchy flavor apart from the Milky taste and I really enjoy having those varieties.

✓ It gives a crunchy flavour apart from the milky taste and I really enjoy having those varieties.

'Milky' should not be capitalised. The rest of the sentence is correct.

× For example, young kids will definitely enjoy a chocolate gift.

✓ For example, young kids will definitely enjoy a chocolate gift.

This sentence is correct as 'a chocolate gift' refers to a specific gift, so 'a' is appropriate.

× However, I believe for elders it's not much appropriate as they might have some health concerns.

✓ However, I believe for elders it's not very appropriate as they might have some health concerns.

The phrase 'not much appropriate' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'not very appropriate' to express degree.