Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to reduce filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, organize your ideas clearly by starting with a topic sentence and then giving specific reasons with linking words.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and gives me energy. For example, after eating chocolate, I feel more motivated and able to focus on my work throughout the day.

제안: Avoid frequent use of filler words and try to make your answer more concise and coherent by using linking words to connect your ideas.

예시: I eat chocolate almost every day, usually with my cup of coffee. After eating it, I feel energized and ready to complete my tasks.

제안: Make your sentences clearer and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons.

예시: Yes, I used to eat chocolate almost every day as a child because I have a sweet tooth. I preferred chocolate over other foods like vegetables.

제안: Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid repeating the word 'chocolate' too often. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide because it brings happiness. It is sweet and can boost a person's energy, motivation, and mood.

제안: Your answer is unclear and confusing. Try to give a direct answer with clear vocabulary and avoid unnecessary questions or filler words.

예시: My favorite flavor of chocolate is milk chocolate because it is creamy and sweet, which I enjoy the most.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I think giving chocolate as a gift is a great idea because it can bring happiness and positive energy to the person. It also shows that you care about their mood and well-being.

× I love uh, to have some with my cup of coffee, uh, and after eating some chocolate, I feel more, umm, energized.

✓ I love having some with my cup of coffee, and after eating some chocolate, I feel more energized.

The verb 'love' is typically followed by a gerund (-ing form) when expressing enjoyment of an activity. Therefore, 'to have' should be corrected to 'having' to fit standard English usage.

× I enjoyed the sweet tooth and I prefer it to eat just the chocolate instead of other dishes.

✓ I enjoyed the sweet taste and I prefer to eat just the chocolate instead of other dishes.

The phrase 'sweet tooth' refers to a craving, not a taste itself. The correct term here is 'sweet taste'. Also, 'prefer it to eat' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer to eat' without 'it'.

× I prefer it to eat just the chocolate instead of other dishes.

✓ I prefer to eat just the chocolate instead of other dishes.

The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context. The verb 'prefer' should be directly followed by the infinitive 'to eat' without 'it'.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is chocolate. Is brown chocolate with milk just white chocolate? Umm to buy chocolate? Uh, this tree is the best for me.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is milk chocolate. Is it brown chocolate with milk or just white chocolate? To buy chocolate, this three is the best for me.

The original sentences are unclear and contain pronoun errors. 'Is brown chocolate with milk just white chocolate?' lacks a subject and proper structure. Adding 'Is it' clarifies the question. Also, 'this tree' likely intends 'this three' or 'this type', but context is unclear; assuming 'this three' refers to a selection. Pronouns and sentence structure need correction for clarity.

× I think chocolate is popular because chocolate is a piece of happiness from my point of view, chocolate, uh, is sweet, uh, has opportunity to give a person energy, motivation, good mood and so.

✓ I think chocolate is popular because, from my point of view, chocolate is a piece of happiness. It is sweet and has the opportunity to give a person energy, motivation, and a good mood.

The original sentence repeats 'chocolate' unnecessarily and lacks proper pronouns to connect ideas smoothly. Using 'it' replaces repeated nouns and improves sentence flow. Also, 'has opportunity' should be 'has the opportunity' for grammatical correctness.