Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如时态使用不当和句子结构不完整。建议注意时态一致性，避免重复表达，并且使句子更流畅自然。

예시: Yes, I love sweets, especially chocolate. Whenever I feel upset or face difficulties, I choose to eat chocolate because it helps me feel happier and more relaxed. Therefore, chocolate is quite important to me.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题，且句子不连贯。建议使用正确的时态，避免语句中断，并且使表达更完整和连贯。

예시: I usually eat chocolate twice a week because it is not very healthy. Although I often want to eat more, I try to control myself to maintain a balanced diet.

제안: 回答中时态使用不当，且表达略显重复。建议注意过去时态的正确使用，并且避免重复表达。

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid. I believe most children like chocolate because it is sweet and tastes delicious.

제안: 回答中句子不完整，表达不够自然。建议使用完整句子，增加连接词，使表达更流畅。

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because of its delicious flavor, and most people enjoy eating sweets. In fact, it's hard to find someone who can refuse a bar of chocolate.

제안: 回答中表达不清晰，句子结构混乱，且有语法错误。建议明确表达喜好，使用正确的句子结构，并避免无关信息。

예시: I prefer milk chocolate over dark chocolate with 90% cocoa. For example, M&M's is one of my favorite chocolate brands because I enjoy its sweet taste.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达重复，句子结构不够清晰。建议简化句子，注意语法正确性，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

예시: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift because many people love sweets. Giving chocolate can make others feel happy and relaxed when they enjoy it.

× When I was upset or I found something difficult, I will choose to eat the chocolate and to let myself feel more happy and relaxing.

✓ When I was upset or found something difficult, I would choose to eat chocolate to let myself feel happier and more relaxed.

这里的时间是过去，所以不能用将来时态的“will”，应该用表示过去习惯的“would”。另外，'more happy' 应改为比较级 'happier'，'relaxing' 应改为形容词 'relaxed'。

× Chocolate is quite important to me because it can makes my emotions feel.

✓ Chocolate is quite important to me because it can make my emotions feel better.

情态动词 'can' 后面动词应为原形，不能加 's'。此外，句子不完整，'feel' 后应加补语，如 'feel better'。

× I ate chocolate twice a week actually, uh, chocolate is not that healthy so I control myself that I can only eat twice a week.

✓ I eat chocolate twice a week actually. Uh, chocolate is not that healthy, so I control myself to only eat it twice a week.

这里描述的是现在的习惯，应使用一般现在时 'eat' 而非过去时 'ate'。另外，'control myself that I can only eat' 结构不正确，应改为 'control myself to only eat'。

× So even though I always want to eat more but I the.

✓ So even though I always want to eat more, I don't.

句子结构不完整，缺少谓语动词，导致句意不明。应补充完整表达。

× Yes, I often eat chocolate when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid.

描述过去的习惯动作，应使用过去时 'ate'，而非现在时 'eat'。

× I'm sure that most of the kids like eating chocolate nowadays because chocolate is sweet and they all like eating food that are sweet.

✓ I'm sure that most kids like eating chocolate nowadays because chocolate is sweet and they all like eating food that is sweet.

'most of the kids' 可简化为 'most kids'。'food' 是不可数名词，后面应接单数动词 'is'，而非复数 'are'。

× In order to have a 90% of dark chocolate, I prefer to have a milk chocolate.

✓ I prefer to have milk chocolate rather than 90% dark chocolate.

'a 90% of dark chocolate' 表达不自然，且 'a milk chocolate' 应去掉冠词 'a'，因为 'milk chocolate' 是不可数名词。

× So for example, our most popular brand, M&M, it's one of my favorite chocolate flavor and brands, uh, I love the sweets more than Beetrobin.

✓ For example, our most popular brand, M&M, is one of my favorite chocolate flavors and brands. Uh, I love sweets more than Beetrobin.

'it's' 应改为 'is' 指代品牌。'flavor' 应用复数 'flavors'。'the sweets' 不需要定冠词，且 'more than Beetrobin' 结构不完整，需明确比较对象。

× Yes, I think it's good to use chocolate as gift to others.

✓ Yes, I think it's good to use chocolate as a gift for others.

'gift' 前应加不定冠词 'a'，'to others' 应改为 'for others'。

× ...which can let them feel happy when they eating chocolates.

✓ ...which can let them feel happy when they are eating chocolates.

动词 'eat' 在此处应使用进行时态 'are eating'，表示正在进行的动作。

× Also we can when we share the sweetness to others they can feel more relaxing and enjoyable.

✓ Also, when we share sweetness with others, they can feel more relaxed and enjoy themselves.

句子结构混乱，缺少主谓搭配。'share the sweetness to others' 应改为 'share sweetness with others'。'relaxing' 和 'enjoyable' 应改为形容词 'relaxed' 和动词短语 'enjoy themselves'。