Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using correct grammar and avoiding repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it reminds me of my childhood. When I was young, I used to eat a lot of chocolate until my mother warned me that eating too much could upset my stomach. Since then, I have been careful but still enjoy it occasionally.

제안: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and clear sentences. Avoid unclear phrases and try to give specific frequency and reasons.

예시: I usually eat chocolate about twice a day because it makes me feel happy. Also, it reminds me of my childhood when my mother used to encourage me to enjoy small treats.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by using better grammar and linking words to make it more natural and effective.

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because my aunt always bought it from the market. She knew I loved chocolate, so I ate a lot until my mother asked me to stop.

제안: Try to avoid starting sentences with 'And'. Use more precise vocabulary and explain your ideas with specific reasons.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because of its delicious taste and smooth texture. Many people enjoy it as a sweet treat that looks appealing and satisfies their cravings.

제안: Improve your answer by using correct grammar and clearer sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: My favorite flavor is dark chocolate because it has less sugar. When I was a child, I liked sweet chocolate, but as I grew older, I preferred darker, less sweet varieties.

제안: Make your answer clearer and more natural by avoiding filler words and organizing your ideas logically with linking words.

예시: Yes, giving chocolate as a gift is a good idea because it makes people feel happy and surprised. It can be an unforgettable present that shows you care.

× As I enjoy eating chocolate because it's remind me of the time when I was a child because at that time I would say I eat chocolate so much and until my mom told me that if you eat too much chocolate you will get sick or get a stomach upset.

✓ As I enjoy eating chocolate because it reminds me of the time when I was a child. At that time, I would say I ate chocolate so much until my mom told me that if you eat too much chocolate you will get sick or get a stomach upset.

The verb 'remind' should be in third person singular form 'reminds' to agree with the subject 'it'. Also, 'eat' in 'I eat chocolate so much' should be past tense 'ate' to match the past time reference. The sentence was long and confusing, so it was split for clarity.

× I eat chocolate acquire of 10 I would say it usually about twice a day because eating chocolate I would make me feel happy and every time when I each glad it remind me of one activity when I was a child because my mom always told me to she.

✓ I eat chocolate about 2 out of 10 days; I would say usually about twice a day because eating chocolate makes me feel happy. Every time I eat chocolate, it reminds me of an activity when I was a child because my mom always told me to do so.

The phrase 'acquire of 10' is incorrect; it should be 'about 2 out of 10 days' or similar. 'I each glad' is incorrect; it should be 'I eat chocolate'. 'Remind' should be 'reminds' for subject-verb agreement. The sentence was restructured for clarity and grammar correctness.

× She know exactly that I like eating chocolate so much.

✓ She knows exactly that I like eating chocolate so much.

The verb 'know' should be in third person singular form 'knows' to agree with the subject 'She'.

× So at the time I ate so much chocolate until my mom asked me to stop eating it.

✓ So at that time, I ate so much chocolate until my mom asked me to stop eating it.

The sentence is mostly correct but adding 'that' after 'at' improves clarity. The past tense 'ate' and 'asked' are correctly used here.

× And the chocolate is likely a dessert that very popular across the world because of it taste and the texture.

✓ Chocolate is likely a dessert that is very popular across the world because of its taste and texture.

The definite article 'the' before 'chocolate' is unnecessary when speaking generally. 'It taste' should be 'its taste' to show possession. Added 'is' before 'very popular' for correct sentence structure.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate it would be the dark chocolate with quite less sugar because I, I don't like sweet chocolate.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate would be dark chocolate with less sugar because I don't like sweet chocolate.

'Quite less sugar' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'less sugar'. Also, 'the dark chocolate' can be simplified to 'dark chocolate' when speaking generally. Removed unnecessary repetition and corrected sentence structure.

× I would say when I was a child I used to eat a lot of sweet chocolate until, uh, when I were, I were adult, I didn't like it anymore.

✓ I would say when I was a child I used to eat a lot of sweet chocolate until, when I was an adult, I didn't like it anymore.

'I were' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I was' for first person singular past tense. Added 'an' before 'adult' for correct article usage.

× Yes, it is a good idea to use chocolate as a gift to others because it's time of give My uh, made them feel more excited and feel proud of what you uh, have something surprise for them, so it would be unforgettable gift for them.

✓ Yes, it is a good idea to use chocolate as a gift for others because it is a time to give. It makes them feel more excited and proud when you have a surprise for them, so it would be an unforgettable gift for them.

'Time of give' is incorrect; it should be 'time to give'. 'Made them feel' should be 'makes them feel' to match present tense. 'Something surprise' should be 'a surprise'. Added articles 'an' before 'unforgettable gift'. The sentence was restructured for clarity and grammar correctness.