Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating similar ideas and try to use linking words to connect your points smoothly. Also, clarify what you mean by "affects my mind" to make your answer more specific.

예시: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and comes in many forms, like bars or with hazelnuts. Moreover, I find it refreshing and uplifting, especially when I need a quick energy boost.

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and incomplete. Try to give a full sentence and explain your reason more clearly. Avoid filler words like "umm" and make sure your grammar is correct.

예시: I usually eat chocolate about once a month, especially during my period because it helps me feel better and refreshed.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct some grammar mistakes, such as "enjoyed eating" instead of "enjoyed to eat."

예시: Yes, I loved chocolate as a kid, but my parents limited how much I could have because they thought it was unhealthy. Nevertheless, I always enjoyed eating it whenever I got the chance.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer organization and vocabulary. Avoid repetition and filler words. Also, clarify "sea chocolates" (probably a mistake) and use linking words to connect your points logically.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because many people, especially women, enjoy its taste. Additionally, it can be used in various desserts like cakes and cupcakes, and even in hot drinks during winter, making it a versatile and comforting treat.

제안: Your answer is good but could be more fluent and natural. Avoid filler words and clarify your ideas. Also, try to explain why hazelnuts make you feel healthy despite the sugar content.

예시: My favorite flavor is milk chocolate with hazelnuts because it's light and the nuts add a healthy crunch, even though I know chocolate contains a lot of sugar. I still enjoy eating it occasionally.

제안: Your answer has good points but needs clearer structure and grammar. Avoid filler words and run-on sentences. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift because it is often considered a luxury item. Many people enjoy trying different types of chocolate from around the world, so it can be a thoughtful and enjoyable present.

× I eat chocolates umm once a month because when I got my period I feel like my body needs some chocolates to refresh it and I like.

✓ I eat chocolate umm once a month because when I get my period I feel like my body needs some chocolate to refresh it and I like it.

The word 'chocolates' is incorrectly used in plural form when referring to chocolate in general or as an uncountable noun. 'Chocolate' should be singular here. Also, 'got' should be 'get' to match the present tense context. Additionally, 'I like' is incomplete and should be 'I like it' for clarity.

× I eat chocolates umm once a month because when I got my period I feel like my body needs some chocolates to refresh it and I like.

✓ I eat chocolate umm once a month because when I get my period I feel like my body needs some chocolate to refresh it and I like it.

The verb 'got' is in the past tense but the sentence context requires present tense 'get' because the speaker is describing a habitual action.

× Yes, when I was a kid I really loved chocolates, but my parents told me that they are unhealthy, so they did not buy it for me too much.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid I really loved chocolate, but my parents told me that it is unhealthy, so they did not buy it for me too much.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun when referring to chocolate in general. Also, 'they are unhealthy' should be 'it is unhealthy' because 'chocolate' is singular and uncountable.

× But in all cases I really loved it and enjoyed to eat it.

✓ But in all cases I really loved it and enjoyed eating it.

The verb 'enjoy' is followed by a gerund (-ing form), not an infinitive. Therefore, 'enjoyed to eat' is incorrect; it should be 'enjoyed eating'.

× I think chocolates is popular around the world because many, many people like sea chocolates, especially women.

✓ I think chocolate is popular around the world because many, many people like sweet chocolate, especially women.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun when referring to chocolate in general. Also, 'sea chocolates' seems to be a mishearing or typo; it should be 'sweet chocolate' to make sense.

× And you can add chocolates to many sweets like cakes, croissants, cupcakes, uh, you can use it in even hot chocolates in the winter.

✓ And you can add chocolate to many sweets like cakes, croissants, cupcakes, uh, you can use it even in hot chocolate in the winter.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun when referring to chocolate as an ingredient. Also, 'hot chocolates' should be 'hot chocolate' as a drink.

× I like the milk chocolate because I think it's very light and I love when they add the hazelnuts to it.

✓ I like milk chocolate because I think it's very light and I love when they add hazelnuts to it.

'The milk chocolate' is incorrect; 'milk chocolate' is used without 'the' here. Also, 'the hazelnuts' should be 'hazelnuts' without 'the' when speaking generally.

× But still, I would love to eat them.

✓ But still, I would love to eat it.

Referring to 'chocolate' as 'them' is incorrect because 'chocolate' is uncountable and singular here; 'it' is the correct pronoun.

× Yes, I think chocolates are umm, good to use as a gift because chocolate can be expensive too many people they would love eat and try different types of chocolates all over the world.

✓ Yes, I think chocolate is umm, good to use as a gift because chocolate can be expensive and many people would love to eat and try different types of chocolate all over the world.

'Chocolates are' should be 'chocolate is' when referring to chocolate in general. Also, 'too many people they would love eat' is incorrect and should be 'and many people would love to eat'. 'Types of chocolates' should be 'types of chocolate'.

× Yes, I think chocolates are umm, good to use as a gift because chocolate can be expensive too many people they would love eat and try different types of chocolates all over the world.

✓ Yes, I think chocolate is umm, good to use as a gift because chocolate can be expensive and many people would love to eat and try different types of chocolate all over the world.

The sentence lacks proper conjunction between 'expensive' and 'too many people'; 'and' should be used to connect the ideas properly.