Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and shows enthusiasm, but try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of repeating 'chocolate' multiple times, use pronouns or synonyms. Also, correct grammar errors like 'products which made from chocolate' to 'products made from chocolate'.

예시: Yes, I absolutely love chocolate because it has a unique and classic taste. Whenever I visit a cafe or restaurant, I usually choose desserts made from it.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correcting grammar, such as 'get rid from stress' should be 'relieve stress'. Also, avoid unnecessary details that do not add value.

예시: I don't have a fixed routine for eating chocolate; however, I usually eat it when I feel low because it helps me relieve stress. For instance, last week, after a disappointing experience with a friend, I ate some chocolate to feel better.

제안: Try to use correct grammar and avoid repetition, such as 'I have I have'. Also, use more precise vocabulary like 'a lot of chocolate' instead of 'very much chocolates'. Adding linking words will improve coherence.

예시: Yes, chocolate was my favourite as a child, so I used to eat a lot of it. My father often bought me chocolate when I was sad, which is why I developed the habit of eating it whenever I feel low.

제안: Your answer covers good points but can be improved by using linking words like 'because' and 'also', and by correcting grammar such as 'most of the people' to 'most people'. Avoid repeating 'that's why it is very popular'.

예시: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide because it has a unique taste. Also, it is budget-friendly, so most people can afford it.

제안: Improve grammar by using correct plural forms like 'many flavours' instead of 'much flavour'. Also, avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: To be honest, I haven't tried many flavours of chocolate because there aren't many available in my city. Therefore, classic chocolate is my favourite flavour.

제안: Your answer has some grammar mistakes like 'chocolate are' should be 'chocolate is' and 'it's depend' should be 'it depends'. Also, the statement 'Most of the young people do not like to eat chocolate' is likely incorrect and weakens your answer. Try to provide more balanced and accurate opinions with linking words.

예시: Yes, I believe chocolate is a great gift, but it depends on the recipient. Some people, such as older individuals, may not prefer it, while many young people enjoy chocolate.

× Chocolate is my first love because it has a unique and a classic taste.

✓ Chocolate is my first love because it has a unique and classic taste.

In English, when two adjectives are used together to describe a noun, the article 'a' is used only before the first adjective. Using 'a' before both 'unique' and 'classic' is incorrect. The correct form is 'a unique and classic taste.'

× That's why whenever I visit a cafe or a restaurant, I eat products which made from chocolate.

✓ That's why whenever I visit a cafe or a restaurant, I eat products which are made from chocolate.

The relative clause 'which made from chocolate' is missing the auxiliary verb 'are' to form the passive voice. The correct structure is 'which are made from chocolate.'

× It helps me to get rid from stress.

✓ It helps me to get rid of stress.

The correct preposition after 'get rid' is 'of,' not 'from.' The phrase should be 'get rid of stress.'

× Last week my friend betrayed me for some new friends so I was eating chocolate.

✓ Last week my friend betrayed me for some new friends, so I ate chocolate.

The past simple tense 'ate' is appropriate here to describe a completed action in the past. Using past continuous 'was eating' is incorrect in this context.

× Yes, it's my favorite thing, so I eat very much chocolates.

✓ Yes, it's my favorite thing, so I eat a lot of chocolate.

'Chocolate' is an uncountable noun, so 'much chocolates' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'a lot of chocolate.'

× That's why I have I have a habit of eating chocolate when I feel low.

✓ That's why I have a habit of eating chocolate when I feel low.

The phrase 'I have' is repeated unnecessarily. Removing the repetition improves clarity.

× Yes, I believe chocolate are great for gifting, but sometimes it's depend on the person who we are gifting.

✓ Yes, I believe chocolate is great for gifting, but sometimes it depends on the person to whom we are gifting.

'Chocolate' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are.' Also, 'it's depend' is incorrect; it should be 'it depends.' The relative clause should use 'to whom' for correctness.

× However, some people do not like to eat chocolate, for example, old people. Most of the young people do not like to eat chocolate.

✓ However, some people do not like to eat chocolate, for example, old people. Most young people do not like to eat chocolate.

The phrase 'Most of the young people' is better expressed as 'Most young people' for naturalness and correctness.