Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid grammatical errors and redundancy. For example, "it's had" should be "it has" or "it has a perfect balance". Also, avoid repeating the same idea twice, like mentioning the flavor twice. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because I love its rich and creamy flavor. My favorite type is milk chocolate as it has a perfect balance of sweetness and smoothness, which is not too dark or bitter for my taste. I often eat it as a small treat to relax after a long day.

제안: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Avoid repeating phrases like "I don't like I don't want to". Use linking words to explain reasons clearly. Also, correct grammar such as "I'm the person that easy to get pimples" to "I am a person who easily gets pimples".

예시: I usually eat chocolate twice a week because I am a person who easily gets pimples and is sensitive to daily products, so I prefer not to eat too much.

제안: Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. For example, "I often ate chocolate when I was a kid". Also, avoid repeating "when I was a kid" twice. Use linking words to make the answer more coherent.

예시: I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because I really liked sweets; they made me enjoy the sweet taste.

제안: Clarify unclear phrases like "Chocolate Geek" which seems incorrect. Use more precise vocabulary and linking words. For example, explain that chocolate's sweet and creamy taste appeals to many people worldwide.

예시: Chocolate is popular around the world because most people enjoy sweets, and chocolate offers a delicious combination of sweetness and creaminess.

제안: Use consistent tense and avoid minor grammatical errors. For example, "it had" should be "it has" and "I enjoyed it especially when I want" should be "I enjoy it especially when I want". Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: My favorite type of chocolate is milk chocolate because it has a smooth and creamy taste that is perfectly balanced—not too sweet and not too bitter. I especially enjoy it when I want a comforting treat that isn't overwhelming. For example, I often eat milk chocolate after a long day to relax.

제안: Improve grammar and sentence structure. For example, "most of people gives" should be "most people give". Avoid filler words like "umm". Use linking words to explain reasons clearly.

예시: In my perspective, yes, because most people give chocolate to others during holidays, for example, Valentine's Day. It represents love and care for other people.

× Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because I love it's rich and creamy flavor and my favorite type is milk chocolate since it's had a perfect balance of sweetness and smoothness which is not too dark or bitter for my taste.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because I love its rich and creamy flavor and my favorite type is milk chocolate since it has a perfect balance of sweetness and smoothness which is not too dark or bitter for my taste.

The pronoun 'it's' is a contraction for 'it is' or 'it has', but here the possessive pronoun 'its' is needed to show ownership. Also, 'it's had' is incorrect because the present perfect tense is not appropriate here; 'it has' should be used to describe a current state. Use 'it has' instead of 'it's had'. (English explanation)

× I usually eat chocolate twice a week because I'm the person that easy to get pimples and sensitive to daily products so I don't like I don't want to eat too much.

✓ I usually eat chocolate twice a week because I am a person who easily gets pimples and is sensitive to daily products, so I don't want to eat too much.

The sentence has incorrect verb forms and missing auxiliary verbs. 'easy to get pimples' should be 'easily gets pimples' to correctly use the adverb and verb agreement. Also, 'I don't like I don't want to eat too much' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'I don't want to eat too much'. (English explanation)

× I often eat chocolate when I was a kid because when I was a kid I really like eating sweets because it made me feel the taste of the sweetness.

✓ I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because I really liked eating sweets as it made me enjoy the sweet taste.

The verb tense should be consistent in past tense when referring to past events. 'I often eat' should be 'I often ate' and 'I really like' should be 'I really liked' to match 'when I was a kid'. (English explanation)

× Chocolate is popular around the world because most of people like eating sweets and Chocolate Geek gives the taste of the sweetness and creaminess.

✓ Chocolate is popular around the world because most people like eating sweets and Chocolate Geek gives the taste of sweetness and creaminess.

The phrase 'most of people' is incorrect; it should be 'most people' without 'of'. Also, 'the taste of the sweetness' is better as 'the taste of sweetness' to sound natural. (English explanation)

× My favorite type of chocolate is milk chocolate because it had a smooth and creamy taste that is perfectly balanced, not too sweet, and not too bitter.

✓ My favorite type of chocolate is milk chocolate because it has a smooth and creamy taste that is perfectly balanced, not too sweet, and not too bitter.

The verb 'had' is past tense but the sentence describes a current preference, so 'has' (present tense) should be used. (English explanation)

× I enjoyed it especially when I want a comforting treat that isn't overwhelming.

✓ I enjoy it especially when I want a comforting treat that isn't overwhelming.

The sentence mixes past tense 'enjoyed' with present tense 'want'. Since the context is general preference, present tense 'enjoy' should be used. (English explanation)

× In my perspective yes, because most of people gives chocolate to other in some holidays, for example umm Valentine's Day.

✓ From my perspective, yes, because most people give chocolate to others on some holidays, for example, Valentine's Day.

The phrase 'In my perspective' should be 'From my perspective'. 'Most of people' should be 'most people'. 'Gives' should be 'give' to agree with plural subject. 'Other' should be 'others'. The preposition 'in some holidays' should be 'on some holidays'. (English explanation)

× It represents love and caring to other people.

✓ It represents love and care for other people.

The noun 'caring' should be 'care' to parallel 'love'. The preposition 'to' should be 'for' when expressing feelings towards people. (English explanation)