Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 예를 들어, 'it's made me happy' 대신 'it makes me happy'를 사용하고, 'so especially when I get stressed' 대신 'especially when I feel stressed'로 수정하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 문장을 간결하게 다듬어 중복을 줄이세요.

예시: I like eating chocolate because it makes me happy. Especially when I feel stressed, I usually eat chocolate to relieve my stress.

제안: 답변에 문법적 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 'in these days' 대신 'these days'를 사용하고, 'I'm so stressful' 대신 'I feel stressed'로 수정하세요. 또한, 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

예시: These days, my semester has started, so I feel stressed and eat chocolate every day.

제안: 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'didn't used to'는 'didn't use to'가 맞으며, 'keep me from'은 'kept me from'으로 과거형을 사용해야 합니다. 또한, 'teeth health' 대신 'dental health'가 더 자연스럽습니다. 문장을 명확하게 다듬으세요.

예시: To be honest, I didn't use to eat chocolate because my parents kept me from sweet things like chocolate and candy to protect my dental health.

제안: 답변이 불명확하고 문법적으로 부정확합니다. 'some scientists said the chocolate made paper'는 의미가 모호하며, 문장을 명확하고 구체적으로 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다. 초점을 '맛있기 때문에'와 '사람들에게 긍정적인 영향을 준다'는 점으로 맞추세요.

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and can improve people's mood by releasing happy chemicals in the brain.

제안: 답변이 비교적 명확하지만, '70% of cacao' 대신 '70% cocoa'가 더 자연스럽고, 'eat it eat a lot'는 중복 표현입니다. 문장을 간결하게 다듬고, 이유를 좀 더 구체적으로 설명하세요.

예시: My favorite flavor of chocolate is 70% cocoa because it's not too sweet, so I can enjoy eating a lot of it.

제안: 'I feel like considerable'는 의미가 불분명하며, 'express thankful' 대신 'express gratitude'가 더 적절합니다. 문장을 명확하고 자연스럽게 다듬고, 불필요한 말버릇을 줄이세요.

예시: Of course. When I receive chocolate as a gift, I feel appreciated. Therefore, I believe giving chocolate is a good way to express gratitude to others.

× I like eating chocolate because it's made me happy, so especially when I get stressed, I usually eat chocolate to relieve my stress.

✓ I like eating chocolate because it makes me happy, especially when I get stressed, I usually eat chocolate to relieve my stress.

The phrase 'it's made me happy' incorrectly uses the present perfect tense where the simple present 'it makes me happy' is appropriate to express a general truth or habitual action.

× Uh, actually in these days my semester started so I'm so stressful, so every day I eat chocolate.

✓ Uh, actually these days my semester has started so I am very stressed, so every day I eat chocolate.

The word 'stressful' describes something that causes stress, but the speaker should use 'stressed' to describe their own feeling. Also, 'in these days' is incorrect; 'these days' is the correct phrase.

× To be honest, I. I didn't used to eat chocolate because my parents keep me from sweet things such as chocolate and candy to protect my teeth health.

✓ To be honest, I didn't use to eat chocolate because my parents kept me from sweet things such as chocolate and candy to protect my dental health.

The phrase 'didn't used to' is incorrect; the correct form is 'didn't use to'. Also, 'keep' should be in past tense 'kept' to match the past context. 'Teeth health' is better expressed as 'dental health'.

× I believe because chocolate is delicious and also some scientists said the chocolate made paper. Uh, the chocolate helps people's.

✓ I believe chocolate is popular because it is delicious, and some scientists say that chocolate has health benefits.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Chocolate made paper' is likely a mistake. The corrected sentence clarifies the idea and completes the thought properly.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is 70% of cacao because it's not too sweet and I can eat it eat a lot.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is 70% cacao because it's not too sweet and I can eat a lot of it.

The phrase '70% of cacao' should be '70% cacao'. Also, 'eat it eat a lot' is incorrect; it should be 'eat a lot of it' to properly quantify the amount.

× Of course, to be honest, uh, when I get chocolate as a gift, I feel like considerable. So I believe it is a really good way to express thankful to others.

✓ Of course, to be honest, when I get chocolate as a gift, I feel very grateful. So I believe it is a really good way to express thanks to others.

The word 'considerable' is incorrectly used; the correct adjective is 'grateful' to express appreciation. Also, 'express thankful' should be 'express thanks'.