Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中有较多的语气词和重复，影响流畅性。建议减少填充词，句子结构更完整，表达更自然。可以用连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and always makes me happy. However, recently I have been trying to keep fit and maintain a healthy diet, so I rarely eat chocolate now.

제안: 回答中语法错误较多，时态使用不准确。建议注意时态一致，句子简洁明了，避免重复和语法错误。

예시: When I was in high school, I ate a bar of chocolate almost every day. But recently, I haven't eaten chocolate for about two years to stay healthy.

제안: 回答表达不清晰，语法和用词错误较多。建议简化句子结构，注意时态和单复数，表达更具体。

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate in high school, almost every day. But when I was younger, it was harder to eat chocolate because my parents thought it was unhealthy. Still, I usually had one bar.

제안: 表达不够自然，词汇使用不准确。建议使用更合适的词汇和连接词，使表达更流畅和具体。

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and helps people relieve stress. Besides, it is a convenient snack that is easy to find everywhere.

제안: 回答较简洁但表达基本清晰。建议丰富细节，解释为什么喜欢原味巧克力，使用更自然的表达。

예시: My favourite flavour is original chocolate because it has a classic taste that I find very comforting and relaxing.

제안: 句子结构不完整，语法错误。建议使用完整句子，表达更自然，说明原因更具体。

예시: Yes, I think chocolate makes a good gift because it is widely loved and easy to buy, so it suits almost everyone.

× Yes, definitely I love eating chocolates because it it is so delicious and, umm, always makes me happy.

✓ Yes, definitely I love eating chocolates because it is so delicious and always makes me happy.

句子中“it it”重复，应删除多余的“it”。

× However, uh, recently I want to keep fit and, uh, keep a healthy diet, so I hardly, uh, eat chocolate.

✓ However, uh, recently I want to keep fit and keep a healthy diet, so I hardly eat chocolate.

句子中“hardly eat chocolate”表达不准确，应该用现在时态“hardly eat chocolate”表示现在的习惯。

× That's because eating too much chocolate I could easily.

✓ That's because eating too much chocolate could easily make me gain weight.

句子结构不完整，缺少谓语动词，导致意思不清，应补充完整句子。

× When I was in high school, uh, I ate chocolate almost every day for one bar.

✓ When I was in high school, uh, I ate one bar of chocolate almost every day.

表达顺序不当，应该先说明数量再说明物品，且“for one bar”用法不正确。

× But recently, uh, I think I have haven't uh, eat chocolate for two years to keep fit.

✓ But recently, uh, I think I haven't eaten chocolate for two years to keep fit.

“have haven't”重复且“eat”应为过去分词“eaten”，使用现在完成时表示从过去持续到现在的动作。

× Sure, and I said when I was in the high school I almost eat it at it every day and when I was more little it is kind of difficult to eat because my parents think it's it is not healthy.

✓ Sure, and I said when I was in high school I almost ate it every day, and when I was younger it was kind of difficult to eat because my parents thought it was not healthy.

时态不一致，描述过去的事情应使用过去时态。

× But I always eat chocolate for one bar of 1 bar for.

✓ But I always ate one bar of chocolate.

表达混乱，数量词和名词顺序错误，应调整为“一条巧克力”。

× Definitely because it takes really delicious and could release the pressure and besides that it is also the most convenient food around our life.

✓ Definitely because it tastes really delicious and can relieve pressure, and besides that it is also the most convenient food in our life.

“takes delicious”用法错误，应为“tastes delicious”；“release the pressure”应为“relieve pressure”；“around our life”应为“in our life”。

× I prefer the original chocolate because it is really classical and always makes me feel relaxing.

✓ I prefer the original chocolate because it is really classic and always makes me feel relaxed.

“classical”通常指古典的，应使用“classic”表示经典的；“feel relaxing”应为“feel relaxed”，表示感到放松。

× Yes, because it is be widely loved and it is easy to buy, so it is kind of suitable gifts to anybody.

✓ Yes, because it is widely loved and easy to buy, so it is kind of a suitable gift for anybody.

“is be”错误，应为“is”；“gifts”应为单数“gift”，且“to anybody”应为“for anybody”。