Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural and relevant, but you can improve coherence by using linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, try to avoid repeating the word 'chocolate' too often by using synonyms or pronouns.

예시: Yes, I love eating chocolate because whenever I'm feeling a bit sad or low, it helps me feel more relaxed and lifts my mood.

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and correct minor grammar mistakes such as 'sweetness taste help helps'. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent and concise.

예시: I usually eat chocolate twice a week, especially when I'm watching a movie or feeling stressed, because its sweet taste helps me relax and enjoy the moment more.

제안: Your answer is a bit long and contains some repetition and unclear phrases like 'turned double turned all turned out all'. Try to be more concise and clear, and use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I used to eat chocolate almost every day as a kid because I enjoyed its sweet taste. I tried many flavors like milk, white, and dark chocolate, and all of them were delicious and made me happy.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by adding more specific reasons and using linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because many people eat it after a long, stressful day. For instance, its sweet taste helps to lift their mood and provide comfort.

제안: There are minor grammar errors such as 'It always improve'. Also, try to combine your sentences using linking words for better flow and avoid repeating similar ideas.

예시: My favorite flavor is milk chocolate because whenever I eat it, I feel comforted and loved, and it always improves and brightens my mood.

제안: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases like 'It can choose them thoughtfulness'. Try to use complete sentences and clearer expressions, and link your ideas logically.

예시: I think giving chocolate as a gift is a great idea, especially if the person likes it. For example, on birthdays or special occasions, it shows thoughtfulness and makes the recipient feel appreciated and loved.

× the sweetness taste help helps me relax and enjoy the moment more.

✓ the sweet taste helps me relax and enjoy the moment more.

The subject 'taste' is singular, so the verb should be 'helps' to agree in third person singular. Also, 'sweetness taste' is incorrect; it should be 'sweet taste' as an adjective-noun combination.

× I used to eat chocolate almost everyday because I really enjoyed its sweet taste and I tried many different flavors such as milk, white and dark chocolate and it turned double turned all turned out all to be delicious and made me so happy.

✓ I used to eat chocolate almost every day because I really enjoyed its sweet taste and I tried many different flavors such as milk, white, and dark chocolate and they all turned out to be delicious and made me so happy.

The phrase 'almost everyday' should be 'almost every day' as two words. Also, 'it turned double turned all turned out all' is incorrect and redundant; it should be 'they all turned out' because 'flavors' is plural, so the pronoun and verb must agree in plural form.

× It always improve and light up my mood.

✓ It always improves and lights up my mood.

The subject 'It' is singular, so the verbs should be in third person singular form: 'improves' and 'lights'.

× It can choose them thoughtfulness and make them feel appreciated or loved.

✓ It can show them thoughtfulness and make them feel appreciated or loved.

The verb 'choose' is incorrect in this context; the intended meaning is 'show' thoughtfulness. Also, the sentence structure was awkward and needed correction for clarity.