Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains some errors and unclear words, such as 'jacket' instead of 'chocolate'. Try to use clear and correct vocabulary and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes delicious. Sometimes, when I feel sad, eating chocolate cheers me up and makes me smile again.

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to express frequency clearly and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, avoid redundancy and keep sentences natural.

예시: I usually eat chocolate two or three times a week because I think it's not very healthy. However, when I feel bored or tired, I eat chocolate to lift my mood.

제안: Your answer lacks correct grammar and clarity. Use complete sentences and correct verb forms. Also, provide specific details and use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid, especially when I went to the supermarket. I would buy chocolate and cakes because I really enjoyed sweet snacks.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'affordable in all controls'. Try to use clear vocabulary and provide specific reasons with linking words for coherence.

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it is affordable and available in many countries. Also, most people enjoy its sweet taste, which makes it a favourite treat.

제안: Your answer is mostly clear but could be more natural and concise. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid awkward phrases like 'not too much sweet'.

예시: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it is not too sweet for me. However, I sometimes eat milk chocolate when I want a sweeter snack.

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains errors and unclear words like 'chicks'. Try to use correct vocabulary and provide clear reasons with linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate makes a good gift because most people like it. It can bring happiness, and there are many types of chocolate to choose from.

× Yes, I like eating jacket because it tastes very good and sometimes when I feel sad, chocolate can make me to feel happy and smile again.

✓ Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes very good and sometimes when I feel sad, chocolate can make me feel happy and smile again.

The word 'jacket' is incorrect here; it should be 'chocolate'. Also, after 'make me', the verb should be in the base form without 'to'. So 'make me to feel' is incorrect; it should be 'make me feel'. This is a common error with causative verbs like 'make'.

× I eat chocolate three or two days, four weeks. Not probably because I think it's not healthy to my body. When I'm still bored and tired, I just eat chocolate to make me happy again.

✓ I eat chocolate two or three days a week. Not often because I think it's not healthy for my body. When I'm bored and tired, I just eat chocolate to make myself happy again.

The phrase 'three or two days, four weeks' is unclear and ungrammatical; it should be 'two or three days a week' to express frequency. 'Not probably' is incorrect; 'not often' fits better. Also, 'healthy to my body' should be 'healthy for my body'. 'Make me happy' is acceptable but 'make myself happy' is more natural here.

× Yeah, I often chocolate when I kids, especially when I am in the supermarket. I buy chocolate and something like cake because I really enjoy sweet snacks.

✓ Yeah, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid, especially when I was in the supermarket. I bought chocolate and things like cake because I really enjoyed sweet snacks.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match 'when I was a kid'. 'I kids' is incorrect; it should be 'I was a kid'. 'I am' should be past tense 'I was'. 'Buy' and 'enjoy' should be past tense 'bought' and 'enjoyed' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I think chocolate is a popular around in the world because chocolate is affordable in all controls, which is fine and everyone likes chocolate. Many people enjoys to eat chocolate.

✓ I think chocolate is popular around the world because chocolate is affordable in all countries, which is fine and everyone likes chocolate. Many people enjoy eating chocolate.

The article 'a' before 'popular' is incorrect; 'popular' is an adjective and does not need 'a'. 'Around in the world' should be 'around the world'. 'Controls' is incorrect; the intended word is likely 'countries'. 'Enjoys to eat' is incorrect; it should be 'enjoy eating'.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because it is not too much sweet for me and I enjoy it, but sometimes I eat milk chocolate when I need sweet snacks.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because it is not too sweet for me and I enjoy it, but sometimes I eat milk chocolate when I want sweet snacks.

'Not too much sweet' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'not too sweet'. 'Need sweet snacks' is better expressed as 'want sweet snacks' because 'need' implies necessity, which is less appropriate here.

× Yes, I think it's good to use chocolate as a gift for others because everyone likes chocolate, especially chicks, and then chocolate can bring happiness to everyone. Chocolate is available in many types.

✓ Yes, I think it's good to use chocolate as a gift for others because everyone likes chocolate, especially children, and chocolate can bring happiness to everyone. Chocolate is available in many types.

The word 'chicks' is informal and usually refers to baby birds; the correct word here is 'children'. Also, 'and then' is unnecessary and can be omitted for smoother flow.