Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer should be more natural and clear. Avoid redundancy and try to give a direct reason with supporting details. For example, explain why you like the flavor and mention the brand once.

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it has a sweet and rich flavor. My favorite brand is Dairy Milk because it tastes creamy and smooth.

제안: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. You should directly answer the question about frequency and provide supporting details using linking words.

예시: I have been eating chocolate since I was a kid. Nowadays, I usually eat it once or twice a week.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and confusing. Use clear sentences with linking words to explain frequency and preference.

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid. I especially liked Dairy Milk and used to eat it two or three times a day.

제안: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to explain the reasons clearly and use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because of its sweet and delicious flavor. Moreover, it can improve our mood when we feel down.

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive. Use varied vocabulary and avoid repeating the same words. Also, explain why you like that flavor.

예시: My favorite chocolate flavor is vanilla because it has a smooth and delightful taste. Many people enjoy vanilla, and I think it suits everyone's preference.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains errors. Provide a clear opinion and explain why chocolate is a good gift, using linking words.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it is sweet and loved by many people. It is suitable for special occasions like birthdays and celebrations.

× Yes, I do like eating chocolate because it is very sweet and tasteful flavor like mixing some Dairy Milk like the brand is Dairy Milk I like the most and that's it.

✓ Yes, I do like eating chocolate because it has a very sweet and tasteful flavor, like mixing some Dairy Milk, which is the brand I like the most.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'tasteful' as an adjective for flavor; 'tasteful' means having good taste in style, not flavor. The correct adjective is 'tasty' or 'flavorful'. Also, the sentence structure is awkward and needs rephrasing for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× From kid I, I used to eat chocolate. Name is Dairy Milk. That's it.

✓ Since I was a kid, I used to eat chocolate. The brand is Dairy Milk. That's it.

The phrase 'From kid I' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'Since I was a kid'. Also, 'Name is Dairy Milk' is incomplete and needs a subject, so 'The brand is Dairy Milk' is appropriate.

× Yes, of course. I used to eat chocolate name as dairy, milk name as Dairy Milk. And at my kid I eat most, most, most of the time day in day. I used it two or three days each day.

✓ Yes, of course. I used to eat chocolate named Dairy Milk. When I was a kid, I ate it most of the time, day after day. I used to eat it two or three times each day.

The phrase 'name as dairy, milk name as Dairy Milk' is incorrect; the correct form is 'named Dairy Milk'. 'At my kid' should be 'when I was a kid'. 'Eat most, most, most of the time day in day' is awkward and ungrammatical; 'ate it most of the time, day after day' is correct. 'I used it two or three days each day' is incorrect; it should be 'I used to eat it two or three times each day'.

× Around the world, chocolate is popular because the sweet and tasteful flavor it gives and the mood. When we are in the another mood, the the flavorful taste of chocolate gives our mind freeze.

✓ Around the world, chocolate is popular because of the sweet and flavorful taste it gives and the mood it creates. When we are in another mood, the flavorful taste of chocolate makes our mind feel refreshed.

The phrase 'because the sweet and tasteful flavor it gives' lacks the preposition 'of' after 'because'. 'In the another mood' is incorrect; it should be 'in another mood'. 'Gives our mind freeze' is ungrammatical; a better expression is 'makes our mind feel refreshed' or 'gives our mind a refreshing feeling'.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is vanilla. Vanilla is very tasteful and very amazing flavor. Most of the people prefer vanilla and I also prefer vanilla flavor for everyone. That's my favorite.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is vanilla. Vanilla has a very tasty and amazing flavor. Most people prefer vanilla, and I also prefer vanilla flavor. That's my favorite.

'Very tasteful' is incorrect when describing flavor; 'tasty' or 'flavorful' is appropriate. 'Most of the people' should be 'most people'. 'I also prefer vanilla flavor for everyone' is awkward; better to say 'I also prefer vanilla flavor'.

× Yeah, it is quite good to give gift desert chocolate at at wings where what they what they and another special events. It is used to give gift to others.

✓ Yeah, it is quite good to give chocolate as a gift at weddings, birthdays, and other special events. It is common to give chocolate as a gift to others.

'Give gift desert chocolate at at wings where what they what they' is ungrammatical and unclear. The correct preposition is 'at' for events like 'weddings' and 'birthdays'. 'Desert' should be 'dessert'. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity and correctness.