Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but needs to be more natural and clear. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, say "Yes, I like eating chocolate because I have loved sweets since childhood and usually crave something sweet after meals."

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because I have loved sweets since childhood and usually crave something sweet after meals.

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and repetitive. Try to give a direct response with clear linking words. For example, "I often eat chocolate after meals, but sometimes it depends on my mood if I feel like having it."

예시: I often eat chocolate after meals, but sometimes it depends on my mood if I feel like having it.

제안: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Try to directly answer the question and provide supporting details. For example, "Yes, I often ate chocolate as a kid. Sometimes my neighbour's child shared chocolate with me, and I also received chocolates in my lunch box."

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a kid. Sometimes my neighbour's child shared chocolate with me, and I also received chocolates in my lunch box.

제안: Your answer needs to be more coherent and specific. Use linking words and correct grammar. For example, "In my view, chocolate is popular worldwide because it is a well-known sweet treat enjoyed after meals, especially by children."

예시: In my view, chocolate is popular worldwide because it is a well-known sweet treat enjoyed after meals, especially by children.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by clearer structure and grammar. For example, "There are several chocolate flavours, but my favourite is dark chocolate because it boosts my energy, tastes slightly bitter, and contains less sugar."

예시: There are several chocolate flavours, but my favourite is dark chocolate because it boosts my energy, tastes slightly bitter, and contains less sugar.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and lacks detail. Try to explain your opinion with reasons. For example, "Yes, definitely. Chocolate makes a good gift because it is widely appreciated and often given during special occasions, especially in Western cultures."

예시: Yes, definitely. Chocolate makes a good gift because it is widely appreciated and often given during special occasions, especially in Western cultures.

× Yes, I prefer eating chocolates because I am a sweetie person and I want to eat the sweets after meal because it's craving from since childhood.

✓ Yes, I prefer eating chocolate because I am a sweet person and I want to eat sweets after meals because I've had this craving since childhood.

The word 'chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the substance in general. 'Sweetie person' is incorrect; it should be 'sweet person' to describe someone who likes sweets. 'The sweets' can be plural without 'the' when speaking generally. 'After meal' should be 'after meals' to indicate habitual action. 'It's craving from since childhood' is incorrect; it should be 'I've had this craving since childhood' to express a continuous desire from the past to present.

× Mostly I often eat chocolate after meal that's after meal or depend on my mood when I dreaming for it.

✓ I mostly eat chocolate after meals, or it depends on my mood when I am craving it.

The adverbs 'mostly' and 'often' are redundant; 'mostly' suffices. 'After meal' should be plural 'after meals' for habitual action. 'That's after meal' is unclear and unnecessary. 'Depend on my mood' needs the subject 'it' and should be 'depends'. 'When I dreaming for it' is incorrect; it should be 'when I am craving it' to express present continuous desire.

× To my neighbor's kid because I go to school in the lunch box. I I usually got chocolate from the and she also packed chocolate.

✓ I used to get chocolate from my neighbor's kid because I went to school with a lunch box. She usually packed chocolate for me.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'To my neighbor's kid because I go to school in the lunch box' lacks a main verb and subject. It should be restructured to express that the student received chocolate from the neighbor's kid. 'I I usually got chocolate from the and she also packed chocolate' is incomplete and confusing; it should clarify that the neighbor packed chocolate for the student.

× In my views, chocolate is popular in all world because chocolate has a big name and theme and it's also known it's also used for the sweet treat after meal and also eat children.

✓ In my view, chocolate is popular all over the world because it has a big name and theme. It is also known as a sweet treat after meals and is loved by children.

'In my views' should be 'In my view'. 'Popular in all world' should be 'popular all over the world'. The sentence is run-on and needs to be split for clarity. 'It's also known it's also used for the sweet treat after meal and also eat children' is grammatically incorrect and unclear; it should be 'It is also known as a sweet treat after meals and is loved by children'.

× There are several kind of chocolates flavor but my favorite flavor is dark chocolate because it's improve my energy and it's sometime bitter and not too much sugar in it so I think.

✓ There are several kinds of chocolate flavors, but my favorite flavor is dark chocolate because it improves my energy. It is sometimes bitter and does not have too much sugar, I think.

'Several kind' should be 'several kinds' to agree in number. 'Chocolates flavor' should be 'chocolate flavors'. 'It's improve' should be 'it improves' for subject-verb agreement. 'It's sometime bitter' should be 'it is sometimes bitter'. 'Not too much sugar in it' should be 'does not have too much sugar' for correct verb usage.

× Yes, definitely. It is good to use chocolate as a gift to others because it is a Western tradition and I think it it is good.

✓ Yes, definitely. It is good to give chocolate as a gift to others because it is a Western tradition, and I think it is a good idea.

'Use chocolate as a gift' is awkward; 'give chocolate as a gift' is more natural. The repetition 'it it is good' is an error and should be corrected. Adding 'idea' clarifies the sentence. The modal verb 'should' could be used for suggestion, but the original sentence is acceptable with these corrections.