Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and detailed. Instead of saying "As I am a sweet tooth," you could say "I have a sweet tooth," which is a common expression. Also, adding a reason why you like chocolate would enrich your answer.

예시: I have a sweet tooth, so I really enjoy eating chocolate because it satisfies my craving for something sweet and delicious.

제안: Your answer is good and includes examples, but there is a small mistake: "movement" should be "moment." Also, try to use linking words like "for instance" or "such as" to improve coherence.

예시: I usually eat chocolate when I feel very happy or want to celebrate an important achievement. For instance, after finishing a big project or reaching a personal goal, I treat myself to chocolate as a reward, which makes the moment even more special.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and is somewhat repetitive. Use past tense consistently and avoid redundancy. Also, try to add a reason or a specific memory to make your answer more engaging.

예시: I ate a lot of chocolate when I was a kid because I loved its sweet taste, and it was a big part of my childhood treats.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and could be more precise. Avoid repeating words like "themselves." Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons for chocolate's popularity.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it appeals to many people's taste buds, and it is often associated with celebrations and happiness, making it a common treat on special occasions.

제안: Your answer is good but has some grammatical errors. Use correct verb forms and linking words to improve clarity. Also, explain briefly why dark chocolate is healthy.

예시: I like every flavor of chocolate, but I usually eat dark chocolate because it contains antioxidants that improve my health. For example, when my blood pressure is low, it helps uplift my mood.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant. To improve, use more precise linking words and avoid vague phrases like "and so on." Also, you can add a specific example of an occasion.

예시: Yes, in many countries, people give chocolate as gifts on special occasions such as weddings and birthday parties because it symbolizes love and joy.

× As I am a sweet tooth, I love eating chocolates.

✓ As I have a sweet tooth, I love eating chocolates.

The phrase 'I am a sweet tooth' is incorrect because 'sweet tooth' is a noun phrase describing a person's liking for sweets, so the correct verb is 'have' not 'am'. Use 'I have a sweet tooth' to express this idea.

× It makes the movement even more special.

✓ It makes the moment even more special.

The word 'movement' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is 'moment' which means a particular point in time. This is a vocabulary error rather than grammar, but correcting it improves clarity.

× I eat a lot of chocolate when I was a kid because at the time of my age I love eating chocolate as it is a part of my life.

✓ I ate a lot of chocolate when I was a kid because at that time I loved eating chocolate as it was a part of my life.

The sentence mixes present tense verbs 'eat' and 'love' with past time reference 'when I was a kid'. To maintain tense consistency, use past tense verbs 'ate' and 'loved' to match the past time frame.

× Also, on any occasion when they feel happy, they treat themselves themselves with the chocolate.

✓ Also, on any occasion when they feel happy, they treat themselves with chocolate.

The pronoun 'themselves' is repeated twice, which is redundant and incorrect. Also, 'the chocolate' is unnecessary here; 'chocolate' without 'the' is more natural when speaking generally.

× When I feel my blood pressure is low it uplift my mood also.

✓ When I feel my blood pressure is low, it uplifts my mood also.

The subject 'it' (referring to chocolate or dark chocolate) is singular, so the verb should be 'uplifts' (third person singular) instead of 'uplift'. Also, a comma is needed after the dependent clause for clarity.