Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Votre réponse manque de clarté et de structure. Essayez de formuler une phrase principale claire et d'éviter les répétitions inutiles. Par exemple, expliquez pourquoi vous aimez le chocolat avec des détails précis et évitez les erreurs grammaticales.

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it has a rich, sweet flavor that satisfies my sweet tooth. It is one of my favorite treats to enjoy in my daily life.

제안: Votre réponse est un peu confuse et redondante. Essayez d'être plus précis et d'utiliser des mots de liaison pour rendre votre réponse plus fluide et cohérente.

예시: I usually eat chocolate once or twice a day, depending on my mood. Sometimes I crave sweets more, so I might eat it more frequently.

제안: Votre réponse contient des erreurs grammaticales et manque de précision. Essayez de structurer votre réponse avec une phrase principale claire et des détails spécifiques, en évitant les répétitions.

예시: Yes, when I was a kid, I used to eat a lot of sweets, including chocolate, biscuits, and juice, because I loved their sweet flavors.

제안: Votre réponse est correcte mais pourrait être améliorée en utilisant des mots de liaison pour mieux organiser vos idées et en précisant davantage votre opinion.

예시: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide because most people enjoy sweet flavors. Additionally, chocolate has a rich taste that appeals to many.

제안: Bonne réponse claire et concise. Pour l'améliorer, vous pouvez ajouter un peu plus de détails pour enrichir votre réponse et utiliser des mots de liaison.

예시: I prefer dark chocolate because it has an intense flavor and is less sweet than other types, which I find more satisfying.

제안: Votre réponse est compréhensible mais pourrait être plus naturelle et fluide. Essayez d'utiliser des expressions plus idiomatiques et de structurer votre réponse avec des mots de liaison.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift because most people love it. It can make the recipient feel happy and appreciated.

× Yes, I like eating chocolate because it has a sweet flavor and I turned a lot for eating sugars in my daily life.

✓ Yes, I like eating chocolate because it has a sweet flavor and I try to avoid eating a lot of sugar in my daily life.

The verb 'turned' is incorrectly used here; the intended meaning is likely 'try to avoid' or 'cut down on'. The past tense 'turned' does not fit the context, which is about a habitual action. Using 'try to avoid' in present tense is appropriate.

× So yes, chocolate is between my favorite things, my favorite food.

✓ So yes, chocolate is among my favorite things, my favorite food.

The phrase 'between my favorite things' is incorrect because 'between' is used for two items; 'among' is correct for more than two. Also, 'favorite food' is singular and fits here.

× I often crave eating sweet so chocolate like eating it almost once a day.

✓ I often crave sweets, so I like eating chocolate almost once a day.

The phrase 'crave eating sweet' is incorrect; 'crave sweets' is correct. Also, 'so chocolate like eating it' is ungrammatical; it should be 'so I like eating chocolate'. The preposition and sentence structure are corrected.

× I usually eat like twice a day or more.

✓ I usually eat it twice a day or more.

The phrase 'eat like twice a day' is informal and incorrect in this context. 'Eat it twice a day' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× When I was a kid I almost eat sweet things.

✓ When I was a kid I almost always ate sweet things.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was a kid'), so the verb should be in past tense 'ate' instead of present 'eat'. Also, 'almost always' clarifies the frequency.

× My basic food was eating sweets, chocolate, biscuits, juice, everything that have a flavor, sweetness, flavor.

✓ My basic food was sweets, chocolate, biscuits, juice, everything that has flavor and sweetness.

'Everything that have' is incorrect; 'everything' is singular and requires 'has'. Also, 'eating sweets' is awkward; 'sweets' as a noun is better here.

× So yes, I eat a lot of chocolate during my childhood.

✓ So yes, I ate a lot of chocolate during my childhood.

The phrase 'during my childhood' refers to the past, so the verb should be in past tense 'ate' instead of present 'eat'.

× I think most of people around the world prefer eating sweet flavor, so chocolate is very sweet and has rich tastes, so I think that's why people tend to eat it a lot.

✓ I think most people around the world prefer sweet flavors, so chocolate is very sweet and has rich tastes; that's why people tend to eat it a lot.

'Most of people' should be 'most people'. 'Eating sweet flavor' is incorrect; 'prefer sweet flavors' is correct. Also, 'rich tastes' is acceptable but 'rich flavor' might be better.

× I prefer dark chocolate because it's so intense in flavor and little bit sweet compared to other flavors.

✓ I prefer dark chocolate because it's so intense in flavor and a little bit sweeter compared to other flavors.

'Little bit sweet' should be 'a little bit sweeter' to correctly compare flavors. The adjective 'sweet' needs to be in comparative form 'sweeter'.

× Yes, chocolate seems very good gift because almost people love chocolate.

✓ Yes, chocolate seems like a very good gift because almost everyone loves chocolate.

'Seems very good gift' is missing an article and preposition; 'seems like a very good gift' is correct. Also, 'almost people' should be 'almost everyone'.

× So yes it will be a very precious gift for others for making them feel happy and enjoy the gift more.

✓ So yes, it will be a very precious gift for others, making them feel happy and enjoy the gift more.

The phrase 'for making them feel happy' is awkward; removing 'for' and using a participle phrase 'making them feel happy' is more natural.