Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit repetitive and lacks clarity. Instead of saying 'I love chocolate' and 'for health purpose' without explanation, try to be more specific and natural. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating the word 'chocolate' unnecessarily.

예시: Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and dark chocolate is known to have health benefits like improving heart health.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly and by being more concise. Also, avoid starting sentences with 'Then' in this context; instead, use 'so' or 'which helps me'.

예시: I often eat chocolate during my leisure time because I am free then, so it helps me relax and enjoy the rich taste of dark chocolate.

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to sound more confident. Also, correct grammar is important; say 'when I was a child' and 'all these types of chocolates'. Use linking words to make your answer smoother.

예시: Yes, definitely. When I was a child, I liked many types of chocolates such as Munch, Dairy Milk, and Cadbury because they all tasted great.

제안: There are grammatical errors and unnatural phrasing here. Use 'Chocolate' instead of 'Chocolatey', and say 'in every town or countryside' instead of 'in every of town or countryside'. Also, add more specific reasons to enrich your answer.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is easily available in both towns and rural areas, and many people enjoy its sweet taste and versatility in desserts.

제안: Your answer is clear but can be improved by structuring it better and using linking words. Also, 'flavours' is the British spelling, which is acceptable in IELTS. Try to avoid repeating 'like' twice in one sentence.

예시: I enjoy many flavours such as vanilla, chocolate, dark chocolate, and strawberry; however, my favourite is Dairy Milk because it has a creamy texture.

제안: Your answer is short and has some grammatical issues. Instead of 'As for celebration or any occasion', say 'for celebrations or any special occasion'. Also, try to expand your answer with reasons or examples.

예시: Of course, chocolate makes a great gift because it is suitable for celebrations or any special occasion, and most people appreciate receiving it.

× I like eating chocolates because I love chocolate and moreover for health purpose.

✓ I like eating chocolate because I love chocolate and moreover for health purposes.

The word 'chocolates' is plural but here 'chocolate' as a general food item is uncountable and should be singular. Also, 'health purpose' should be plural 'health purposes' to indicate various reasons related to health.

× I often eat chocolate in my leisure time because this time I'm free.

✓ I often eat chocolate in my leisure time because at that time I'm free.

The phrase 'this time' is incorrect when referring to habitual past or general time; 'at that time' fits better to indicate the time when the person is free to eat chocolate.

× When I was child I liked so many types of chocolate like Munch, Dairy Milk, umm, Cadbury, uh, I like all these type of chocolates.

✓ When I was a child I liked so many types of chocolate like Munch, Dairy Milk, umm, Cadbury, uh, I like all these types of chocolates.

The phrase 'when I was child' is missing the article 'a' before 'child'. Also, 'all these type of chocolates' should be 'all these types of chocolates' because 'types' is plural.

× Chocolatey is popular around the world because it is easily available in every of town or countryside.

✓ Chocolate is popular around the world because it is easily available in every town or countryside.

The word 'Chocolatey' is incorrect; it should be 'Chocolate'. Also, 'in every of town or countryside' is incorrect; it should be 'in every town or countryside' without 'of'.

× I like many flavors like vanilla, chocolate, dark chocolate, strawberry, but I like Dairy Milk chocolates because it's so creamy.

✓ I like many flavors like vanilla, chocolate, dark chocolate, strawberry, but I like Dairy Milk chocolate because it's so creamy.

'Dairy Milk chocolates' should be 'Dairy Milk chocolate' because 'Dairy Milk' refers to a type of chocolate generally, not multiple chocolates.

× Of course, yes, chocolate is a good gift As for celebration or any occasion.

✓ Of course, yes, chocolate is a good gift for celebration or any occasion.

The phrase 'As for celebration' is incorrect here; it should be 'for celebration' to indicate the purpose of the gift.