Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中表达不够清晰，语法错误较多，且用词不准确。建议简化句子结构，明确表达喜欢巧克力的原因，并避免使用“painful”这种不合适的词汇。

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate, especially dark chocolate with 70 to 95% cocoa content because it has a rich flavor that is both sweet and slightly bitter.

제안: 回答较为冗长且有语法错误，建议使用更简洁的句子，并注意时态和语法的正确性。

예시: I don't eat chocolate regularly because I rarely buy it myself. However, when my family or friends give me chocolate, I usually finish it within a week.

제안: 回答中出现了明显的错误（crime school），表达不清晰。建议纠正错误，使用完整句子，并具体说明吃巧克力的情况。

예시: Yes, when I was a child, my teacher often gave us chocolate or candy as a reward for good grades or behavior at school.

제안: 表达不够准确，语法错误较多，建议用更准确的词汇和句式表达巧克力受欢迎的原因。

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it has a long history and was once used as a medicine to help prevent colds.

제안: 回答语法混乱，词汇使用错误，建议简化表达，明确说明喜欢的巧克力口味。

예시: My favorite chocolate is dark chocolate because it has a rich flavor that is both sweet and slightly bitter.

제안: 回答中表达不够流畅，日期和习俗描述不准确。建议用更自然的表达方式说明巧克力作为礼物的意义。

예시: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift, especially on Valentine's Day when couples often exchange chocolates to show their love.

× I like eating chocolates, I especially like 70 to 95% better because it it's flavor not only sweet but also bitter and makes it more painful.

✓ I like eating chocolate, I especially like 70 to 95% better because its flavor is not only sweet but also bitter and makes it more pleasant.

“chocolates”应为不可数名词“chocolate”；“it it's flavor”应为“its flavor”；“makes it more painful”应为“makes it more pleasant”，表达更符合语境。

× I like eating chocolates, I especially like 70 to 95% better because it it's flavor not only sweet but also bitter and makes it more painful.

✓ I like eating chocolate, I especially like 70 to 95% better because its flavor is not only sweet but also bitter and makes it more pleasant.

“it it's flavor”中“it it's”重复，应改为“its”，表示“它的”。

× And it is not regular in my daily life because I seldom buy chocolate by myself.

✓ And it is not regular in my daily life because I seldom buy chocolate myself.

“by myself”在此处多余，直接用“myself”更自然。

× So it is not regularly.

✓ So it is not regular.

“regularly”是副词，句中应使用形容词“regular”修饰“it”。

× Yes. When I was young, I went to crime school.

✓ Yes. When I was young, I went to cram school.

“crime school”应为“cram school”（补习学校），此处为词汇错误，非语法错误，但需纠正。

× If we got the great scores or had a good performance, our teacher would give us chocolate or some candy.

✓ If we got great scores or had good performances, our teacher would give us chocolate or some candy.

“the great scores”应去掉定冠词“the”，且“performance”应复数“performances”，与前文复数“scores”保持一致。

× I think it is related to the history.

✓ I think it is related to history.

“related to the history”中“the”多余，通常说“related to history”。

× The chocolate used to be medicine to help people prevent from cold or something like that.

✓ The chocolate used to be medicine to help people prevent colds or something like that.

“prevent from cold”应改为“prevent colds”，动词“prevent”后直接接名词，不用“from”。

× So people eat chocolate because they think it has a good work on cold.

✓ So people eat chocolate because they think it works well on colds.

“it has a good work on cold”表达不自然，应改为“it works well on colds”。

× I lie at present coca contents the best because it's feature and sweet as sweet as make it has a rich flavor and I like not only the sweetest but also a bitter test with.

✓ I like the current cocoa content the best because of its features; it is sweet and has a rich flavor. I like not only the sweetness but also a bitter taste.

原句中“lie”应为“like”，“coca contents”应为“cocoa content”，“it's feature”应为“its features”，“sweet as sweet as make it has a rich flavor”语序混乱，需调整；“bitter test”应为“bitter taste”。

× Yes, in Valentine's Day the lovers would get chocolate to each other.

✓ Yes, on Valentine's Day lovers would give chocolate to each other.

“in Valentine's Day”应为“on Valentine's Day”；“get chocolate to each other”应为“give chocolate to each other”。

× For example, in March 14th and February 14th the lover one of the lovers would give the other chocolate and in other day they give back.

✓ For example, on March 14th and February 14th, one lover would give the other chocolate, and on other days they give back.

“in March 14th”应为“on March 14th”；“lover one of the lovers”语序错误，应为“one lover”；“in other day”应为“on other days”。