Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "rice chocolate" (likely meant "rice chocolate" or "rice crisp chocolate") and "where while dark chocolates tends to be a bit better for my taste." Try to use simpler, correct sentences and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer within 4-5 sentences for clarity.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it is one of my favorite treats. I especially like milk chocolate because it is sweeter and creamier. Dark chocolate is a bit bitter for my taste, so I don't eat it often. Overall, chocolate is a delicious snack that I enjoy as a small reward.

제안: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but there are minor grammatical mistakes such as "treat myself to be a small piece" which should be "treat myself to a small piece." Also, try to use linking words like "because" or "so" to improve coherence.

예시: I usually eat chocolate about twice a week because it is quite sweet and unhealthy if I eat too much. Since chocolate contains a lot of sugar, I try to moderate my consumption to protect my health. However, I always treat myself to a small piece of dark chocolate in the evening as a reward.

제안: Your answer is clear and well-structured, but there is a small error: "a small amount chocolate" should be "a small amount of chocolate." Also, try to add a linking word like "so" or "therefore" to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: No, I didn't often eat chocolate when I was a kid because my mom didn't allow me to have too much. She believed that chocolate contains a lot of sugar, which is unhealthy for me. Therefore, I was usually limited to eating only a small amount of chocolate.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, avoid vague phrases like "maybe" and be more confident in your opinion.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because its sweet taste appeals to people of all ages. In addition, chocolate is often associated with comfort and happiness. It is also a favorite treat during special occasions like birthdays and holidays.

제안: Your answer is mostly clear but contains an unclear phrase "milk chocolate always sacrifice my profit perfectly." Try to avoid confusing expressions and use simple, clear language. Also, use linking words like "because" and "so" to connect your ideas.

예시: My favorite flavor of chocolate is milk chocolate because it is sweeter and creamier than dark chocolate. I don't like dark chocolate much because it tastes too bitter for me. Since I have a sweet tooth, I prefer milk chocolate as it satisfies my craving perfectly.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "chocolate is very popular about it" and "its taste of all the ages." Try to use clear and simple sentences, and use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it is popular among people of all ages. Chocolate is often associated with happiness and sweetness, so giving it as a gift can bring joy to others.

× I especially like rice chocolate because it is sweeter and creamier, where while dark chocolates tends to be a bit better for my taste.

✓ I especially like rice chocolate because it is sweeter and creamier, while dark chocolate tends to be a bit better for my taste.

The word 'chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' to match the subject and maintain consistency. Also, 'where while' is incorrect; 'while' alone is sufficient to contrast the two types of chocolate.

× However, I always treat myself to be a small piece of dark chocolate in the evening as a reward.

✓ However, I always treat myself to a small piece of dark chocolate in the evening as a reward.

The phrase 'treat myself to be' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'treat myself to' followed by the object. The modal verb 'to be' is unnecessary here.

× Therefore, I was usually limited to eating only a small amount chocolate.

✓ Therefore, I was usually limited to eating only a small amount of chocolate.

The phrase 'a small amount chocolate' is missing the preposition 'of' to correctly link 'amount' and 'chocolate'. This is a common singular/plural and preposition usage issue.

× Is popular world while it is because its sweet taste that appeals to people of all ages and also chocolate is often associated with comfort.

✓ Chocolate is popular worldwide because of its sweet taste that appeals to people of all ages, and it is often associated with comfort.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing words, causing confusion. The corrected sentence rearranges the words to form a clear and grammatically correct sentence.

× Yes, because chocolate is very popular about it, its taste of all the ages and chocolate means sweets and a lot of happiness to bring to others.

✓ Yes, because chocolate is very popular, its taste appeals to people of all ages, and chocolate means sweets and a lot of happiness to bring to others.

The phrase 'popular about it' is incorrect; 'popular' does not require 'about'. Also, 'its taste of all the ages' is incorrect; it should be 'its taste appeals to people of all ages'. The prepositions were misused, affecting clarity.