Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên dùng thì quá khứ đúng cách và tránh lặp từ. Ví dụ, thay vì nói "I have a lot of aids", bạn có thể nói "I had a lot of acne". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn và rõ ràng hơn.

예시: No, I don't like eating chocolate because it's too sweet for me. When I was a teenager, I had a lot of acne, and I noticed that chocolate made my skin worse. Therefore, I try to avoid it to keep my skin healthy.

제안: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng thì hiện tại đơn đúng cách và tránh nói lặp lại. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp và ngắn gọn hơn.

예시: I rarely eat chocolate, maybe just once a year because I'm not very fond of it.

제안: Câu trả lời khá tốt nhưng bạn nên dùng thì quá khứ cho câu hỏi về quá khứ. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I didn't eat chocolate very often when I was a kid, maybe just once a year because I wasn't very fond of sweet foods. Instead, I preferred fresh fruits and other snacks because they were less sugary.

제안: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và từ vựng. Hãy tránh lỗi chính tả như "Addictionally" và dùng từ phù hợp hơn. Sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and contains sugar, which many people find addictive. Moreover, people often eat chocolate as comfort food since it can improve mood and reduce stress, for example, after a long day at work or school.

제안: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên dùng từ đúng và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn.

예시: My favorite flavor of chocolate is matcha because it has a unique, slightly bitter taste that balances the sweetness perfectly. For example, I really enjoy matcha chocolates since they are not too sweet and have a rich, creamy texture.

제안: Câu trả lời cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lặp từ. Bạn nên dùng cấu trúc câu rõ ràng và chính xác hơn để truyền đạt ý kiến.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate makes a good gift, especially if your partner, friend, or colleague likes sweet foods. It's a thoughtful and popular choice.

× Also when I was a teenager I have a lot of aids and I noticed that eating chocolate make my skin worse ever.

✓ Also when I was a teenager I had a lot of acne and I noticed that eating chocolate made my skin worse than ever.

The sentence incorrectly uses present tense 'have' and base form 'make' when referring to past events. 'Have' should be 'had' and 'make' should be 'made' to correctly reflect past tense. Also, 'aids' is incorrect; the intended word is likely 'acne'.

× I try to avoid it to keep my skin healthy.

✓ I try to avoid it to keep my skin healthy.

No correction needed here as 'try to avoid' is correct usage. This sentence is grammatically correct.

× Umm, I really eat chocolate, like maybe just one time per year because as I say before, I not, I'm not into chocolate that's much.

✓ Umm, I really eat chocolate, like maybe just one time per year because as I said before, I'm not into chocolate that much.

The phrase 'as I say before' should be in past tense 'as I said before' to match the time reference. Also, 'I not, I'm not' is redundant and incorrect; 'I'm not' suffices. 'That's much' should be 'that much' as an adverbial phrase.

× I don't really eat chocolate very often, maybe just once a year.

✓ I didn't really eat chocolate very often, maybe just once a year.

The question is about past habits ('Did you often eat chocolate when you were a kid?'), so the answer should be in past tense 'didn't really eat' instead of present tense 'don't really eat'.

× Also, many people enjoy eating chocolates at comfort food because it can improve the mood and reduce stress, for example, after a long day's work or school.

✓ Also, many people enjoy eating chocolates as comfort food because it can improve mood and reduce stress, for example, after a long day's work or school.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect here; 'as comfort food' is the correct phrase. Also, 'the mood' should be 'mood' as a general concept.

× Addictionally, chocolate is often conceived.

✓ Additionally, chocolate is often considered addictive.

The word 'Addictionally' is a misspelling of 'Additionally'. The phrase 'chocolate is often conceived' is incorrect; likely intended is 'considered addictive'. The sentence is incomplete and unclear otherwise.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is matcha because it's hard on unique, slightly bitter, slightly bitter taste that's playing the sweetness perfectly.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is matcha because it has a unique, slightly bitter taste that balances the sweetness perfectly.

The phrase 'hard on unique' is incorrect; 'has a unique' is correct. 'Slightly bitter' is repeated unnecessarily. 'That's playing the sweetness perfectly' is awkward; 'balances the sweetness perfectly' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× For example, I really enjoy Machias chocolates since they are not too sweet and harbor rich creamy teacher.

✓ For example, I really enjoy matcha chocolates since they are not too sweet and have a rich creamy texture.

'Machias' is likely a misspelling of 'matcha'. 'Harbor' is incorrect here; 'have' is appropriate. 'Teacher' is a wrong word; 'texture' is the correct noun to describe the feel of chocolate.

× Yes, I think it's a good idea. Like if you're like your partner or your friend or colleague, like they are kind of into sweet food, then chocolate, yes, chocolate is kind of good to chew as a gift for them.

✓ Yes, I think it's a good idea. For example, if your partner, friend, or colleague is into sweet food, then chocolate is a good gift for them.

The sentence is awkward and contains redundant and incorrect pronoun usage. 'Like if you're like your partner' is incorrect; 'For example, if your partner' is clearer. 'Chocolate is kind of good to chew as a gift' is awkward; 'chocolate is a good gift' is better.