Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and has grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural by directly answering the question, avoiding redundancy, and using correct tense. Also, limit your answer to about 4-5 sentences with clear structure.

예시: Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate because there is a wide variety available in my country. My favorite is Dairy Milk, which is sweet and comes in a beautiful dark wrapper. I often eat it as a treat because it tastes delicious.

제안: Your answer mixes past and present tenses confusingly and is a bit unclear. Try to separate past habits from current ones clearly, use correct tenses, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I eat chocolate whenever I need a quick energy boost. When I was a kid, I used to eat chocolate daily, but now I eat it only occasionally when I feel like it.

제안: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and incomplete sentences. Try to form complete sentences, use correct grammar, and be specific. Also, avoid repeating the same information unnecessarily.

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because I loved its sweet taste. Dairy Milk was my favorite brand, and I used to buy it from my school canteen regularly.

제안: Your answer is too general and incomplete. Try to explain reasons why chocolate is popular, use linking words, and avoid incomplete sentences. Also, use correct grammar and punctuation.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and comes in many varieties. Moreover, famous brands like Dairy Milk and Five Star are loved by many people, which adds to its popularity.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and is somewhat repetitive. Try to use correct tense and sentence structure, and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, clarify your current habits separately from past ones.

예시: My favorite chocolate flavor is Dairy Milk. I have liked it since childhood and used to buy it from my school canteen. Even now, I still enjoy eating it occasionally.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and incomplete. Try to express your opinion clearly, avoid repeating the same idea, and complete your sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: I think chocolate makes a great gift because many people enjoy it. On festive occasions, I often bake chocolate treats to give to my friends and family as presents.

× I like eating chocolates.

✓ I like eating chocolate.

The word 'chocolate' is generally used as an uncountable noun when referring to the substance in general. Using 'chocolates' implies individual pieces or types, which is less common in this context. Hence, 'chocolate' is more appropriate here.

× That is vast variety of chocolates in my country.

✓ There is a vast variety of chocolates in my country.

The sentence lacks the existential phrase 'There is' to introduce the existence of the variety. Adding 'There is' corrects the sentence structure and makes it grammatically correct.

× It is a sweet chocolate and wrapped in very beautiful dark colored wrapper.

✓ It is a sweet chocolate and is wrapped in a very beautiful dark-colored wrapper.

The sentence misses the verb 'is' before 'wrapped' to maintain parallel structure. Also, 'dark colored' should be hyphenated as 'dark-colored' when used as a compound adjective before a noun.

× I ate chocolate.

✓ I ate chocolate.

The sentence is grammatically correct but lacks context. It is acceptable as a simple past tense statement.

× I eat chocolates whenever I need a quick energy boost and when I was a kid I usually eat chocolate daily, but now I moreover I eat chocolates whenever I want to.

✓ I eat chocolate whenever I need a quick energy boost, and when I was a kid, I usually ate chocolate daily, but now I mostly eat chocolate whenever I want to.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun here. The verb tense changes are needed: 'eat' to 'ate' for past habit. 'Moreover' is incorrectly used; 'mostly' fits better. Also, sentence structure is improved by adding commas and conjunctions.

× when I was a kid I usually eat chocolate daily

✓ when I was a kid I usually ate chocolate daily

The action refers to a past habitual activity, so the verb should be in the past tense 'ate' instead of present tense 'eat'.

× When I was a kid, I used to eat chocolate almost everyday because I loved its sweet taste and I really picked chocolate in the school when.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to eat chocolate almost every day because I loved its sweet taste and I really picked chocolate in school then.

'Everyday' is an adjective meaning 'commonplace'; the adverb 'every day' is correct here. The phrase 'in the school when' is incomplete and unclear; 'in school then' is clearer. The sentence uses past tense correctly otherwise.

× Dari milk is my favorite flavor among all the chocolates from my childhood and I feel like having I.

✓ Dairy Milk is my favorite flavor among all the chocolates from my childhood, and I feel like having it.

'Dari milk' is corrected to 'Dairy Milk' as the brand name. The phrase 'I feel like having I' is incorrect; 'it' is the correct pronoun referring to the chocolate. Also, a comma is added before 'and' for clarity.

× Everyone like chocolate, There is a vast variety of chocolate available in every country.

✓ Everyone likes chocolate. There is a vast variety of chocolate available in every country.

'Everyone' is singular and requires the verb 'likes' instead of 'like'. Also, the comma should be replaced with a period to separate two independent clauses.

× Among all the famous brands, Dari, milk and five star chocolate is more famous than others as.

✓ Among all the famous brands, Dairy Milk and Five Star chocolates are more famous than others.

Brand names corrected to 'Dairy Milk' and 'Five Star'. 'Chocolates' is plural to match multiple brands. The verb 'is' changed to 'are' to agree with plural subject. The sentence ending 'as' is incomplete and removed.

× Dari milk is my favorite F flavour among all the flavours.

✓ Dairy Milk is my favorite flavor among all the flavors.

Corrected brand name to 'Dairy Milk'. Removed extra 'F' before 'flavour'. 'Flavour' and 'flavors' spelling is consistent with British English; either is acceptable but should be consistent.

× I like Dari milk since my childhood days and I usually picked chocolate when I was in school.

✓ I have liked Dairy Milk since my childhood days, and I usually picked chocolate when I was in school.

'Since' indicates a period from past to present, so present perfect 'have liked' is appropriate. 'Picked' is past tense and correct for past habit.

× I picked it from my school canteen nowadays still.

✓ I still pick it from my school canteen nowadays.

'Nowadays' indicates present time, so present tense 'pick' is appropriate instead of past tense 'picked'. The adverb 'still' is better placed before the verb for clarity.

× According to me, it is good to use chocolate as gift to others and it is a very good gift.

✓ According to me, it is good to use chocolate as a gift for others, and it is a very good gift.

Added the article 'a' before 'gift' and changed preposition 'to' to 'for' which is more appropriate when giving gifts.

× Moreover, on festive occasions, on the occasion of festivities, I usually baked chocolate gift whenever I want to gift it to somebody and also.

✓ Moreover, on festive occasions, I usually bake chocolate gifts whenever I want to give them to somebody.

'Usually' indicates habitual action, so present tense 'bake' is correct instead of past tense 'baked'. 'Gift' should be plural 'gifts' to match context. 'Want to gift' changed to 'want to give' for natural phrasing. The sentence ending 'and also' is incomplete and removed.