Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. Use more natural expressions and avoid repeating the same idea. For example, instead of saying 'chocolate is very sweet' twice, you can combine ideas and be more concise.

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and delicious. I often buy it from nearby shops, and it always makes me feel happy.

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and repeat words. Also, improve grammar and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I usually eat chocolate during my period because it helps reduce pain and cheers me up. Also, my parents often buy chocolates to make me feel better.

제안: Avoid filler words like 'umm' and improve verb tense consistency. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolates when I was a kid. My family and relatives usually gave me chocolates during festivals and special occasions.

제안: Try to avoid repeating 'sweet' multiple times. Use more varied vocabulary and linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because of its delicious taste and easy availability. For example, I often buy chocolates from a nearby shop, which makes it convenient for many people.

제안: Your answer is unclear and has repetition. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid repeating words. Use correct vocabulary to describe flavors.

예시: My favorite chocolate flavor includes a crunchy texture with a balanced sweetness. I prefer chocolates that are not too sweet or overpowering.

제안: Avoid repeating words like 'best best' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

예시: I think chocolate makes a good gift because it is delicious and brings joy. People usually feel happy to receive chocolates during festivals and special occasions in our culture.

× it's kinda favorite for everyone

✓ it's kind of a favorite for everyone

The phrase 'kinda' is informal and 'favorite' needs an article 'a' before it. 'Kind of' is the correct expression to indicate approximation or type, and 'a favorite' is the correct noun phrase.

× Every people love it

✓ Everyone loves it

'Every people' is incorrect because 'people' is plural and 'every' requires a singular noun. The correct word is 'everyone' which is singular and matches with 'loves'.

× I always used to buy chocolate from my nearby shops

✓ I always used to buy chocolate from my nearby shops

This sentence is correct in past habitual tense using 'used to'. No correction needed.

× it amuse me and it reduce my pain

✓ it amuses me and it reduces my pain

The verbs 'amuse' and 'reduce' need to be in third person singular present tense to agree with 'it'. Modal verb usage is not the issue here, but subject-verb agreement is.

× it amuse me and it reduce my pain

✓ it amuses me and it reduces my pain

In present tense, verbs with third person singular subjects require an 's' at the end. 'Amuse' and 'reduce' should be 'amuses' and 'reduces'.

× my parents also bought me chocolates to make me feel good

✓ my parents also bought me chocolates to make me feel good

This sentence is correct in past tense. No correction needed.

× Yes, I often eat chocolates

✓ Yes, I often ate chocolates

The question is about past habits, so the verb should be in past tense 'ate' instead of present 'eat'.

× my family members and relatives always used to buy me chocolates

✓ my family members and relatives always used to buy me chocolates

This sentence is correct with plural subjects and plural object. No correction needed.

× They usually give me chocolates in the festivals and another occasion

✓ They usually give me chocolates on festivals and other occasions

The correct preposition for festivals and occasions is 'on'. Also, 'another occasion' should be plural 'other occasions' to match 'festivals'.

× my home is near to the shop where I bought chocolates many times

✓ my home is near the shop where I bought chocolates many times

The preposition 'near' does not require 'to' after it. The correct phrase is 'near the shop'.

× It has a very sweet flavor that encourage people to buy it

✓ It has a very sweet flavor that encourages people to buy it

The verb 'encourage' should be 'encourages' to agree with singular subject 'flavor'.

× My kind of flavor of chocolate is that it must be a meal, it must be a it must contain a meal, sugar and a crunchy bar inside the chocolate

✓ My kind of flavor of chocolate is that it must contain malt, sugar, and a crunchy bar inside the chocolate

The word 'meal' is incorrect here; the intended word is likely 'malt'. Also, the sentence is repetitive and should be simplified for clarity.

× I don't like very sweet or or a sharp sweetness in chocolate

✓ I don't like chocolate that is very sweet or has a sharp sweetness

The sentence structure is awkward; rephrasing improves clarity and correctness.

× it is good to use chocolate as a gift to others

✓ it is good to use chocolate as a gift for others

The correct preposition with 'gift' is 'for' when indicating the recipient.

× chocolate is best best and it's delicious

✓ chocolate is the best and it's delicious

The phrase 'best best' is incorrect; the superlative form 'the best' should be used once.

× They will be delighted to receive a chocolate as a gift in occasion or festivals in our culture

✓ They will be delighted to receive chocolate as a gift on occasions or festivals in our culture

The correct preposition is 'on' for occasions and festivals, and 'chocolate' is uncountable here, so no article 'a' is needed.