Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid repetition and filler words like 'uh' and 'you know'. Use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar, for example, say 'Chocolate is a stress buster for me and creates joyful moments.' Also, keep your answer concise and clear.

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it makes me happy and helps me relieve stress. It creates joyful moments whenever I have some.

제안: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid redundancy like 'eat a lot of chocolates every day' and instead say 'eat too much chocolate daily'.

예시: Although my doctor restricts me from eating too much chocolate daily, I usually enjoy some during the weekends as part of my cheat meal.

제안: Avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'you know'. Use past tense consistently and be more specific. For example, say 'I used to eat a lot of chocolate as a child because my teacher rewarded me with chocolate for good marks.'

예시: Yes, I used to eat a lot of chocolate when I was a child because my teacher would give me chocolate as a reward for good marks.

제안: Try to avoid filler words and grammatical errors like 'it could gives'. Use linking words to make your answer coherent, for example, 'Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is sweet and brings happiness; moreover, it helps reduce stress.'

예시: Chocolate is popular around the world because it tastes sweet and brings happiness. Moreover, it acts as a stress buster for many people.

제안: Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, 'My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it is healthier, has fewer calories, and is good for the heart.'

예시: My favourite flavour of chocolate is dark chocolate because it is healthier, contains fewer calories, and benefits heart health.

제안: Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. Use clear linking words and correct grammar. For example, 'Yes, chocolate makes a good gift. However, I prefer healthy chocolates that are less sweet but still delicious.'

예시: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift. However, I prefer giving healthy chocolates that are less sweet yet delicious.

× Yes, I enjoy eating chocolates.

✓ Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate.

The word 'chocolate' is generally used as an uncountable noun when referring to the substance or food in general. Using 'chocolates' implies individual pieces or types, which is less common in this context. Hence, 'chocolate' is more appropriate here.

× Chocolates give me happiness.

✓ Chocolate gives me happiness.

'Chocolate' as an uncountable noun takes singular verb 'gives'. Using 'chocolates' (plural) with 'give' is less appropriate when referring to chocolate in general. Therefore, 'Chocolate gives me happiness' is correct.

× Chocolates is a stressful stress Buster to me and it does create hap uh, you know, a joyful moment when I eat chocolate.

✓ Chocolate is a stressful stress buster to me and it does create, uh, you know, a joyful moment when I eat chocolate.

'Chocolates' is plural but the verb 'is' is singular, causing subject-verb disagreement. Also, 'stress Buster' should be lowercase 'stress buster' as it is a common noun. Using 'Chocolate' (singular uncountable) with 'is' is correct here.

× My doctor has restricted me to eat a lot of chocolates every day, but I tend to eat chocolate during the weekends when I enjoy my cheat meal day.

✓ My doctor has restricted me from eating a lot of chocolate every day, but I tend to eat chocolate during the weekends when I enjoy my cheat meal day.

The verb 'restrict' is followed by 'from' plus gerund form. So, 'restricted me to eat' is incorrect; it should be 'restricted me from eating'. Also, 'chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as uncountable noun.

× My doctor has restricted me to eat a lot of chocolates every day, but I tend to eat chocolate during the weekends when I enjoy my cheat meal day.

✓ My doctor has restricted me from eating a lot of chocolate every day, but I tend to eat chocolate during the weekends when I enjoy my cheat meal day.

As above, 'chocolates' is plural countable, but here 'chocolate' as uncountable noun is more appropriate.

× Yes, I tend to eat a lot of chocolate when I was a kid because you know, umm, I remember 1 instances that you know the teacher, if I get good marks, the teacher will give me or uh, a chocolate for that.

✓ Yes, I used to eat a lot of chocolate when I was a kid because, you know, I remember one instance when the teacher, if I got good marks, would give me a chocolate for that.

The phrase 'I tend to eat' is present tense and inappropriate for past habits; 'used to eat' is correct. '1 instances' is incorrect; it should be 'one instance'. Also, conditional sentence about past should use past tense 'got' and 'would give' for habitual past action.

× Yes, I tend to eat a lot of chocolate when I was a kid because you know, umm, I remember 1 instances that you know the teacher, if I get good marks, the teacher will give me or uh, a chocolate for that.

✓ Yes, I used to eat a lot of chocolate when I was a kid because, you know, I remember one instance when the teacher, if I got good marks, would give me a chocolate for that.

'1 instances' is incorrect because 'instances' is plural but '1' is singular. It should be 'one instance'.

× Because it is sweet and uh, it could gives happiness and it's a stress Buster.

✓ Because it is sweet and, uh, it could give happiness and it's a stress buster.

The modal verb 'could' is followed by the base form of the verb without 's'. So, 'could gives' is incorrect; it should be 'could give'. Also, 'stress Buster' should be lowercase 'stress buster'.

× Because it is sweet and uh, it could gives happiness and it's a stress Buster. Hence chocolate is popular around the world.

✓ Because it is sweet and, uh, it could give happiness and it's a stress buster. Hence, chocolate is popular around the world.

As above, 'could gives' is incorrect; 'could give' is correct. Also, 'stress Buster' should be lowercase. Added comma after 'Hence' for clarity.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate would be the dark chocolate because it is healthy and it is. It has less calories and it is good for your heart as well.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate would be dark chocolate because it is healthy. It has fewer calories and it is good for your heart as well.

'The dark chocolate' is less common; 'dark chocolate' is preferred. Also, 'less calories' is incorrect because 'calories' are countable; 'fewer calories' is correct.

× Yes, I do think it's a good way to gift someone with a lot of chocolates, but however being into more into a healthy side, I would prefer that you know the chocolates are very healthy and it made less sweet and is delicious at the same time.

✓ Yes, I do think it's a good way to gift someone a lot of chocolate, but since I am more into the healthy side, I would prefer chocolates that are very healthy, less sweet, and delicious at the same time.

The phrase 'gift someone with' is incorrect; 'gift someone' or 'give someone' is correct. 'Being into more into a healthy side' is awkward; 'since I am more into the healthy side' is better. Also, 'made less sweet' is incorrect; 'less sweet' as adjective is correct.