Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現が見られます。より自然で効果的な英語表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることが必要です。例えば、'a chocolate'は不自然で、'chocolate'とすべきです。また、'sweetness'の代わりに'its sweetness'など具体的に表現すると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I love eating chocolate because I enjoy its sweetness. It is my favorite sweet snack.

제안: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。'refrain eating'は不自然で、'refrain from eating'が正しいです。また、'I can concern my health'は意味が不明瞭なので、'I am concerned about my health'などに修正しましょう。

예시: I want to eat chocolate every day, but I refrain from eating it because I am concerned about my health. So, I usually eat chocolate three or four times a week.

제안: 回答が不明瞭で、文法的にも誤りがあります。'couldn't eat chocolate anymore'は過去の習慣を表すには不適切です。また、'they are'の部分は意味不明です。より明確に過去の状況を説明し、文を簡潔にまとめましょう。

예시: Actually, I didn't eat chocolate often as a kid because my parents tried to limit my chocolate intake to protect my two teeth.

제안: 文が不自然で、意味が伝わりにくいです。'human most human'は誤りで、'most people'が適切です。また、'this is a little too expensive'は文脈に合っていません。理由を明確にし、論理的に繋げる表現を使いましょう。

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because most people love sweetness. Also, chocolate is easy to eat and has a rich flavor.

제안: 表現が繰り返されており、不自然です。'It feels it feels me special'は意味不明で、'It makes me feel special'などに修正が必要です。また、'I can satisfy this flavor'も不自然なので、'I really enjoy this flavor'などにしましょう。

예시: My favorite flavor is strawberry chocolate because it makes me feel special. I really enjoy its unique taste.

제안: 回答が未完成で、理由が述べられていません。質問に対して直接的かつ具体的な理由を述べることが重要です。文を完結にまとめ、理由を付け加えましょう。

예시: Yes, chocolate is a good gift because many people like it and it is suitable for various occasions.

× Yes, I love eating a chocolate because I love sweetness so I often eat snacks and sweet especially my favorite sweet is chocolate.

✓ Yes, I love eating chocolate because I love sweetness, so I often eat snacks and sweets, especially my favorite sweet, chocolate.

The article 'a' before 'chocolate' is incorrect because 'chocolate' is an uncountable noun here. Also, 'sweet' should be pluralized to 'sweets' when referring to multiple types of sweet foods. Commas are added for clarity.

× I want to eat chocolate every day, but I refrain eating chocolate so I eat 3 or 4 times a week because I can concern my health.

✓ I want to eat chocolate every day, but I refrain from eating chocolate, so I eat it 3 or 4 times a week because I am concerned about my health.

The verb 'refrain' requires the preposition 'from' before the gerund form. Also, 'can concern' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'am concerned about' to express worry or care about health.

× Actually I couldn't eat chocolate anymore because my parents try to limit my chocolate intake and they are. They took care of my 2 teeth.

✓ Actually, I couldn't eat chocolate anymore because my parents tried to limit my chocolate intake. They took care of my two teeth.

The verb 'try' should be in past tense 'tried' to match the past context. Also, '2' should be written as 'two' in formal writing. The sentence 'and they are.' is incomplete and removed for clarity.

× Because human most human love sweetness and chocolate is easy to eat and this is a little too expensive and it is rich.

✓ Because most humans love sweetness, and chocolate is easy to eat, although it is a little expensive and rich.

The sentence is fragmented and lacks proper conjunctions and punctuation. 'Human' should be plural 'humans'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× My most favorite flavor is strawberry chocolate. It feels it feels me special and I love this flavor. I can satisfy this flavor.

✓ My favorite flavor is strawberry chocolate. It makes me feel special, and I love this flavor. It satisfies me.

'Most favorite' is redundant; 'favorite' suffices. 'It feels it feels me special' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'It makes me feel special.' 'I can satisfy this flavor' is incorrect; the flavor cannot be satisfied, but the person can be satisfied by the flavor.

× Yes, chocolate is a good thing to present because.

✓ Yes, chocolate is a good gift to present to others because it is appreciated by many people.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a reason after 'because'. It is completed to form a full sentence with proper structure.