Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating phrases like "because chocolate is a classic dessert that is famous around the world" which is somewhat redundant here. Also, the phrase "a sense of happiness and fulfilling" is slightly awkward; consider using "a sense of happiness and fulfilment". Try to keep your answer within 3-4 sentences and focus on expressing your personal feelings more naturally.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it always makes me feel happy and satisfied. I find it delicious and comforting, especially after a long day.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, "reduce the consume" should be "reduce the consumption". Also, "chocolate to be my cheating meal" is unnatural; instead, say "I like to have chocolate as a treat every two weeks." Try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: I usually eat chocolate once every two weeks because I'm on a diet and need to limit high-calorie snacks. However, I like to treat myself with chocolate occasionally as a little reward.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more grammatically correct. For example, "any rewards of my achievements is a piece of chocolate" should be "any reward for my achievements was a piece of chocolate." Also, try to use linking words like "because" and "so" to make your answer more coherent. Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because it made me happy. Whenever I achieved something, I was rewarded with a piece of chocolate, which made me feel proud.

제안: Your answer contains good points but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. For example, "the chocolate is popular around the world is because that" is incorrect; say "chocolate is popular worldwide because". Also, "it can have different flavor" should be "it comes in different flavours." Use linking words like "firstly" and "also" to organise your ideas clearly.

예시: Firstly, chocolate is popular worldwide because it is a traditional product in countries like Germany, Switzerland, and Belgium. Also, it tastes delicious and comes in many different flavours, which appeals to many people.

제안: Your answer is detailed but a bit long and repetitive. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating "chocolate" multiple times. Also, use linking words like "for example" and "because" to structure your answer. Remember to use British English spelling, e.g., "flavour".

예시: I enjoy many flavours of chocolate, such as milk and dark, but my favourite is milk chocolate because it has a smooth, creamy taste that I find very pleasant.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and grammatically correct. For example, "delicious flavor" should be "delicious flavours" and "delicate package" should be "a delicate package." Also, try to use linking words like "because" and "so" to improve coherence. Keep sentences concise and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift, especially if the person enjoys it. Choosing a box with delicious flavours and attractive packaging makes the gift even more special.

× eating chocolate can bring people a sense of happiness and fulfilling

✓ eating chocolate can bring people a sense of happiness and fulfilment

The word 'fulfilling' is an adjective or verb form, but here a noun is needed to parallel 'happiness'. 'Fulfilment' is the correct noun form to express a feeling of satisfaction.

× I have to reduce the consume of high calorie snacks

✓ I have to reduce the consumption of high-calorie snacks

The verb 'reduce' should be followed by a noun; 'consume' is a verb, so 'consumption' is the correct noun form. Also, 'high calorie' should be hyphenated as 'high-calorie' when used as an adjective before a noun.

× but I like chocolate to be my cheating meal every two weeks

✓ but I like chocolate to be my cheat meal every two weeks

The phrase 'cheating meal' is incorrect; the correct term is 'cheat meal', which refers to a planned indulgence in dieting.

× any rewards of my achievements is a piece of chocolate

✓ any reward for my achievements was a piece of chocolate

The subject 'any rewards' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' or the subject should be singular 'any reward' with 'was'. Also, 'rewards of' should be 'reward for' to indicate the reason for the reward.

× the chocolate is popular around the world is because that it's a very classic cultural thing

✓ chocolate is popular around the world because it is a very classic cultural item

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'chocolate' when speaking generally. Also, 'thing' is vague; 'item' or 'product' is more appropriate. The phrase 'is because that' is incorrect; 'because it is' is correct.

× chocolate is so delicious, it's sweet and it can have different flavor

✓ chocolate is so delicious, it's sweet and it can have different flavours

'Flavor' should be plural 'flavours' to indicate variety. Also, 'flavour' is the British English spelling.

× There are many flavors of chocolate that I love such as milk, dark and original flavor

✓ There are many flavours of chocolate that I love such as milk, dark and original flavours

The list includes multiple types, so 'flavor' should be plural 'flavours' to match the plural subject.

× the mixture of milk and the chocolate can make the chocolate taste smooth and soft

✓ the mixture of milk and chocolate can make the chocolate taste smooth and soft

When speaking generally about chocolate, the definite article 'the' before 'chocolate' is unnecessary.

× I like the creamy flavor of it

✓ I like its creamy flavour

Using 'its' is more concise and natural than 'the ... of it'. Also, 'flavour' is the British English spelling.

× We can choose a box of chocolate that has delicious flavor and also delicate package

✓ We can choose a box of chocolate that has a delicious flavour and a delicate package

The nouns 'flavour' and 'package' need the indefinite article 'a' before them when singular and countable.

× so when they receive it, they can see the beautiful outside and taste it

✓ so when they receive it, they can see the beautiful packaging and taste it

'Outside' is a noun but vague here; 'packaging' is the correct term to describe the external appearance of a box.