Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. For example, mention how often you eat chocolate and why you enjoy it.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate. I usually keep some in the fridge at home, and my family knows that I'm the one who eats most of it.

제안: Make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding repetition and improving sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I usually eat chocolate at least once a week, often after dinner, because I love sweet treats.

제안: Improve fluency by removing filler words and repeating phrases. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons or examples.

예시: Yes, my parents often gave me candies and chocolates as snacks when I was a kid, which is how I developed my love for chocolate.

제안: Use more precise vocabulary and avoid repeating similar ideas. Link your points clearly and provide specific reasons.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because many people enjoy sweet treats. Additionally, eating chocolate can help improve mood when people feel stressed or tired.

제안: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide clear reasons for your preference.

예시: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it has a balanced taste—not too sweet or bitter. Also, many people consider it healthier than regular chocolate since it contains less sugar.

제안: Make your answer more concise and natural by removing filler words and improving grammar. Provide a clear reason and example to support your opinion.

예시: Yes, chocolate makes a great gift because many people enjoy it. For example, during Halloween, children often receive chocolates as treats.

× I love eating chocolates.

✓ I love eating chocolate.

The word 'chocolate' is generally used as an uncountable noun when referring to the food in general. Using 'chocolates' implies individual pieces or types, but here the general term is more appropriate.

× I always talk chocolates everyday at my home in the refrigerator.

✓ I always take chocolates every day at my home from the refrigerator.

The word 'talk' is incorrect here; it should be 'take'. Also, 'everyday' as one word is an adjective meaning common or normal, but the adverb phrase 'every day' (two words) is correct for frequency. 'Chocolates' is acceptable if referring to individual pieces.

× Everyone at home would know.

✓ Everyone at home knows.

The use of 'would know' is incorrect here; the simple present 'knows' is appropriate to express a habitual fact.

× I always I'm the one who actually consume all the chocolates at home.

✓ I am always the one who actually consumes all the chocolates at home.

The phrase 'I always I'm' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'I am always'. Also, 'consume' should be 'consumes' to agree with the singular subject 'who'.

× I think I'm always I always eat chocolate like at least once in every week because I love sweet things.

✓ I think I always eat chocolate at least once every week because I love sweet things.

The phrase 'I'm always I always' is redundant and incorrect; it should be simplified to 'I always'. Also, 'in every week' should be 'every week'.

× Like every time after dinner I always find something eat something sweet to eat so as well as chocolate for me to eat after dinner.

✓ Every time after dinner, I always find something sweet to eat, such as chocolate.

The original sentence is repetitive and awkward. 'Find something eat something sweet to eat' is incorrect; it should be 'find something sweet to eat'. Also, 'so as well as chocolate for me to eat after dinner' is unclear and redundant.

× Yes, my parents love to give us like sweet things like candies and chocolates to eat for snacks.

✓ Yes, my parents loved to give us sweet things like candies and chocolates to eat for snacks.

The question is about the past ('when you were a kid'), so the verb should be in the past tense 'loved' instead of 'love'.

× So that's why that's that's where I found my love with chocolate.

✓ So that's why I found my love for chocolate there.

The phrase 'that's that's' is a repetition error. Also, 'found my love with chocolate' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'found my love for chocolate'.

× I think people really like chocolate because everyone likes to eat sweet treats.

✓ I think people really like chocolate because everyone likes to eat sweet treats.

No correction needed here; sentence is correct.

× Like especially for chocolate, if you get stressed or tired, you always eat something sweets like chocolate to boost your mood.

✓ Especially with chocolate, if you get stressed or tired, you always eat something sweet like chocolate to boost your mood.

The word 'sweets' is plural and refers to candies generally; here 'something sweet' (singular adjective) is correct to describe the food eaten.

× I would say my favorite flavor for chocolate is dark chocolate because it's not too sweet, it's not too bitter, It's like in the middle.

✓ I would say my favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because it's not too sweet, it's not too bitter; it's like in the middle.

The phrase 'flavor for chocolate' should be 'flavor of chocolate'. Also, the sentence needed a semicolon or period to separate the clauses properly.

× And people believe dark chocolate is much of A healthier options than regular chocolate because it contains less sugar.

✓ And people believe dark chocolate is a healthier option than regular chocolate because it contains less sugar.

The phrase 'much of A healthier options' is incorrect. It should be 'a healthier option' (singular) because 'dark chocolate' is singular.

× So yeah, it's it's supposed to be more healthier than regular chocolate.

✓ So yeah, it's supposed to be healthier than regular chocolate.

The phrase 'more healthier' is incorrect because 'healthier' is already a comparative adjective; 'more' is redundant.

× Yes, I think it's chocolate is a good option for gifting because people love chocolate.

✓ Yes, I think chocolate is a good option for gifting because people love chocolate.

The phrase 'it's chocolate' is incorrect; 'it's' is a contraction for 'it is' and is unnecessary here.

× Chocolate is a very popular sweet treats for people around the world as like for example, the like like during the Halloween they're always giving chocolate to the kids.

✓ Chocolate is a very popular sweet treat for people around the world. For example, during Halloween, they always give chocolate to kids.

'Sweet treats' is plural but 'Chocolate' is singular; it should be 'sweet treat'. Also, the sentence was repetitive and awkward; simplified for clarity.

× So yeah, chocolate is a good options for gifts.

✓ So yeah, chocolate is a good option for gifts.

'Options' is plural but 'chocolate' is singular; it should be 'option'.