Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by using simple sentences and avoiding redundancy. Also, clarify your ideas with correct word choices and sentence structure.

예시: No, I don't like eating chocolate because it contains a lot of sugar and is very sweet. I try to avoid it because it can cause me to gain weight.

제안: Focus on giving a clear and concise answer without hesitation sounds like 'umm'. Also, avoid unclear phrases like 'make me get gravy, tea and'. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: I rarely eat chocolate because it is sweet and not good for my health. Therefore, I usually avoid choosing it as a snack.

제안: Complete your sentences and avoid trailing off. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly and provide specific details.

예시: No, I didn't eat chocolate often as a kid because it was too sweet and not healthy. I was concerned it might cause health problems like cavities.

제안: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and explain reasons more clearly. Avoid incomplete or unclear phrases.

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it comes in many flavors, from sweet to bitter. People enjoy it because it can help them relax and feel good.

제안: Use correct verb tenses and avoid repetition. Make your answer more concise and coherent by linking ideas logically.

예시: When I was a kid, my favorite flavor was dark chocolate because it wasn't too sweet. I often shared it with my friends and family.

제안: Clarify your ideas and avoid confusing phrases like 'Douglas' and 'sweet tea'. Use simple and clear sentences to express your opinion and reasons.

예시: Yes, definitely. Chocolate is a popular gift because it is sweet and can help reduce stress. It is also a thoughtful way to show someone you care.

× No, I didn't like eating chocolate because chocolate has some a lot of sugar and it's so sweet so I don't eating so much and I maybe I get gravity when I eat chocolate so I don't like it.

✓ No, I didn't like eating chocolate because chocolate has a lot of sugar and it's so sweet, so I don't eat so much and maybe I get a stomachache when I eat chocolate, so I don't like it.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'don't eating' instead of 'don't eat' which is a verb form error. Also, 'maybe I get gravity' is unclear and likely a misuse of vocabulary; 'stomachache' fits better. The past tense 'didn't like' is correct, but the rest of the sentence needs present tense for general facts and habits. Correct verb forms and vocabulary improve clarity.

× No, I didn't like eating chocolate because chocolate has some a lot of sugar and it's so sweet so I don't eating so much and I maybe I get gravity when I eat chocolate so I don't like it.

✓ No, I didn't like eating chocolate because chocolate has a lot of sugar and it's so sweet, so I don't eat so much and maybe I get a stomachache when I eat chocolate, so I don't like it.

The phrase 'some a lot of sugar' is incorrect; 'a lot of sugar' is the proper quantifier. Using correct quantifiers is important for grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× No, I didn't like eating chocolate because chocolate has some a lot of sugar and it's so sweet so I don't eating so much and I maybe I get gravity when I eat chocolate so I don't like it.

✓ No, I didn't like eating chocolate because chocolate has a lot of sugar and it's so sweet, so I don't eat so much and maybe I get a stomachache when I eat chocolate, so I don't like it.

The phrase 'I don't eating' is incorrect because after 'don't' the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. The correct form is 'I don't eat'.

× Actually I rarely eat chocolate because it's sweet and umm, it is quite bad for my health so I don't choose it for my uh, foods and umm, chocolate. Maybe make me get gravy, tea and.

✓ Actually, I rarely eat chocolate because it's sweet and quite bad for my health, so I don't choose it for my food. Also, chocolate may make me get a stomachache.

The phrase 'choose it for my uh, foods' is incorrect; 'food' is uncountable and should not be plural here. Also, 'Maybe make me get gravy, tea and.' is incomplete and unclear; likely intended to say 'may make me get a stomachache.' Correct quantifiers and clearer phrasing improve understanding.

× Actually I rarely eat chocolate because it's sweet and umm, it is quite bad for my health so I don't choose it for my uh, foods and umm, chocolate. Maybe make me get gravy, tea and.

✓ Actually, I rarely eat chocolate because it's sweet and quite bad for my health, so I don't choose it for my food. Also, chocolate may make me get a stomachache.

The sentence is fragmented and lacks proper structure, especially the last part 'Maybe make me get gravy, tea and.' which is incomplete and unclear. Proper sentence structure requires complete thoughts and clear connections.

× No I didn't I was not into chocolate or some some candies because it's really sweet and it is not good for my health plus chocolate is quite maybe can cause health problems like.

✓ No, I didn't. I was not into chocolate or some candies because they're really sweet and not good for my health. Plus, chocolate may cause health problems.

The sentence lacks proper punctuation and has awkward phrasing. 'Maybe can cause' is incorrect; 'may cause' is appropriate. Also, 'some some candies' is repetitive. Correct past tense and modal verb usage improve clarity.

× No I didn't I was not into chocolate or some some candies because it's really sweet and it is not good for my health plus chocolate is quite maybe can cause health problems like.

✓ No, I didn't. I was not into chocolate or some candies because they're really sweet and not good for my health. Plus, chocolate may cause health problems.

The phrase 'some some candies' is repetitive and incorrect. Also, 'some candies' is acceptable but 'some candies' is better than 'some some candies'. Correct quantifier usage is important.

× No I didn't I was not into chocolate or some some candies because it's really sweet and it is not good for my health plus chocolate is quite maybe can cause health problems like.

✓ No, I didn't. I was not into chocolate or some candies because they're really sweet and not good for my health. Plus, chocolate may cause health problems.

The pronoun 'it's' refers to 'chocolate or some candies' which is plural; the correct pronoun is 'they're' for plural subjects. Proper pronoun agreement is necessary.

× Well, I think because chocolate has various types of choice, people can easily choose many flavors and from sweet to bitter and they feel really good where you help ease.

✓ Well, I think because chocolate has various types, people can easily choose many flavors, from sweet to bitter, and they feel really good as it helps ease stress.

The sentence uses 'and' incorrectly and has unclear phrasing 'where you help ease.' Proper conjunctions and clearer expressions improve sentence flow and meaning.

× Well, I think because chocolate has various types of choice, people can easily choose many flavors and from sweet to bitter and they feel really good where you help ease.

✓ Well, I think because chocolate has various types, people can easily choose many flavors, from sweet to bitter, and they feel really good as it helps ease stress.

The phrase 'various types of choice' is awkward; 'various types' or 'various choices' is better. Also, 'many flavors and from sweet to bitter' is redundant; 'many flavors, from sweet to bitter' is clearer.

× Well, when I was a kid, I often eat black chocolate. It is not too sweet and it is quite my favorite flavor and it's quite easy to eat. And I often eat with my friends and share with my parents.

✓ Well, when I was a kid, I often ate black chocolate. It was not too sweet and it was my favorite flavor. It was quite easy to eat. I often ate it with my friends and shared it with my parents.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the time frame is 'when I was a kid,' past tense verbs like 'ate,' 'was,' and 'shared' should be used consistently.

× Well, when I was a kid, I often eat black chocolate. It is not too sweet and it is quite my favorite flavor and it's quite easy to eat. And I often eat with my friends and share with my parents.

✓ Well, when I was a kid, I often ate black chocolate. It was not too sweet and it was my favorite flavor. It was quite easy to eat. I often ate it with my friends and shared it with my parents.

The sentence omits the object pronoun 'it' after 'eat' and 'share.' The correct form is 'eat it' and 'share it' to specify what is being eaten or shared.

× And I often eat with my friends and share with my parents.

✓ I often ate it with my friends and shared it with my parents.

The preposition 'with' is correctly used here, but the sentence lacks the object 'it' after 'eat' and 'share.' Adding 'it' clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, definitely. Douglas is not only a candy or a sweet tea for to reduce stress, but it is but also a cake for a special one that you beloved and you can express them yourself to others.

✓ Yes, definitely. Chocolate is not only a candy or a sweet treat to reduce stress, but it is also a cake for a special person you love, and you can express your feelings to others with it.

The original sentence misuses 'Douglas' (likely meant 'chocolate'), has awkward phrasing, and incorrect pronouns like 'them' referring to 'a special one.' Correct pronouns and clearer expressions improve understanding.

× Douglas is not only a candy or a sweet tea for to reduce stress, but it is but also a cake for a special one that you beloved and you can express them yourself to others.

✓ Chocolate is not only a candy or a sweet treat to reduce stress, but it is also a cake for a special person you love, and you can express your feelings to others with it.

The phrase 'sweet tea for to reduce stress' is incorrect; 'sweet treat to reduce stress' is appropriate. Also, 'beloved' is misused; 'you love' is clearer. Correct adjective and adverb usage is important.