Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时应避免冗长且不自然的表达，如“a 5 year old little girl”可以简化为“when I was five”。此外，回答应更直接，避免重复表达“due to its high calorie”和“keep my weight low”。建议使用更自然流畅的表达方式。

예시: When I was five, I loved chocolate because it was very sweet. However, now I rarely eat it because it's high in calories and I want to maintain a healthy weight.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，如“a lot of research shows that chocolate eating chocolate”。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

예시: I rarely eat chocolate to keep my weight down, but when I'm stressed or upset, I eat a few pieces because chocolate is known to improve mood.

제안: 回答较好，但“a bottle of chocolate”用词不当，应改为“a bar of chocolate”。建议注意词汇的准确性，并适当使用连接词增强逻辑性。

예시: Yes, definitely. Like most children, I loved sweet treats and chocolate was my favorite. Whenever I did well at school or achieved something special, I would reward myself with a bar of chocolate, which made me feel happy and motivated.

제안: 回答中出现不完整句子“appeals to people of”，影响表达清晰度。建议注意句子完整性，使用恰当的连接词，并避免语法错误。

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide mainly because of its rich, sweet taste that appeals to many people. For example, in many countries, chocolate is a traditional gift during holidays like Christmas. Moreover, it is often seen as a symbol of comfort, making it a favorite treat for relaxation or celebration.

제안: 回答内容丰富，但“whenever I want to try myself”表达不自然。建议使用更自然的表达方式，如“whenever I want to treat myself”。

예시: My favorite flavor is dark chocolate with a subtle hint of orange. I enjoy this combination because the citrus notes complement the rich bitterness of the dark chocolate, creating a unique and refreshing taste whenever I want to treat myself.

제안: 回答较好，表达清晰且内容具体。建议在回答中加入更多连接词，使句子之间更连贯。

예시: Yes, I think giving chocolate as a gift is a great idea because it is widely loved and suitable for many occasions. For example, during holidays or birthdays, a box of chocolates can easily bring happiness to the recipient.

× When I was a 5 year old little girl I was really into chocolate because it is very sweet.

✓ When I was a 5-year-old little girl, I was really into chocolate because it was very sweet.

这里的时间是过去，所以描述巧克力的味道也应该用过去时态。原句中使用了现在时态“is”，应改为过去时态“was”。

× When I was a 5 year old little girl I was really into chocolate because it is very sweet.

✓ When I was a 5-year-old little girl, I was really into chocolate because it was very sweet.

“5 year old”应使用连字符连接，正确形式是“5-year-old”，表示复合形容词。

× But now I hardly ever eat chocolate due to its high calorie and also I have to keep my weight low in order to make myself look pretty.

✓ But now I hardly ever eat chocolate due to its high calories, and also I have to keep my weight low in order to make myself look pretty.

“calorie”应使用复数形式“calories”，因为这里指的是巧克力的热量总量。

× As I just say, I hardly ever eat chocolate now in order to keep my weight low, but when I'm done or upset I will try several pieces of chocolate because a lot of research shows that chocolate eating chocolate can make people happy.

✓ As I just said, I hardly ever eat chocolate now in order to keep my weight low, but when I'm down or upset, I will try several pieces of chocolate because a lot of research shows that eating chocolate can make people happy.

1. “As I just say”应为过去时“said”，因为说话动作已完成。2. “done”应为“down”，表示情绪低落。3. “chocolate eating chocolate”重复，应改为“eating chocolate”。

× As I just say, I hardly ever eat chocolate now in order to keep my weight low, but when I'm done or upset I will try several pieces of chocolate because a lot of research shows that chocolate eating chocolate can make people happy.

✓ As I just said, I hardly ever eat chocolate now in order to keep my weight low, but when I'm down or upset, I will try several pieces of chocolate because a lot of research shows that eating chocolate can make people happy.

“say”应使用过去式“said”，因为说话动作发生在过去。

× Yes, definitely. Like most children, I love sweet treats and chocolate was my favorite.

✓ Yes, definitely. Like most children, I loved sweet treats and chocolate was my favorite.

这里描述的是过去的习惯，动词“love”应使用过去式“loved”。

× Whenever I did well at school or achieved something special, I would reward myself with a bottle of chocolate, which made me feel really happy and motivated to keep working hard.

✓ Whenever I did well at school or achieved something special, I would reward myself with a bar of chocolate, which made me feel really happy and motivated to keep working hard.

“a bottle of chocolate”不合适，巧克力通常用“a bar of chocolate”表示一块巧克力。

× Chocolate is a popular worldwide primarily because of its rich, sweet taste that appeals to people of For example, in many countries, chocolate is a traditional gift during holidays like Christmas.

✓ Chocolate is popular worldwide primarily because of its rich, sweet taste that appeals to people. For example, in many countries, chocolate is a traditional gift during holidays like Christmas.

“a popular worldwide”中“a”不应出现，且句子中“people of”后缺少内容，应删除“of”并断句。

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate with a subtle hint of orange. I enjoy this combination because the notes perfectly complement the rich bitterness of the dark chocolate, creating a unique and refreshing taste whenever I want to try myself.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate with a subtle hint of orange. I enjoy this combination because the notes perfectly complement the rich bitterness of the dark chocolate, creating a unique and refreshing taste whenever I want to try it myself.

“try myself”中缺少宾语，应为“try it myself”，表示“我想尝试它”。

× I choose this flavor because it feels both indulgent.

✓ I choose this flavor because it feels indulgent.

“both”通常用于连接两个并列的形容词或名词，这里只有一个形容词“indulgent”，应去掉“both”。