Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik, tetapi perlu memperbaiki tata bahasa dan menghindari pengulangan kata seperti "why why". Gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan singkat agar lebih efektif.

예시: Yes, I really like eating chocolate because it has a unique slight bitterness combined with natural sweetness, which makes it very enjoyable.

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan alami. Hindari penggunaan kata yang tidak tepat seperti "obvious" dan gunakan linking words untuk menghubungkan ide.

예시: Although I love chocolate, I don't eat it every day. Usually, I have it once or twice a week because I try to control my intake to stay healthy.

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar lebih jelas dan alami. Gunakan linking words untuk menjelaskan alasan dengan lebih baik.

예시: Not really, because my mother had strict rules about eating chocolate. She was worried it might cause weight gain and damage my teeth, so I only ate it occasionally, maybe once a month.

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan ejaan (misalnya "Charlotte" harusnya "chocolate"). Gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan gunakan linking words untuk menghubungkan ide.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it has a unique bitterness and natural sweetness. Moreover, many products like chocolate cake, ice cream, gelato, pancakes, and Nutella are made from chocolate, which increases its popularity.

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan hindari penggunaan angka yang tidak tepat seperti "900%". Gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan jelas.

예시: If I have to choose between bitter and milk chocolate, I definitely prefer milk chocolate because it has a creamy texture and feels smooth in my mouth.

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan alami. Hindari kalimat yang tidak jelas seperti "it helps with us from the chocolate itself" dan gunakan linking words untuk menghubungkan ide.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift, especially milk chocolate because of its smooth texture. Many people love chocolate, so receiving it as a gift always makes me feel happy and appreciated.

× I think you asking right person 'cause I like chocolate so much.

✓ I think you are asking the right person because I like chocolate so much.

The verb 'asking' needs an auxiliary verb 'are' to form the present continuous tense. Without 'are', the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× Like they have a slight of bitterness that was unique and also have some sweetness not from the sugar but from the chocolate itself.

✓ It has a slight bitterness that is unique and also has some sweetness not from the sugar but from the chocolate itself.

The pronoun 'they' is incorrect because 'chocolate' is singular. Also, 'slight of bitterness' should be 'slight bitterness'. The verbs must agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× So there's just like a reason why why I like chocolate so much.

✓ So there's just a reason why I like chocolate so much.

The phrase 'there's' is correct for 'there is'. The repeated 'why' is redundant and should be removed for clarity.

× Previously I say that I love chocolate so much, but I'm not the kind of person that eating chocolate everyday because I like it.

✓ Previously I said that I love chocolate so much, but I'm not the kind of person who eats chocolate every day because I like it.

The verb 'say' should be in past tense 'said' to match 'Previously'. 'That eating' is incorrect; it should be 'who eats' to correctly refer to the person and use the third person singular form.

× I eat chocolate like once in a week or twice in a week.

✓ I eat chocolate once or twice a week.

The phrase 'once in a week' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'once a week'. Also, 'twice in a week' should be 'twice a week'.

× I actually really have a regulation, strict regulation of it 'cause I don't want to be obvious because of chocolate.

✓ I actually have a strict regulation about it because I don't want to be obvious because of chocolate.

The adverb 'really' is unnecessary here. The phrase 'a regulation, strict regulation' is redundant; 'a strict regulation' is sufficient. Also, 'of it' should be 'about it' to correctly express the regulation concerning chocolate.

× Not really 'cause my mom have a strict regulation of it.

✓ Not really because my mom has strict rules about it.

The subject 'my mom' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' not 'have'. Also, 'regulation' is better replaced with 'rules' in this context, and 'of it' should be 'about it'.

× Not regulation, it's more to be like rules 'cause he fear that I will gain weight and also damaging my teeth.

✓ Not regulation, it's more like rules because she fears that I will gain weight and also damage my teeth.

The pronoun 'he' is incorrect if referring to 'my mom'; it should be 'she'. Also, 'fear' should be 'fears' to agree with the singular subject. 'Damaging' should be 'damage' to parallel 'gain weight'.

× So yeah, I don't really. I'm not that kind of get that eating chocolate mostly just like once in a year or once in a month.

✓ So yeah, I don't really. I'm not the kind of person who eats chocolate mostly just once a year or once a month.

The phrase 'I'm not that kind of get that eating chocolate' is ungrammatical. It should be 'I'm not the kind of person who eats chocolate'. Also, 'once in a year' and 'once in a month' should be 'once a year' and 'once a month'.

× Based on what I stated before, Charlotte have unique bitterness and also natural sweetness from the chocolate itself.

✓ Based on what I stated before, chocolate has a unique bitterness and also natural sweetness from the chocolate itself.

'Charlotte' is a misspelling of 'chocolate'. The subject 'chocolate' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' not 'have'.

× So I think that's why people like chocolate and also there's just like a lot of product that was make it by chocolate material such as like chocolate cake, ice cream, Gelato, pancakes or just like Nutella.

✓ So I think that's why people like chocolate and also there are a lot of products made from chocolate such as chocolate cake, ice cream, gelato, pancakes, or Nutella.

'Product' should be plural 'products'. 'Was make it by' is incorrect; it should be 'made from'. 'There is' should be 'there are' to agree with plural 'products'.

× Umm if I have an option of bitter chocolate and milk chocolate, I will choose milk chocolate 900% 'cause I like chocolate that have a Milky side of it and it feels so soft in my mouth when I eat it.

✓ If I have the option of bitter chocolate and milk chocolate, I will choose milk chocolate 100% because I like chocolate that has a milky side and it feels so soft in my mouth when I eat it.

'An option' should be 'the option' in this context. '900%' is exaggerated and should be '100%'. 'Have' should be 'has' to agree with singular 'chocolate'. 'Milky' should not be capitalized.

× Of course, yes, especially Milky chocolate that have a smooth texture and it helps with us from the chocolate itself.

✓ Of course, yes, especially milky chocolate that has a smooth texture and it helps us because of the chocolate itself.

'Have' should be 'has' to agree with singular 'chocolate'. 'Helps with us' is incorrect; it should be 'helps us'. 'Milky' should not be capitalized.

× And I find that many people love chocolates, right?

✓ And I find that many people love chocolate, right?

'Chocolate' is an uncountable noun here, so it should not be pluralized as 'chocolates'.

× So if someone gave me some chocolate, I was so happy and I really feel so like so appreciable for it.

✓ So if someone gave me some chocolate, I was so happy and I really felt so appreciative of it.

The verb 'feel' should be in past tense 'felt' to match 'was'. 'Appreciable' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'appreciative'. 'Appreciative of' is the correct prepositional phrase.