Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时应避免重复表达，如“when I play, when I'm playing badminton”可以简化。同时，句子结构可以更自然流畅。

예시: Yes, I love chocolate because it tastes sweet and gives me energy, especially when I play badminton.

제안: 回答中有重复表达“is not healthy, is unhealthy”，应避免冗余。句子可以更简洁，且使用连接词使表达更连贯。

예시: I usually eat chocolate twice a week when I play badminton, but I try not to eat too much because it's unhealthy.

제안: 回答中“when I was there”表达不准确，应改为“when I was a kid”。此外，句子可以更简洁，避免重复。

예시: No, I rarely ate chocolate as a child because my parents thought it was unhealthy and encouraged me to eat more vegetables.

제안: 回答结构清晰，但可以使用更多连接词使句子更流畅，同时词汇可以更丰富。

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it's affordable, tastes sweet and delicious, provides energy, and is easy to carry.

제안: 回答中“tastes not good”表达不自然，应改为“doesn't taste good”。句子可以更简洁，避免冗长。

예시: My favorite flavor is dark chocolate. Although some people don't like its taste, I find it delicious and satisfying.

제안: 避免句子开头使用连词“Because”，并减少重复“the chocolate”。句子应更自然流畅。

예시: Yes, chocolate makes a great gift because it's affordable and enjoyed by almost everyone.

× Not only chocolate tastes sweet, but also it can provide me with some energy when I play, when I'm playing badminton.

✓ Not only does chocolate taste sweet, but it can also provide me with some energy when I play badminton.

“Not only... but also”结构中，主语和谓语需要倒装，正确形式是“Not only does chocolate taste sweet”。此外，“but also”后面不需要“it”，直接接谓语动词。

× No, I hardly had chocolate when I was there because my parents worried that eating too much chocolate would make me fat.

✓ No, I hardly had chocolate when I was a kid because my parents worried that eating too much chocolate would make me fat.

“when I was there”中的“there”用法不当，应改为“a kid”或“young”，表示“我小时候”。

× They suggested me to eat more vegetables.

✓ They suggested that I eat more vegetables.

动词“suggest”后面不接“me to do”，而是用宾语从句，结构为“suggest that + 主语 + 动词原形”。

× Although someone may think it tastes not good but for me the dark chocolate can make my mouth water and it gives me a satisfying taste experience.

✓ Although some people may think it does not taste good, for me the dark chocolate can make my mouth water and it gives me a satisfying taste experience.

“tastes not good”表达不自然，应改为“does not taste good”。此外，“someone”改为“some people”更合适。

× Although someone may think it tastes not good but for me the dark chocolate can make my mouth water and it gives me a satisfying taste experience.

✓ Although some people may think it does not taste good, for me the dark chocolate can make my mouth water and it gives me a satisfying taste experience.

“Although... but...”结构重复使用“but”是不正确的，应该用逗号或省略“but”。