Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中表达了观点，但句子结构稍显混乱，且有语法错误。建议简化句子，避免重复，并注意主谓一致。

예시: I don't like eating chocolate very much because it is too sweet and can make me gain weight. Therefore, I rarely eat it, even when my friends offer it to me.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不够自然。建议使用更简洁的句子，并注意代词的一致性。

예시: I rarely eat chocolate because I don't like it much. I only taste it when there is chocolate on a birthday cake.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，表达不够清晰。建议简化句子，避免重复，并注意时态和单复数。

예시: I rarely ate chocolate as a child because my parents had strict rules. They believed chocolate could make me gain weight and cause toothaches.

제안: 回答中句子结构不够连贯，表达不够准确。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并注意表达的完整性。

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide for several reasons. Firstly, many people enjoy sweet tastes. Secondly, chocolate provides energy, which is helpful after exercise.

제안: 回答较为完整，但有语法错误和表达不够自然。建议注意介词使用和句子简洁。

예시: My favorite flavor is dark chocolate because I don't like very sweet things. It suits me best and has less fat, so I don't worry about gaining weight.

제안: 回答表达了观点，但句子结构复杂且有双重否定错误。建议简化句子，避免双重否定，使表达更清晰。

예시: I think it depends on the season. In summer, chocolate is not a good gift because it melts easily. But in winter, it is a good choice since it won't melt and many people like it.

× so I seldom eat them, especially my friends give me and persuade me to eat it.

✓ so I seldom eat it, even when my friends give me some and persuade me to eat it.

这里的'chocolate'是不可数名词，不能用复数代词'them'，应使用单数代词'it'。

× so I will eat them only when the birthday cake provided for me and I will taste some chocolate on it.

✓ so I will eat it only when the birthday cake is provided for me and I will taste some chocolate on it.

'Chocolate'是不可数名词，不能用复数代词'them'，应使用单数代词'it'。

× so I will eat them only when the birthday cake provided for me and I will taste some chocolate on it.

✓ so I will eat it only when the birthday cake is provided for me and I will taste some chocolate on it.

句中缺少系动词'is'，正确表达应为'the birthday cake is provided'。

× Actually, I seldom ate chocolate when I was a kid because my parents have a very strict regulation for me.

✓ Actually, I seldom ate chocolate when I was a kid because my parents had very strict rules for me.

描述过去的情况，谓语动词应使用过去时'had'，且'regulation'用复数形式'rules'更合适。

× They thing they thought chocolate made me fat and have a toothache.

✓ They thought chocolate made me fat and caused toothaches.

原句中'thing'多余且错误，且'toothache'应用复数形式'toothaches'，并且动词搭配应为'caused'。

× And also chocolate can provide some energy for the people who just do some exercise from.

✓ And also chocolate can provide some energy for people who have just done some exercise.

'from'用法错误，应改为完成时态表达'have just done some exercise'。

× My go to flavor is dark chocolate because I'm not really into sweets so I think dark chocolate will suit me best and it also contains less fat so I can have it without concern my weight.

✓ My go-to flavor is dark chocolate because I'm not really into sweets, so I think dark chocolate suits me best and it also contains less fat, so I can have it without worrying about my weight.

'go to'应为复合形容词'go-to'，'suit'应用第三人称单数形式'suits'，'concern'用法错误，应改为动名词形式'worrying about'。

× Actually I think it depends on the time you send it.

✓ Actually, I think it depends on when you send it.

'depends on the time you send it'表达不自然，改为'depends on when you send it'更符合英语习惯。

× For example during the summer I don't think it's a good choice to send others a chocolate because it will melt and in the winter it may be a good choice because many people love chocolates and it won't not melt.

✓ For example, during the summer I don't think it's a good choice to send others chocolate because it will melt, and in the winter it may be a good choice because many people love chocolate and it won't melt.

'a chocolate'错误，'chocolate'为不可数名词不加冠词；'won't not melt'双重否定，应改为'won't melt'。