Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid repetition and make your answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons with linking words. For example, instead of repeating 'I would like to eat chocolates' and 'I used to to eat a chocolate', say it once clearly and add why you like it.

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because I have enjoyed it since childhood. Moreover, it helps me relax whenever I feel stressed.

제안: Use correct tense and avoid redundancy. Also, try to link your sentences smoothly. For example, mention the frequency clearly and explain why you eat it regularly.

예시: I eat chocolate regularly, usually after every meal, because it satisfies my sweet cravings and lifts my mood.

제안: Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about the tasks. For example, explain what kind of tasks and how chocolates were used as rewards.

예시: Yes, I used to eat chocolate daily as a child. Additionally, my parents rewarded me with chocolates whenever I completed my homework or chores.

제안: Avoid awkward phrasing and improve clarity. Use linking words to explain reasons logically. Also, use more precise vocabulary instead of repeating 'sweet'.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it serves as a comfort food. People enjoy its rich taste and sweetness, which makes it a favourite treat for many.

제안: Make your answer more natural by avoiding awkward phrases like 'My taste developed according to this.' Instead, explain your preference clearly and add a reason.

예시: My favourite flavour is Dairy Milk chocolate because I have been eating it since childhood, and I have grown to love its creamy taste.

제안: Avoid repetition and unclear expressions like 'improves their relations with the sweet sweet food.' Instead, explain how giving chocolate as a gift can strengthen relationships.

예시: Yes, giving chocolate as a gift is a great idea because it shows thoughtfulness and can help strengthen bonds between people.

× Definitely I I would like to eat chocolates because since my childhood I used to to eat a chocolate and it also makes me relax when I feel stressed.

✓ Definitely I would like to eat chocolates because since my childhood I used to eat chocolate and it also makes me relax when I feel stressed.

The phrase 'used to to eat' contains a repeated 'to' which is incorrect. The correct form is 'used to eat' where 'used to' is followed by the base form of the verb. Also, 'a chocolate' is incorrect when referring to chocolate in general; 'chocolate' is uncountable here.

× Definitely I I would like to eat chocolates because since my childhood I used to to eat a chocolate and it also makes me relax when I feel stressed.

✓ Definitely I would like to eat chocolates because since my childhood I used to eat chocolate and it also makes me relax when I feel stressed.

The word 'a chocolate' is incorrect because 'chocolate' is an uncountable noun when referring to the substance in general. We should say 'eat chocolate' without 'a' or use 'a piece of chocolate' if referring to a countable item.

× After every meal I liked to eat a chocolate.

✓ After every meal I like to eat chocolate.

The sentence uses past tense 'liked' which is inconsistent with the present habitual action implied by 'after every meal'. Also, 'a chocolate' is incorrect here as 'chocolate' is uncountable; the article 'a' should be omitted.

× After every meal I liked to eat a chocolate.

✓ After every meal I like to eat chocolate.

The question asks about current habits, so present tense 'like' is appropriate instead of past tense 'liked'.

× my parents also gives me a chocolate as a reward when I complete my task which is given by my parents.

✓ my parents also give me chocolate as a reward when I complete the tasks given by them.

The subject 'parents' is plural, so the verb should be 'give' not 'gives'. Also, 'a chocolate' is incorrect; 'chocolate' is uncountable here. 'My task which is given by my parents' is better expressed as 'the tasks given by them' for clarity and conciseness.

× my parents also gives me a chocolate as a reward when I complete my task which is given by my parents.

✓ my parents also give me chocolate as a reward when I complete the tasks given by them.

Using 'a chocolate' is incorrect because 'chocolate' is uncountable in this context. It should be 'give me chocolate' or 'give me a piece of chocolate' if referring to a countable item.

× my parents also gives me a chocolate as a reward when I complete my task which is given by my parents.

✓ my parents also give me chocolate as a reward when I complete the tasks given by them.

The verb 'gives' does not agree with the plural subject 'parents'. The correct verb form is 'give'.

× Chocolate is one of the sweet most sweet thing in food.

✓ Chocolate is one of the sweetest things in food.

The phrase 'sweet most sweet thing' is incorrect. The correct superlative form is 'sweetest'. Also, 'thing' should be plural 'things' because 'one of the' refers to multiple items.

× Chocolate is one of the sweet most sweet thing in food.

✓ Chocolate is one of the sweetest things in food.

The phrase 'one of the' requires a plural noun following it, so 'thing' should be 'things'. Also, 'sweet most sweet' is incorrect; the superlative adjective 'sweetest' should be used.

× It improves their relations with the sweet sweet food and also make us attached to each other.

✓ It improves relationships through sweet food and also makes us feel attached to each other.

The phrase 'improves their relations with the sweet sweet food' is unclear and awkward. 'Relations' should be 'relationships'. Also, 'make us attached' is incorrect; it should be 'makes us feel attached'. The verb must agree with the singular subject 'It'.