Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议使用正确的时态和句式，避免无关信息，直接表达观点并给出具体原因。

예시: I don't like eating chocolate because it is very sweet and unhealthy. Eating too much chocolate can lead to health problems like obesity.

제안: 回答较为冗长且重复，建议简洁表达频率并用恰当的连接词说明原因，避免重复词汇。

예시: I rarely eat chocolate, but during the final week of college, I eat it to boost my energy and improve my mood.

제안: 回答中语法错误较多，建议使用正确的时态和句式，表达清晰具体，避免重复和错误的词汇。

예시: No, I didn't eat chocolate often as a child because I didn't like sweet food. Also, chocolate contains a lot of sugar and was expensive, so my parents didn't buy it often.

제안: 回答内容较好，但语法和表达不够准确，建议使用更自然的表达和连接词，使句子更流畅。

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it symbolizes happiness and is often given as a gift during festivals like Valentine's Day. Besides its special meaning, chocolate can also improve people's mood.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰，建议简洁明了地表达喜好并给出具体原因，避免重复和不连贯的句子。

예시: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it is less sweet and tastes better to me. Eating it reminds me to study hard, which I find motivating.

제안: 回答表达混乱且有语法错误，建议简洁表达观点并用具体理由支持，避免重复和不连贯。

예시: I don't think chocolate is always a good gift because some people, like me, don't like it. There are many other gift options that might be better.

× Though I don't like eat chocolate as I don't have a disability and also icing chocolate is not benefit for our health because it's too sweet.

✓ Though I don't like eating chocolate as I don't have a disability and also icing chocolate is not beneficial for our health because it's too sweet.

动词like后面应接动名词形式，故将eat改为eating。

× Though I don't like eat chocolate as I don't have a disability and also icing chocolate is not benefit for our health because it's too sweet.

✓ Though I don't like eating chocolate as I don't have a disability and also icing chocolate is not beneficial for our health because it's too sweet.

benefit是名词或动词，形容词形式应为beneficial，表示“有益的”。

× It may cause some disease such as obesity.

✓ It may cause some diseases such as obesity.

disease是可数名词，表示“疾病”，应使用复数形式。

× I seldom eat chocolate except for the final week of college because at that time I really feel so energy exhausted and I need to eat some sweet sweet sweet chocolate to improve my mood.

✓ I seldom eat chocolate except for the final week of college because at that time I really feel so energetically exhausted and I need to eat some sweet chocolate to improve my mood.

energy是名词，形容词应为energetic，副词为energetically，表示“精力充沛地”；重复的sweet应去除多余部分。

× No, when I was a kid I never eat chocolate as I don't like some sweet food and chocolate have contain too much sugar.

✓ No, when I was a kid I never ate chocolate as I didn't like some sweet food and chocolate contains too much sugar.

描述过去时应使用过去式，eat改为ate，like改为liked；chocolate为第三人称单数，动词用contains。

× No, when I was a kid I never eat chocolate as I don't like some sweet food and chocolate have contain too much sugar.

✓ No, when I was a kid I never ate chocolate as I didn't like some sweet food and chocolate contains too much sugar.

chocolate为不可数名词或单数，动词应用第三人称单数形式contains。

× But also chocolate is really expensive and my parents don't want afford pay pay so much money for the chocolate.

✓ But also chocolate is really expensive and my parents don't want to afford to pay so much money for the chocolate.

动词want后接动词不定式，缺少to；afford后也需接不定式to pay。

× Well, chocolate is not the symbol of happiness but also as a gift between people and people especially in the festivals such as Valentine's Day.

✓ Well, chocolate is not only the symbol of happiness but also a gift between people, especially during festivals such as Valentine's Day.

使用not only... but also结构时，需完整表达；as a gift改为a gift；people重复，应简化；in the festivals改为during festivals。

× And except for the special meanings, chocolate also have the function that can improve people's mood.

✓ And except for the special meanings, chocolate also has the function that can improve people's mood.

chocolate为单数，动词应用第三人称单数has。

× Oh well, I like the black chocolate because it's not so sweet and even it it tastes a little bit better.

✓ Oh well, I like black chocolate because it's not so sweet and even it tastes a little bit better.

the black chocolate中the不必要，重复的it应去除。

× And also while I ate black chocolate I always remind me myself to study hard and these are similar in its taste.

✓ And also while I eat black chocolate, I always remind myself to study hard and these are similar in taste.

remind后直接接反身代词myself，不用me myself；ate改为eat保持时态一致；its taste改为in taste。

× No, I don't think it's a good choice as there are a lot of there must have a lot of people don't like chocolate like me.

✓ No, I don't think it's a good choice as there must be a lot of people who don't like chocolate like me.

句子结构混乱，there are a lot of there must have改为there must be a lot of；people后需加who引导定语从句。

× So and and there are various of choice for you to to be a gift.

✓ So, there are various choices for you to choose as a gift.

and and重复，应去除；various后不加of；choice应为复数choices；to to重复，应去除；表达更自然。

× So sometimes the other things may be better.

✓ So sometimes other things may be better.

the other things中the不必要，去除更自然。