Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and clarify your points.

예시: Yes, I've loved chocolate since childhood because of its rich taste. Among all types, Dairy Milk is my favorite, especially when I'm stressed, as it helps me relax and feel better.

제안: Improve clarity by structuring your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid unclear phrases and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: I don't eat chocolate very often because I think it doesn't go well with tea. However, I usually enjoy chocolate in the evening, especially when I'm feeling stressed from work or personal issues.

제안: Focus on using correct verb tenses and avoid redundancy. Provide a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details with linking words.

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because it was my favorite treat. I enjoyed trying all the different flavors since I loved sweet foods in general.

제안: Use clearer and more precise language. Avoid unclear phrases and provide specific reasons with linking words to support your opinion.

예시: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide because most children prefer it as their first choice of sweet. Additionally, people of all ages enjoy its taste, making it a favorite from childhood onwards.

제안: Improve grammar and sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and express feelings more naturally.

예시: I've tried many chocolates, but my favorite is Dairy Milk because it's delicious. Eating it makes me feel over the moon and brings me inner happiness.

제안: Make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding repetition. Use correct tense and linking words to explain your reasons clearly.

예시: Definitely, giving chocolate as a gift is a great way to show affection. For example, I recently gave a box of chocolates to a close friend for her birthday.

× Yes, I love chocolate since my childhood because I like the taste of chocolate.

✓ Yes, I have loved chocolate since my childhood because I like the taste of chocolate.

The sentence uses 'love' in the simple present tense with 'since my childhood', which requires the present perfect tense to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present. Use 'have loved' instead of 'love'.

× so it's makes me unwind from my stress.

✓ so it makes me unwind from my stress.

The phrase 'it's makes' is incorrect because 'it's' is a contraction of 'it is' and should not be followed by 'makes'. The correct form is 'it makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× I eat chocolate because it's not good over tea.

✓ I don't usually eat chocolate because it's not good with tea.

The phrase 'not good over tea' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'with' when referring to something consumed together. Also, 'Not usually' is awkward; 'I don't usually eat chocolate' is clearer.

× Yes, I often eat chocolate.

✓ Yes, I often ate chocolate.

The question is about past habits ('Did you often eat chocolate when you were a kid?'), so the verb should be in the past tense 'ate' instead of present tense 'eat'.

× When I was a kid that was my favorite one.

✓ When I was a kid, that was my favorite one.

A comma is needed after the introductory clause 'When I was a kid' to improve sentence clarity and structure.

× That time I eat all the chocolate flavors.

✓ At that time, I ate all the chocolate flavors.

The phrase 'That time' should be 'At that time' for correct preposition use, and 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match the past context.

× Nothing is like my favorite one.

✓ Nothing was like my favorite one.

The sentence refers to a past time, so the verb should be in past tense 'was' instead of 'is' to maintain tense consistency.

× I eat all because I like the sweet flavor and I ate so many sweet things.

✓ I ate all because I liked the sweet flavor and I ate so many sweet things.

The first verb 'eat' should be past tense 'ate' to match the past context, and 'like' should be 'liked' for consistency in past tense narration.

× Well, I think chocolate is quite famous all over the world because majority of kids give their first preference to eat chocolate and it's everyone's favorite.

✓ Well, I think chocolate is quite famous all over the world because the majority of kids give their first preference to eating chocolate and it's everyone's favorite.

The phrase 'majority of kids' needs the definite article 'the'. Also, 'preference to eat' should be 'preference to eating' as 'preference to' is followed by a gerund.

× Whether skate or a young nobody, nothing matters.

✓ Whether skate or a young nobody, nothing matters.

This sentence is unclear and likely contains a misused word 'skate'. Possibly intended 'skate' is incorrect; clarification is needed. No grammatical correction can be made without context.

× It's everybody favorite thing since their childhood.

✓ It's everybody's favorite thing since their childhood.

The possessive form 'everybody's' is required to indicate ownership. Without the apostrophe and 's', the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× Well, I ate all the chocolates, but one of my favorite one is Dairy Milk because it's so delicious.

✓ Well, I have tried all the chocolates, but one of my favorite ones is Dairy Milk because it's so delicious.

'Ate' is past tense of 'eat' but here the meaning is trying chocolates in general, so present perfect 'have tried' is more appropriate. Also, 'one of my favorite one' is incorrect; it should be 'one of my favorite ones'.

× When I eat the Dairy Milk that time I I'm like over the moon because it makes me feel so happy.

✓ When I eat Dairy Milk, I feel like I'm over the moon because it makes me feel so happy.

The phrase 'that time I I'm like' is incorrect and redundant. The sentence should be restructured for clarity and correct tense usage.

× Like it's give me a inner happiness and our that.

✓ Like it gives me an inner happiness and all that.

'it's give' should be 'it gives' for subject-verb agreement. 'a inner' should be 'an inner' because 'inner' starts with a vowel sound. 'our that' is incorrect; likely intended 'all that'.

× Definitely it's a very good idea to give chocolate as a gift to our peers because it's a very good way to show our love in front of others.

✓ Definitely, it's a very good idea to give chocolate as a gift to our peers because it's a very good way to show our love to others.

The phrase 'show our love in front of others' is awkward; 'show our love to others' is more natural and correct preposition usage.

× As recently my one of my best friend's birthday gone so I gave her a box of chocolate.

✓ Recently, one of my best friend's birthdays passed, so I gave her a box of chocolate.

The phrase 'my one of my best friend's birthday gone' is incorrect. 'Recently' should start the sentence, 'one of my best friend's birthdays passed' is correct past tense, and the sentence should be split for clarity.