Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it contains some filler words like 'uh' and some redundancy. Try to be more concise and avoid hesitation sounds. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: I don't usually eat chocolate because I avoid sugar and saturated fats. However, I enjoy trying dark chocolate occasionally because it has less sugar and a richer taste.

제안: Your answer is relevant but a bit repetitive and contains many filler words. Try to organize your answer more clearly and use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: I don't buy chocolate often, but I enjoy tasting dark chocolates when friends give them to me, especially if they come from different countries or have unique cocoa flavors.

제안: Your answer is good but could be improved by avoiding repetition and using clearer sentence structures. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas.

예시: I used to eat chocolate often as a kid because I didn't know about its health effects. However, now I avoid it because I understand that sugar and saturated fats can be harmful.

제안: Your answer covers good points but is somewhat repetitive and includes filler words. Try to use more precise vocabulary and linking words to make your answer more coherent and concise.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is a common sweet shared during celebrations. Its attractive packaging and delicious taste appeal to both children and adults.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains many filler words and could be more fluent. Try to combine sentences and use linking words to improve flow.

예시: My favorite chocolate flavor is matcha, which I recently tried. Although it's an acquired taste, I found it unique and would love to try it again.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains many filler words. Try to organize your ideas more clearly, avoid hesitation sounds, and complete your thoughts for a more effective response.

예시: I think chocolate makes a good gift because it is a popular souvenir from different countries. However, it's important to consider health aspects when choosing chocolates to give.

× I'm not really fond of eating chocolate, but if it's a dark chocolate I'd love to try.

✓ I'm not really fond of eating chocolate, but if it's dark chocolate I'd love to try.

The article 'a' before 'dark chocolate' is unnecessary because 'dark chocolate' is an uncountable noun here. Removing 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× I don't prefer having sugar in my diet as well as saturated fats, therefore I prefer not to eat chocolate that much.

✓ I don't prefer having sugar in my diet as well as saturated fats; therefore, I prefer not to eat chocolate that much.

A semicolon or period is needed before 'therefore' to correctly separate the two independent clauses. Also, adding a comma after 'therefore' improves clarity.

× And uh, if it is dark chocolate, I give it a try.

✓ And uh, if it is dark chocolate, I give it a try.

This sentence is grammatically correct; however, 'give it a try' is more natural in the present simple tense here, so no correction is needed.

× As I mentioned, I just love dark chocolates and I try to, uh, I, I don't purchase it, but if somebody gives it, I definitely, uh, try and see how that tastes, especially when it is coming from a new country or if it has special, a specialty cocoa.

✓ As I mentioned, I just love dark chocolate and I try to, uh, I, I don't purchase it, but if somebody gives it, I definitely, uh, try and see how that tastes, especially when it is coming from a new country or if it has special, a specialty cocoa.

'Dark chocolate' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'dark chocolates' in this context.

× I actually eat chocolate.

✓ I actually ate chocolate.

The question is about past habits ('Did you often eat chocolate when you were a kid?'), so the verb should be in the past tense 'ate' to match the time frame.

× I try to try not to eat chocolate, which contains a lot of sugar and saturated fats.

✓ I try not to eat chocolate, which contains a lot of sugar and saturated fats.

The phrase 'try to try' is redundant. The correct form is 'try not to eat' to express the intention to avoid eating chocolate.

× When it comes to a specific occasion or good occasion or celebrations, we always tend to share sweets.

✓ When it comes to a specific occasion or good occasion or celebrations, we always tend to share sweets.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no preposition errors detected.

× And when it comes to sweet sharing chocolate comes in handy because it is easily available and has good packaging.

✓ And when it comes to sharing sweets, chocolate comes in handy because it is easily available and has good packaging.

The phrase 'sweet sharing' is incorrect; it should be 'sharing sweets' to correctly express the action.

× So I believe it has gained popularity, uh, amongst, uh, the older people as well as kids when it comes to its packaging and taste, which is a sweet.

✓ So I believe it has gained popularity, uh, amongst, uh, older people as well as kids when it comes to its packaging and taste, which is sweet.

'The older people' should be 'older people' without 'the' for generalization. Also, 'which is a sweet' is incorrect; 'which is sweet' correctly describes the taste.

× Since matcha is trending, I recently tried a chocolate with matcha flavour.

✓ Since matcha is trending, I recently tried chocolate with matcha flavor.

'A chocolate' is incorrect because 'chocolate' is uncountable here. Also, 'flavour' is acceptable in British English, but 'flavor' is the American English spelling.

× Up until now, uh, we have been exchanging chocolates, uh, traveling to different countries and as a part of a souvenir or unique, uh, taste that we bring around with us is definitely, uh, one, you know, chocolate that we bring, uh, for our families and friends, uh, gifting chocolate is a good idea, but when you look at the healthiest side.

✓ Up until now, uh, we have been exchanging chocolates, uh, traveling to different countries, and as part of a souvenir or unique taste that we bring around with us, chocolate is definitely one, you know, that we bring for our families and friends. Uh, gifting chocolate is a good idea, but when you look at the healthiest side...

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper punctuation. Adding commas and splitting into two sentences improves clarity. Also, 'as a part of' should be 'as part of' in this context.