Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because I've loved it since I was a child. For example, I used to carry chocolates in my pocket whenever I went to school or played with friends, which shows how much I like them.

제안: Improve clarity and grammar by using correct expressions and linking words. Provide specific reasons and examples to explain your habits.

예시: It depends on the situation. For instance, when I'm stressed, I tend to eat a lot of chocolate because it helps me feel better. However, when I'm happy, I only eat it occasionally as a small treat.

제안: Make your answer complete and coherent by finishing your thoughts. Use clear sentences and avoid confusing phrases. Add specific details to support your answer.

예시: Definitely yes, I ate more chocolate as a kid than I do now. When I was young, I wasn't very particular about what I ate, so I enjoyed chocolates freely. However, as I grew older, I became more careful about my diet.

제안: Avoid unclear or incorrect expressions like 'Catholicism of joy.' Use precise vocabulary and complete your sentences. Explain your ideas with specific reasons and examples.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and its sweetness often makes people feel happy. For example, people commonly give chocolates as gifts during celebrations like Valentine's Day, anniversaries, and birthdays.

제안: Clarify your answer by using correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Avoid incomplete sentences and explain your preference with specific reasons.

예시: I prefer milk chocolate over dark chocolate because the combination of cocoa and milk creates a smooth, sweet taste. Dark chocolate is a bit more bitter, which I don't enjoy as much.

제안: Try to reduce filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons for your opinion.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift because it can boost people's mood and happiness. For example, research shows that chocolate contains ingredients that help reduce stress, which is why many people enjoy it when they feel down.

× Personally, I really love to eat chocolates a lot.

✓ Personally, I really love to eat chocolate a lot.

The word 'chocolate' is generally uncountable when referring to the food in general, so the plural 'chocolates' is incorrect here. Use the singular form 'chocolate' to refer to the substance or food in general.

× I'm a sweet tooth.

✓ I have a sweet tooth.

The phrase 'sweet tooth' is an idiomatic expression meaning a liking for sweet foods. It requires the verb 'have' rather than 'be'. Saying 'I'm a sweet tooth' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I have a sweet tooth'.

× Ever since I was a child, I always had some chocolates inside my pocket when I went to school or go play with my classmates or doing any activities I had to have.

✓ Ever since I was a child, I always had some chocolate inside my pocket when I went to school, played with my classmates, or did any activities I had to do.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the time frame is in the past ('was a child'), all verbs should be in the past tense: 'had', 'went', 'played', 'did'. Also, 'chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun. The phrase 'doing any activities I had to have' is incorrect; it should be 'did any activities I had to do'.

× It bars on a situation.

✓ It depends on the situation.

The phrase 'bars on' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'depends on' when indicating that something varies according to circumstances.

× If I'm so stressed I usually eat a lot of chocolates.

✓ If I'm so stressed, I usually eat a lot of chocolate.

When referring to chocolate as a food substance, it is uncountable and should be singular 'chocolate' rather than plural 'chocolates'.

× But when I'm happy I just really eat chocolates.

✓ But when I'm happy, I just really eat chocolate.

Same as above, 'chocolate' is uncountable and should be singular here.

× Maybe it's a energy booster food for me.

✓ Maybe it's an energy booster food for me.

The article 'a' is incorrect before a word starting with a vowel sound like 'energy'. It should be 'an'.

× There is something inside.

✓ There is something inside.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× Definitely yes.

✓ Definitely, yes.

Adding a comma improves clarity, but the sentence is acceptable as a short answer.

× I love chocolates more than I am today.

✓ I loved chocolate more than I do today.

The sentence refers to past preference, so past tense 'loved' is appropriate. Also, 'chocolate' is uncountable and should be singular. 'I am today' should be 'I do today' to compare current liking.

× No joke or anything that was wrong more than what I did today.

✓ No joke or anything; I didn't do anything wrong more than I do today.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. The correction clarifies the intended meaning with proper sentence structure.

× Just when I was young.

✓ It was just when I was young.

The phrase 'Just when I was young' is a fragment. Adding 'It was' completes the sentence.

× I am very not particular in what I'm eating, but when I grow older I.

✓ I was not very particular about what I was eating, but as I grew older, I became more selective.

The original sentence is incomplete and mixes tenses. The correction uses past tense consistently and completes the thought.

× Perhaps because it has a good taste and its sweetness make people happy.

✓ Perhaps because it has a good taste and its sweetness makes people happy.

The subject 'sweetness' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' not 'make'.

× It's a Catholicism of joy and happiness for other people.

✓ It's a symbol of joy and happiness for other people.

The word 'Catholicism' is incorrect in this context. The intended meaning is likely 'symbol' or 'representation'.

× That's why when they're celebrating something like Valentine's Day, anniversary is birthday.

✓ That's why when they're celebrating something like Valentine's Day, an anniversary, or a birthday.

The sentence lacks articles and proper conjunctions. Adding 'an' before 'anniversary' and 'or' improves clarity.

× Sometimes it.

✓ Sometimes it is.

The sentence is incomplete and needs a verb to be complete.

× I really love build chocolate rather than to have a dark chocolate cause the blend of coffee and Oh yeah the blend of cocoa and milk are perfectly fine, have a great taste rather than to have a dark chocolate.

✓ I really love milk chocolate rather than dark chocolate because the blend of cocoa and milk is perfectly fine and has a great taste compared to dark chocolate.

'Build chocolate' is incorrect; it should be 'milk chocolate'. The sentence is run-on and needs restructuring. 'Cause' should be 'because'. Also, 'blend' is singular, so 'is' not 'are'. 'Have' should be 'has' to agree with 'blend'.

× It is like a little bit more bitter than.

✓ It is a little bit more bitter than milk chocolate.

The sentence is incomplete; the comparison object is missing. Adding 'milk chocolate' completes the comparison.

× I believe so cause, uh, chocolates, uh, makes people, uh, happy and it puts the energy in mood as well.

✓ I believe so because chocolates make people happy and they boost energy and mood as well.

'Makes' should be 'make' to agree with plural 'chocolates'. 'Cause' is informal; 'because' is better. 'Puts the energy in mood' is incorrect; 'boost energy and mood' is clearer.

× There's a lot of research that having chocolate has an ingredient that makes the person feel happy.

✓ There's a lot of research showing that chocolate contains ingredients that make people feel happy.

'Having chocolate has an ingredient' is awkward. 'Chocolate contains ingredients' is clearer. 'Makes the person' should be 'make people' for general statement.

× So sometimes when we are stressed, we eat a lot of chocolates.

✓ So sometimes when we are stressed, we eat a lot of chocolate.

'Chocolate' is uncountable when referring to the food in general, so the plural 'chocolates' is incorrect here.