Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。例えば、「working something」ではなく「when I am working」など、より自然な表現を使いましょう。また、文を簡潔にし、冗長な部分を避けることが大切です。

예시: I like eating chocolate because its sweetness motivates me, especially when I am working. Therefore, I always carry some chocolate snacks in my pocket.

제안: 頻度の表現や文法に改善の余地があります。例えば、「at least once in a week」より「at least once a week」が自然です。また、具体例を述べる際は、冠詞や複数形に注意しましょう。

예시: I eat chocolate at least once a week, especially when I need to focus on big projects, such as writing summer articles or reviewing content for a long time.

제안: 時制の一致や表現の明確さに注意しましょう。「my parents are always about me and some chocolates」は意味が不明瞭です。過去形を使い、具体的なエピソードを簡潔に述べると良いです。

예시: Yes, when I was a child, my parents always gave me chocolates on special occasions like my birthday, anniversaries, and holidays. It was an important treat that motivated me.

제안: 文法の誤りと接続詞の使い方に注意しましょう。「are always attract」ではなく「always attract」が正しいです。また、接続詞の使い方を工夫して、文をつなげると自然になります。

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because its sweetness and unique flavors always attract many people. Moreover, there are many types of chocolate, such as white, milk, and dark chocolate, so people can enjoy different flavors.

제안: 冠詞の使い方や文の構造を改善しましょう。「a milk chocolate」ではなく「milk chocolate」が自然です。また、理由と例を分けて述べると分かりやすいです。

예시: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it is very creamy and helps me feel relaxed. I usually enjoy it on special occasions, such as after finishing an important event or a big project.

제안: 表現の自然さと文法に注意しましょう。「they are not so many sweet foods as chocolates」は不自然です。また、代名詞の一致や単数・複数形の使い方を正しくしましょう。

예시: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because there are not many sweets like it. Therefore, people feel happy when they receive chocolate from someone. It is an important and popular souvenir.

× I prefer having a chocolate as a treat for me because the sweetness makes me well motivated, especially working something, so I always take some chocolate snacks in my pocket every day.

✓ I prefer having chocolate as a treat for myself because the sweetness makes me well motivated, especially when working on something, so I always take some chocolate snacks in my pocket every day.

The phrase 'working something' is incorrect; it should be 'working on something' because the verb 'work' requires the preposition 'on' when referring to tasks. Also, 'a chocolate' is unnatural; 'chocolate' is uncountable here. 'For me' should be 'for myself' to correctly express the reflexive sense.

× I have a chocolate at least once in a week, especially when I have to focus on some big projects.

✓ I have chocolate at least once a week, especially when I have to focus on some big projects.

'A chocolate' is incorrect because 'chocolate' is uncountable in this context. Also, the phrase 'once in a week' should be 'once a week' for natural English usage.

× I always eat a chocolate so that I can concentrate on my working, such as writing a summer articles and checking the content for a long time.

✓ I always eat chocolate so that I can concentrate on my work, such as writing summer articles and checking the content for a long time.

Again, 'a chocolate' is incorrect; 'chocolate' is uncountable here. 'My working' is unnatural; 'my work' is the correct noun form. Also, 'a summer articles' is incorrect; it should be 'summer articles' without 'a' because 'articles' is plural.

× Yes, so when I was a child, my parents are always about me and some chocolates on some occasions such as my birthday and some anniversaries and holidays.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, my parents were always about me and gave me some chocolates on occasions such as my birthday, anniversaries, and holidays.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'Are always' should be 'were always' to match past tense. Also, 'about me and some chocolates' is unclear; it should be 'gave me some chocolates'. The phrase 'some occasions' is better as 'occasions' without 'some' for naturalness.

× I think the sweetness and a unique flavor are always attract many people all over the world.

✓ I think the sweetness and a unique flavor always attract many people all over the world.

The verb 'attract' should be in the base form without 'are' because the subject is plural and the verb follows 'and'. 'Are always attract' is incorrect; it should be 'always attract'.

× Because there are many types of chocolate such as white chocolate, milk chocolate, dark chocolate, people can enjoy each flavors.

✓ Because there are many types of chocolate such as white chocolate, milk chocolate, and dark chocolate, people can enjoy each flavor.

'Each flavors' is incorrect because 'each' is singular and should be followed by a singular noun 'flavor'. Also, adding 'and' before the last item in the list improves clarity.

× I like a milk chocolate best because it's very creamy and it's helps me feel very relaxing and on special occasions such as after finishing a special event and a big project, I always have such flavor.

✓ I like milk chocolate best because it's very creamy and it helps me feel very relaxed, and on special occasions such as after finishing a special event or a big project, I always have that flavor.

'A milk chocolate' is incorrect; 'milk chocolate' is uncountable here. 'It's helps' should be 'it helps'. 'Feel very relaxing' is incorrect; it should be 'feel very relaxed'. 'Such flavor' should be 'that flavor' for natural English.

× Yes, I think so. That's mainly because they are not so many sweet foods as chocolates.

✓ Yes, I think so. That's mainly because there are not as many sweet foods as chocolates.

The phrase 'they are not so many' is incorrect; it should be 'there are not as many' to express comparison properly.

× Accordingly, many people feel very happy when he or she receive the chocolate from someone.

✓ Accordingly, many people feel very happy when they receive chocolate from someone.

Using 'he or she' is awkward here; 'they' is the correct singular gender-neutral pronoun. Also, 'receive' should be 'receives' if 'he or she' is used, but 'they receive' is more natural. 'The chocolate' should be 'chocolate' as uncountable.

× So it's very important souvenir from others.

✓ So it's a very important souvenir from others.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'very important souvenir'.