Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid repeating words like 'actually' and 'sweet' in the same sentence. Also, use singular/plural forms correctly, for example, 'a quick snack' instead of 'a quick snacks'. Make your answer more concise and natural by combining ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it is sweet and makes me happy. It also serves as a quick snack when I need energy.

제안: Be careful with contradictory statements. Saying 'I don't eat chocolate regularly' and 'I eat chocolate so often' is confusing. Use linking words to clarify your ideas and correct grammar, for example, 'on a regular basis' instead of 'regular basis'.

예시: I don't eat chocolate on a regular basis because too much sugar is bad for health, so I only eat it occasionally.

제안: Use past tense consistently when talking about the past, for example, 'I often ate chocolate'. Also, improve sentence structure and clarity by breaking long sentences into shorter ones and using linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because my relatives and brother, who live abroad, usually brought chocolate when they visited Bangladesh. So, we always had chocolate at home.

제안: Avoid vague words like 'sometimes' and 'I guess'. Use more precise language and correct singular/plural forms, for example, 'a kind of quick snack'. Also, explain your ideas clearly with linking words.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is a quick snack that can boost brain function and provide energy.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by adding linking words and more specific details to make it richer and more natural.

예시: My favourite flavour is white chocolate because it is creamy and delicious. Moreover, its sweet scent always makes me feel happy.

제안: Use correct grammar such as 'a really good idea' and 'I have never seen anyone who doesn't like chocolate'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I think giving chocolate as a gift is a really good idea because I have never met anyone who doesn't like it. People of all ages enjoy eating chocolate.

× chocolate is like a quick snacks for me

✓ chocolate is like a quick snack for me

The word 'snacks' is plural, but 'a' requires a singular noun. So, 'a quick snack' is correct.

× I actually don't eat chocolate regular basis

✓ I actually don't eat chocolate on a regular basis

The phrase 'regular basis' needs the preposition 'on' and the article 'a' to be correct: 'on a regular basis'.

× I eat chocolate so often because extra sweet is bad for health

✓ I don't eat chocolate so often because extra sweetness is bad for health

The phrase 'extra sweet' should be a noun 'extra sweetness' to refer to the quality, and the sentence context suggests negation 'don't eat so often'.

× Yes, I often eat chocolate when I was a kid

✓ Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid

The action happened in the past, so the verb should be in past tense 'ate' instead of present tense 'eat'.

× my relatives and my brother live in abroad

✓ my relatives and my brother live abroad

The preposition 'in' is not used with 'abroad'. The correct phrase is 'live abroad'.

× they most of the time being chocolate when they come in Bangladesh

✓ they most of the time bring chocolate when they come to Bangladesh

The verb 'being' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'bring'. Also, 'come in Bangladesh' should be 'come to Bangladesh'.

× we always have chocolate in our home

✓ we always had chocolate in our home

Since the context is about the past ('when I was a kid'), the verb should be in past tense 'had'.

× That's why I always eat chocolate as a kid

✓ That's why I always ate chocolate as a kid

The action happened in the past, so the verb should be in past tense 'ate'.

× Chocolate is sometimes so beneficial and it's a kind of quick snacks that is good for brain

✓ Chocolate is sometimes so beneficial and it's a kind of quick snack that is good for the brain

'snacks' should be singular 'snack' after 'a kind of'. Also, 'brain' needs the definite article 'the'.

× Chocolate helps to develop brain I guess

✓ Chocolate helps to develop the brain, I guess

'brain' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to the organ in general.

× I think it's really good idea to give chocolate as a gift to other

✓ I think it's a really good idea to give chocolate as a gift to others

The phrase needs the article 'a' before 'really good idea' and 'other' should be plural 'others'.

× I never seen anyone who don't like chocolate

✓ I have never seen anyone who doesn't like chocolate

The present perfect tense 'have never seen' is correct here. Also, 'don't' should be 'doesn't' to agree with singular 'anyone'.

× chocolate is a kind of thing that every ages people love to eat

✓ chocolate is a kind of thing that people of every age love to eat

The phrase 'every ages people' is incorrect; it should be 'people of every age'.