Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit long and slightly unclear in parts. Try to be more concise and organise your ideas clearly. Start with a direct answer, then give specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'and'. Avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it helps reduce my stress and tastes very sweet. Also, giving chocolates as gifts can strengthen bonds with others.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to answer directly and use linking words to explain your reasons. Also, avoid unnecessary details that do not answer the question directly.

예시: I eat chocolate every two or three days because eating it daily can cause tooth problems and is not good for health.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and some unclear parts. Try to use past tense correctly and avoid unnecessary questions in your answer. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolates as a kid because my parents used to buy them for me as gifts to make me happy.

제안: Your answer is good but a bit repetitive. Try to use linking words like 'not only... but also' to make your answer more coherent. Also, avoid repeating the same idea multiple times.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide not only because it tastes delicious but also because it helps reduce anxiety and strengthens bonds when given as gifts.

제안: Your answer is clear but can be more concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid repeating the brand name unnecessarily.

예시: My favourite flavour is Dairy Milk Oreo because it tastes better than other chocolates, and Dairy Milk is a famous brand worldwide.

제안: Your answer has some repetition and grammatical errors. Try to be more concise and use linking words like 'because' to explain your reasons clearly.

예시: Yes, giving chocolates as gifts is good because it strengthens bonds and expresses love and positive feelings.

× Yes I like to eat chocolate chocolates because it reduces my stress and anxiety also and it tastes very sweet and it helps to make our when we gift to someone it helps to make our bond more stronger with that person.

✓ Yes, I like to eat chocolates because they reduce my stress and anxiety, and they taste very sweet. Also, when we gift chocolates to someone, it helps to make our bond stronger with that person.

The word 'chocolate chocolates' is redundant; 'chocolates' is sufficient. 'Reduces' and 'tastes' should agree with the plural subject 'chocolates', so use 'reduce' and 'taste'. The phrase 'helps to make our when we gift to someone' is incomplete and unclear; it is corrected to 'when we gift chocolates to someone, it helps to make our bond stronger'. 'More stronger' is incorrect; 'stronger' alone is correct.

× So chocolates are must and that is why I want to eat it.

✓ So chocolates are a must, and that is why I want to eat them.

The phrase 'are must' is incorrect; it should be 'are a must'. Also, 'eat it' is incorrect because 'chocolates' is plural; it should be 'eat them'.

× I really want chocolate Jelly but I don't eat it because it can cause my tooth problems and it is not the good for our health for eating daily so I eat two or three days after.

✓ I really want chocolate jelly, but I don't eat it because it can cause tooth problems, and it is not good for our health to eat daily, so I eat it every two or three days.

'Chocolate Jelly' should not be capitalized unless a brand name. 'My tooth problems' is better as 'tooth problems'. 'It is not the good' is incorrect; it should be 'not good'. 'For eating daily' should be 'to eat daily'. 'I eat two or three days after' is unclear; corrected to 'I eat it every two or three days'.

× Yes, I often eat chocolates when I was a kid because my parents gave me the chocolates.

✓ Yes, I often ate chocolates when I was a kid because my parents gave me chocolates.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match 'when I was a kid'. 'The chocolates' is unnecessary; 'chocolates' is sufficient.

× Bought chocolates for me as a gifts.

✓ They bought chocolates for me as gifts.

The sentence lacks a subject; adding 'They' corrects this. 'A gifts' is incorrect; 'gifts' is plural and does not need 'a'.

× Are they?

✓ Is that right?

'Are they?' is unclear and does not fit context; 'Is that right?' is a better confirmation question.

× Whenever they went out for something they buy a chocolate for me to keep me happy.

✓ Whenever they went out for something, they bought chocolate for me to keep me happy.

The verb 'buy' should be in past tense 'bought' to match 'went out'.

× So I often eat chocolates when I was good.

✓ So I often ate chocolates when I was good.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match 'when I was good'. However, 'when I was good' is unclear; possibly 'when I was good' means 'when I was well-behaved' or 'when I was a kid'.

× Chocolates are very popular around the world because it tastes very delicious and it also helps to reduce anxiety and it also makes the bond stronger with person with to whom we gift the chocolates.

✓ Chocolates are very popular around the world because they taste very delicious, help to reduce anxiety, and also make the bond stronger with the person to whom we gift the chocolates.

'It tastes' should be 'they taste' to agree with plural 'chocolates'. 'Makes the bond stronger with person with to whom' is corrected to 'make the bond stronger with the person to whom' for clarity and grammar.

× So chocolates in this way are very popular in our India.

✓ So chocolates in this way are very popular in India.

The phrase 'in our India' is incorrect; 'in India' is correct.

× I like to eat Dairy Milk Oreo flavour because it gives the better taste than other chocolates and Dairy Milk is the product which is famous worldwide.

✓ I like to eat Dairy Milk Oreo flavour because it tastes better than other chocolates, and Dairy Milk is a product famous worldwide.

'Gives the better taste' is incorrect; 'tastes better' is correct. 'The product which is famous' is better as 'a product famous'.

× Dairy Milk Company tastes very good, so Dairy Milk is my favorite.

✓ Dairy Milk tastes very good, so it is my favorite.

'Dairy Milk Company tastes' is incorrect; the product 'Dairy Milk' tastes good, not the company. 'So Dairy Milk is my favorite' is fine but better to say 'so it is my favorite'.

× Yes sometimes it it is good to give chocolate others because it makes our bond more stronger with that person and it also it also define the love and sweetness of the of the person and also combines with the positive vibes.

✓ Yes, sometimes it is good to give chocolates to others because it makes our bond stronger with that person, and it also defines the love and sweetness of the person and combines with positive vibes.

'It it' is a repetition error. 'Give chocolate others' should be 'give chocolates to others'. 'More stronger' is incorrect; 'stronger' alone is correct. 'Define' should be 'defines' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'Of the of the person' is redundant and corrected. 'Combines with the positive vibes' is better as 'combines with positive vibes'.