Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答较为自然，但存在重复和语法错误。建议避免重复表达，简洁明了地说明喜欢巧克力的原因。

예시: Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate because it helps me relax after a long day of studying or working.

제안: 回答直接且内容相关，但句子结构简单，建议使用连接词丰富表达，使回答更连贯。

예시: I eat chocolate every day after work because it helps me relax and feel comfortable.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，建议简化句子，避免重复，并准确使用时态。

예시: Yes, I loved eating chocolate and sweets a lot when I was a kid.

제안: 回答内容不够清晰，存在逻辑混乱和词汇使用错误。建议理清思路，使用恰当词汇表达巧克力受欢迎的原因。

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it helps people relax and is often given as a gift to show affection and strengthen relationships.

제안: 回答表达有些重复且语法不准确。建议简洁描述喜爱的口味，并用连词连接句子。

예시: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it is slightly bitter at first, but then you can taste the sweetness hidden inside.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不够流畅。建议简洁表达观点，并用恰当词汇说明原因。

예시: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift because most people enjoy it, and it shows kindness and good wishes.

× Eating chocolate after hard hard study or hard work can make me unwind, and chocolates are always sweet for me.

✓ Eating chocolate after hard study or hard work can make me unwind, and chocolate is always sweet for me.

这里的'study'和'chocolates'使用不当。'study'作为不可数名词时不需要复数形式，'chocolate'作为不可数名词时应使用单数形式。

× I eat chocolate every day after hard work. It can make me relax and make me feel comfortable.

✓ I eat chocolate every day after hard work. It can make me relax and feel comfortable.

句中'make me feel comfortable'中重复使用'make me'显得冗余，简化为'make me relax and feel comfortable'更自然。

× I'd love to eat chocolate when I was a kid very much.

✓ I loved to eat chocolate very much when I was a kid.

这里表达过去习惯动作，应该用一般过去时'loved'，而不是过去将来时'I'd love'。

× I liked sweeties when I wore shades when I were kids, as well as chocolate.

✓ I liked sweets when I wore shades when I was a kid, as well as chocolate.

'sweeties'应改为更常用的复数形式'sweets'，'were kids'应改为单数形式'was a kid'，因为主语是第一人称单数。

× that is because chocolates can make people feel relaxed after hard working day and toilets are always a connection between people because people always understand chocolate as a gift to others to boost their relationship.

✓ That is because chocolate can make people feel relaxed after a hard working day, and chocolates are always a connection between people because people understand chocolate as a gift to others to boost their relationships.

'hard working day'前应加冠词'a'，'toilets'应为'chocolates'，且'relationship'应为复数形式'relationships'。

× Umm, that is because chocolates can make people feel relaxed after hard working day and toilets are always a connection between people because people always understand chocolate as a gift to others to boost their relationship.

✓ Umm, that is because chocolate can make people feel relaxed after a hard working day and chocolates are always a connection between people because people always understand chocolate as a gift to others to boost their relationships.

'chocolates'和'chocolate'的使用应统一，'toilets'是错误词，应为'chocolates'，'relationship'应为复数形式。

× Black chocolate is a bit bitter but after the bitter I can feel the sweets hidden in it and it's let me know.

✓ Black chocolate is a bit bitter but after the bitterness I can feel the sweetness hidden in it and it lets me know.

'bitter'应改为名词形式'bitterness'，'sweets'应改为不可数名词'sweetness'，'it's let me know'应改为'it lets me know'，主谓一致。

× That sweet is always after bitter.

✓ That sweetness always comes after bitterness.

句子结构不完整，缺少谓语动词，且'sweet'应为名词形式'sweetness'，'bitter'应为'noun'形式'bitterness'。

× People love people always love chocolates very much and sweet chocolates can always stand as a good attitude or wish to other.

✓ People always love chocolates very much and sweet chocolates can always represent a good attitude or wish to others.

句中重复使用'people love people'，应去掉重复部分，'stand as'用词不当，应改为'represent'，'other'应为复数'others'。