Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时语言不够流畅，有重复和语法错误，建议简洁明了地表达喜欢巧克力的原因，并避免重复。

예시: Yes, I really like eating chocolate because it has a unique aroma and taste that I find very enjoyable. I often have a piece after meals or with my tea.

제안: 回答中表达不清晰，语法混乱，建议用简洁句子说明频率，并说明具体时间和习惯。

예시: I usually eat chocolate about five times a week, mostly in the mornings on weekdays, and I like to have it with a cup of tea to start my day.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，建议清楚说明小时候吃巧克力少的原因，避免无关词汇。

예시: No, I didn't eat chocolate often as a child because my mother thought the sugar and milk could harm my teeth, so she limited how much I could have.

제안: 回答表达不清，词汇使用不当，建议用清晰的句子说明巧克力受欢迎的原因，并用连接词使句子连贯。

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it has a unique flavor that many people enjoy. Moreover, it is convenient to eat with other foods, which makes it even more enjoyable.

제안: 回答中语法和表达混乱，建议直接说明喜欢的巧克力口味及原因，避免重复和不完整句子。

예시: My favourite flavour is white chocolate because it is less bitter than other types and goes well with tea or coffee.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不流畅，建议用简洁句子说明巧克力作为礼物的优点，并避免重复。

예시: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift because it is popular with many people and can make the recipients feel happy.

× I am a big fan of chocolate a a special fragrance and a special taste of really, uh, really absorbs me.

✓ I am a big fan of chocolate because of its special fragrance and special taste that really absorbs me.

这里缺少介词“because of”来连接原因，且“a a”是重复错误，应删除一个。

× I am uh, I am this.

✓ I am, uh, like this.

句子结构不完整，缺少谓语或补充说明，导致表达不清晰。

× It is often for me to have a bite and after having lunch or dinner or having tea.

✓ It is often for me to have a bite after lunch, dinner, or tea.

介词使用不当，'and after'应改为直接连接，且列举时用逗号分隔更合适。

× About five times per week, maybe 8 days often for me to have a bite in the morning or weekdays and always have it with a cup of tea to open my day.

✓ About five times per week, often I have a bite in the morning on weekdays and always have it with a cup of tea to start my day.

句子中“8 days”不合逻辑，应删除或改正，且表达更自然。

× No not very often as chocolates have lots of sugar and milk and my mom just thinks it could break my teeth so that's why he Li she limited me to 8 toilets.

✓ No, not very often because chocolates have lots of sugar and milk, and my mom thinks they could break my teeth, so that's why she limited me to 8 pieces.

代词使用错误，“he Li she”应为“she”，且“8 toilets”应为“8 pieces”。

× Like me, a reason I think it's a special free rinse and taste and it tastes really, really attracts a lot of people.

✓ Like me, I think it has a special fragrance and taste that really attracts a lot of people.

形容词使用错误，“free rinse”应为“fragrance”，且句子结构需调整。

× And also it is convenient for people to have chocolates with other kinds of food, which is enjoyable.

✓ Also, it is convenient for people to have chocolates with other kinds of food, which is enjoyable.

句首连接词使用不当，应去掉“and”改为“also”。

× Why chocolate? I think as why chocolate is not so bitter as other chocolate kinds of chocolates do, and what white chocolate is convenient for me to have to have with a cup of tea or coffee?

✓ Why white chocolate? I think white chocolate is not as bitter as other kinds of chocolate, and it is convenient for me to have with a cup of tea or coffee.

代词使用错误，“why chocolate”应为“white chocolate”，且句子结构混乱需调整。

× Yeah, I think chocolates are a great gift. As chocolates enjoys great popularity among different kinds of people, I am sending them as gifts.

✓ Yeah, I think chocolates are a great gift. As chocolates enjoy great popularity among different kinds of people, I send them as gifts.

主谓一致错误，“chocolates”复数，谓语动词应为“enjoy”而非“enjoys”。

× Could all could always make these who receive the gifts feel satisfied.

✓ They could always make those who receive the gifts feel satisfied.

代词使用错误，“these”应为“those”，且句子结构需调整。