Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to give a clear and direct answer first, then add specific reasons or examples. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it is my favorite sweet. For example, I enjoy chocolate bars like Twix because they taste delicious and satisfy my sweet cravings.

제안: Answer directly and clearly. Avoid vague phrases like 'I really like eating good.' Use correct grammar and linking words to explain your frequency and reasons.

예시: I eat chocolate about three times a week because it contains a lot of sugar, which can cause a sweet tooth, so I try not to eat it too often.

제안: Use past tense when talking about childhood. Complete your sentences and avoid trailing off. Provide clear reasons and examples with linking words.

예시: When I was a kid, I did not eat chocolate often because my mother thought it had too much sugar. Instead, she gave me healthier treats like strawberries.

제안: Improve clarity and grammar. Use linking words to organize your ideas. Provide specific reasons why chocolate is popular globally.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is widely available in convenience stores and is affordable. Many people enjoy it as a sweet treat, such as chocolate bars like Twix and Snickers.

제안: Give a clear answer first, then add specific reasons and examples. Avoid unclear phrases like 'fruit 1'. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

예시: My favorite chocolate flavor is caramel because it tastes delicious and sweet. I also enjoy strawberry-flavored chocolate, which contains real fruit and is healthier, as well as chocolate with biscuit pieces.

제안: Provide a clear opinion and support it with reasons. Avoid vague expressions and incomplete thoughts. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: I think chocolate is a good gift because it symbolizes sweetness and kindness. Giving chocolate can make people feel appreciated and happy.

× I really like eating chocolate 'cause that's my favorite, umm, sweets of all time.

✓ I really like eating chocolate 'cause that's my favorite sweet of all time.

The word 'sweets' is plural, but the sentence refers to a singular favorite item, so it should be 'sweet' to match the singular form.

× Or desserts cause yeah I really enjoy eating it and I like sweet things.

✓ Or dessert cause yeah I really enjoy eating it and I like sweet things.

The word 'desserts' is plural, but the sentence context suggests a singular category, so 'dessert' is more appropriate here.

× So yeah, that's my first thing and one of the chocolates that I really like is twigs.

✓ So yeah, that's my first thing and one of the chocolates that I really like is Twix.

The brand name 'Twix' is singular and a proper noun; 'twigs' is incorrect spelling and plural form.

× Not that often because it give you a sweet tooth cause it has too much sugar in it.

✓ Not that often because it gives you a sweet tooth cause it has too much sugar in it.

The subject 'it' is singular, so the verb should be 'gives' to agree in number.

× Not that often because it give you a sweet tooth cause it has too much sugar in it.

✓ Not that often because it gives you a sweet tooth cause it has too much sugar in it.

The verb 'give' should be in third person singular form 'gives' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× And I don't really eat it often, but I really like eating good.

✓ And I don't really eat it often, but I really like eating well.

The word 'good' is an adjective, but here an adverb 'well' is needed to describe the verb 'eating'.

× Because you can get it in inconvenience store and it's really not that expensive.

✓ Because you can get it in an inconvenient store and it's really not that expensive.

The noun phrase should be 'an inconvenient store' (singular) instead of 'inconvenience store' which is incorrect here.

× Because you can get it in inconvenience store and it's really not that expensive.

✓ Because you can get it in an inconvenient store and it's really not that expensive.

The article 'an' is missing before 'inconvenient store' and the adjective 'inconvenient' is more appropriate than the noun 'inconvenience'.

× So many people can't can't get it that anywhere and everywhere if they want.

✓ So many people can get it anywhere and everywhere if they want.

The phrase 'can't can't get it that anywhere' is incorrect; it should be 'can get it anywhere' to express availability.

× Chocolate bars like twigs sneakers, I see.

✓ Chocolate bars like Twix and Snickers, I see.

The brand names 'Twix' and 'Snickers' are proper nouns and should be capitalized and spelled correctly; also, 'and' is needed to connect the items.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is the caramel chocolate bar.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is caramel chocolate.

The phrase 'the caramel chocolate bar' is specific; if referring to flavor generally, 'caramel chocolate' is more appropriate.

× And I really like others who like the strawberry ones which have the fruit 1 and it is really healthier and also the biscuit one I really like.

✓ And I really like others who like the strawberry ones which have fruit in them and are really healthier, and also the biscuit ones I really like.

The pronouns and quantifiers are incorrect; 'fruit 1' is unclear and should be 'fruit in them'; 'it is' should be 'are' to agree with plural 'ones'.

× I think it's good to use chocolate as a gift for others because it shows the sweetness and the sympathy of the gift be because it gives them like the twist taste.

✓ I think it's good to use chocolate as a gift for others because it shows the sweetness and the sympathy of the gift because it gives them a sweet taste.

The phrase 'the sympathy of the gift be' is incorrect and unclear; 'twist taste' should be 'sweet taste'; prepositions and word choice need correction.