Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of repeating 'chocolate' multiple times, use pronouns or synonyms. Also, use present tense consistently and add linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate because of its creamy texture. Moreover, it helps uplift my mood and relieves stress.

제안: Your answer is concise and relevant. To improve, you can add linking words and a bit more detail to enrich your response.

예시: I usually eat chocolate once or twice a week, and I prefer dark chocolate because of its rich flavour.

제안: Try to use past tense consistently when talking about the past. Also, avoid repeating 'chocolate' too often and improve sentence flow with linking words.

예시: When I was a child, I did not eat chocolate often. Usually, my parents gave me chocolate as a reward or to appreciate my efforts.

제안: Your answer is a bit long and repetitive. Try to use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. Also, use more specific vocabulary and concise sentences.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because of its creamy texture and its ability to make people feel relaxed and happy. Additionally, many enjoy it as a treat or a token of appreciation for good work.

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear towards the end. Avoid repeating phrases and ensure clarity. Also, check for any unclear words (e.g., 'AMOLED' seems incorrect). Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because I dislike the extra sweetness in other types. I enjoy its rich and intense flavour.

제안: Be careful with word choice; 'grief' should be 'gift'. Also, try to use linking words and avoid repeating 'chocolate' too often. Make your sentences more natural and fluent.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift. We can give it on birthdays, anniversaries, or as a token of appreciation and love.

× I like the creamy texture of the chocolate and chocolate helped me to uplift my mood and be stress free.

✓ I like the creamy texture of the chocolate and chocolate helps me to uplift my mood and be stress free.

The sentence mixes present tense 'like' with past tense 'helped'. Since the context is general preference, present tense 'helps' should be used for consistency.

× Well, in my childhood I do not eat chocolate often.

✓ Well, in my childhood I did not eat chocolate often.

Talking about past habits requires past tense. 'Do not eat' is present tense; it should be 'did not eat' to correctly refer to childhood.

× I usually get a chocolate to eat when my parents give chocolate to me as a reward or for a appreciation.

✓ I usually get chocolate to eat when my parents give chocolate to me as a reward or as appreciation.

The phrase 'for a appreciation' is incorrect; 'appreciation' is uncountable and should be used without 'a' and with 'as' to indicate purpose.

× Chocolate is popular around the world because people like the creamy texture of the chocolate and it also helps them to be relaxed and happy and they can also eat chocolate as a treat for doing well in their jobs or also get chocolate for appreciation for doing the work well.

✓ Chocolate is popular around the world because people like the creamy texture of the chocolate and it also helps them to be relaxed and happy. They can also eat chocolate as a treat for doing well in their jobs or get chocolate as appreciation for doing the work well.

The sentence is long and confusing; splitting into two improves clarity. Also, 'for appreciation' should be 'as appreciation' to correctly express the purpose.

× I prefer to eat dark chocolate. Dark chocolate is the best chocolate in the world and I like dark chocolate because I do not like the extra sweetness of the other chocolates, so that's why I like dark chocolate I usually like to eat AMOLED or chocolate because these are very rich in flavors and very.

✓ I prefer to eat dark chocolate. Dark chocolate is the best chocolate in the world and I like it because I do not like the extra sweetness of other chocolates. I usually like to eat almond or chocolate because these are very rich in flavors.

The sentence is run-on and unclear. 'AMOLED' seems to be a typo for 'almond'. The sentence is corrected for clarity, grammar, and to remove incomplete ending.

× Yes, of course it's good to use chocolate as a grief.

✓ Yes, of course it's good to use chocolate as a gift.

The word 'grief' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'gift' when referring to giving chocolate to others.

× We can give chocolates to others as gifts on their birthday parties or on anniversaries, and we can also give a chocolate to appreciate them for their work or as a token of love to them.

✓ We can give chocolates to others as gifts on their birthday parties or anniversaries, and we can also give chocolate to appreciate them for their work or as a token of love.

'A chocolate' is less common; 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun fits better here. Also, 'to them' is redundant after 'token of love'.