Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时应避免重复表达，如“although... but...”结构不自然。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并用具体理由支持。

예시: I don't like eating chocolate because, although it tastes sweet and nice, I believe it's unhealthy for my body.

제안: 句子结构不完整，时态和语法错误较多。建议使用完整句子并注意时态一致，同时用连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: I usually eat chocolate about twice a month, especially after studying hard or as a reward for myself.

제안: 回答缺少完整句子，时态使用不当。建议用完整句子表达过去的习惯，并提供具体原因。

예시: Actually, I didn't eat chocolate often when I was a kid because it was hard to buy in my country.

제안: 表达不够自然，语法错误较多。建议用更自然的表达方式，并提供更具体的原因。

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and brings happiness to people.

제안: 回答不够清晰，表达混乱。建议直接回答问题，并用简洁的句子说明原因。

예시: My favourite flavour is the original one because it was the first chocolate I ever tasted as a child.

제안: 句子结构混乱，重复用词。建议简洁表达观点，并用具体理由支持。

예시: Chocolate is a good gift for women and children because they usually enjoy sweet foods, and chocolate satisfies that craving.

× Just about twice a month I usually eating chocolate after spending a lot of time to study or just as a gift to price myself.

✓ Just about twice a month I usually eat chocolate after spending a lot of time studying or just as a gift to praise myself.

句中“usually eating”应改为“usually eat”，因为“usually”后面应接动词原形，表示习惯动作。此外，“to study”应改为“studying”，因为“after”后面应接动名词形式。最后，“price myself”应为“praise myself”，意思是“奖励自己”，原词拼写错误。

× Actually no. When I was young that chocolate is hard to buy in my country, so I don't often.

✓ Actually no. When I was young, that chocolate was hard to buy in my country, so I didn't often eat it.

句中描述过去情况，应使用过去时态，“is”应改为“was”。“don't often”应改为“didn't often eat it”，补全谓语动词，且时态与前文一致。

× Of course, I think that is chocolate is sweet and is happy to taste it, so that's the reason that chocolate is popular around the world.

✓ Of course, I think that chocolate is sweet and it is pleasant to taste, so that's the reason why chocolate is popular around the world.

句中“that is chocolate is sweet”重复且结构错误，应改为“that chocolate is sweet”。“is happy to taste it”表达不当，应改为“it is pleasant to taste”。此外，补充“why”使句子更通顺。

× Already, no. I think because it's the first step of chocolate that I eat when I was a child. So although during so much years, I like the original flavor.

✓ Actually, no. I think it's because it's the first type of chocolate that I ate when I was a child. So although many years have passed, I still like the original flavor.

“Already, no”表达不自然，应改为“Actually, no”。“first step of chocolate”应改为“first type of chocolate”。“eat”应改为过去时“ate”，与“when I was a child”时间一致。“during so much years”应改为“many years have passed”，更符合英语表达习惯。

× A chocolate is a good choice to be a gift both for women and children because they also like it like to eat sweet food and and chocolate is sweet enough to fill them.

✓ Chocolate is a good choice as a gift for both women and children because they like to eat sweet food, and chocolate is sweet enough to satisfy them.

“A chocolate”不合适，改为不可数名词“Chocolate”。“like it like to eat”重复且错误，应改为“like to eat”。“fill them”用词不当，应改为“satisfy them”，更符合语境。