Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons using correct grammar. Avoid incomplete sentences and redundancy.

예시: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and makes me feel happy. I especially enjoy sweet desserts that include chocolate.

제안: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and is incomplete. Use correct verb forms and complete your sentences. Also, try to explain your reasons clearly with linking words.

예시: I eat chocolate almost every day because I enjoy having a piece before work. It helps me feel relaxed and ready for the day.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and has grammar errors. Make sure to finish your sentences and use correct verb tenses. Provide clear reasons to support your answer.

예시: Not really. When I was a child, my parents limited my chances to eat chocolate and chips because they wanted me to have a healthy diet.

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains filler words. Try to use linking words to organize your ideas and be more specific about why chocolate is popular.

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it has a sweet and smooth taste. Moreover, it can be combined with many different flavors, which makes it special and enjoyable to try.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains unrelated words. Make sure to use correct vocabulary and explain your choice clearly with supporting details.

예시: That's a difficult question because there are many options. However, if I have to choose, I like caramel-flavored chocolate because it is very sweet and delicious.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Try to give a direct answer and explain your reasons with specific details. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because during Lunar New Year, my family and I often give presents, including chocolates, to our friends as a tradition.

× It was yummy, delicious and also. Feel good when you eat it so.

✓ It was yummy and delicious. It also makes you feel good when you eat it.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'also' and fragments the sentence. 'Yummy' and 'delicious' are adjectives describing 'it'. The phrase 'Feel good when you eat it so' is incomplete and should be rephrased to 'It also makes you feel good when you eat it' to form a complete sentence.

× I would say I dated every day 'cause I enjoyed have a piece of chocolate before I work.

✓ I would say I ate chocolate every day because I enjoyed having a piece of chocolate before I worked.

The verb 'dated' is incorrect here; the past tense of 'eat' is 'ate'. Also, 'enjoyed have' is incorrect; it should be 'enjoyed having' because 'enjoy' is followed by a gerund. 'Before I work' should be in past tense 'before I worked' to match the past context.

× I guess it made me feel relaxed and.

✓ I guess it made me feel relaxed.

The conjunction 'and' is used without a following element, making the sentence incomplete. Removing 'and' completes the sentence properly.

× my parents wouldn't limited my like opportunity to eat chips or chocolate 'cause they.

✓ my parents wouldn't limit my opportunities to eat chips or chocolate because they...

'Wouldn't limited' is incorrect; after 'would', the base form of the verb 'limit' should be used. Also, 'like opportunity' should be plural 'opportunities' to match the context. The sentence is incomplete but corrected as far as possible.

× Well first I think chocolate is sweet. Umm I would say no one hates the taste of it and it's really smooth and they can mix it with different flavor which really umm special to try umm different taste.

✓ Well, first I think chocolate is sweet. Umm, I would say no one hates the taste of it, and it's really smooth. You can mix it with different flavors, which is really special to try different tastes.

The pronoun 'they' is incorrectly used to refer to chocolate; 'you' is more appropriate here. 'Flavor' should be plural 'flavors' to match 'different'. The sentence is also split for clarity.

× That's a really difficult question. There's too many choices.

✓ That's a really difficult question. There are too many choices.

'There's' is a contraction of 'there is', which is singular. Since 'choices' is plural, the correct form is 'there are'.

× If I have to pick one, I would say camera because I love camera.

✓ If I have to pick one, I would say caramel because I love caramel.

The word 'camera' is likely a mispronunciation or typo for 'caramel', which is a chocolate flavor. Pronouns are not the issue here but the word choice is corrected for meaning.

× Like the extremely sweet taste. That's what I like. And I also famous.

✓ I like the extremely sweet taste. That's what I like. And it is also famous.

The original sentence fragments and lacks subject in 'Like the extremely sweet taste.' It should be 'I like the extremely sweet taste.' 'I also famous' is incorrect; it should be 'it is also famous' referring to the flavor.

× UMM yes, because in our umm Lunar New Year we often packed a present to our UMM friends and my family have a traditional UMM.

✓ UMM yes, because in our Lunar New Year we often pack presents for our friends, and my family has a tradition.

'Packed' is past tense but the context suggests habitual action, so present tense 'pack' is appropriate. 'Have' should be 'has' to agree with singular subject 'my family'. 'Present to' should be 'presents for' to use correct preposition.