Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn nên rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ. Bạn nên dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó giải thích lý do một cách mạch lạc và ngắn gọn. Ví dụ, tránh nói "my I'm a sweet tooth" và dùng thì đúng cho động từ.

예시: Yes, I really like eating chocolate because I have a sweet tooth. It tastes delicious and helps me feel relaxed after a long day.

제안: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "have a chocolate" và dùng từ phù hợp hơn. Câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn và rõ ràng.

예시: I usually eat chocolate in the evening because it helps me relax. I enjoy its rich and sweet flavor very much.

제안: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và dùng liên từ phù hợp để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể. Ngoài ra, chú ý ngữ pháp số nhiều và chia động từ đúng.

예시: When I was a child, I often ate chocolate every weekend with my close friends. We used to share it together, which made it more enjoyable.

제안: Câu trả lời cần hoàn chỉnh và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và giải thích lý do cụ thể, tránh nói dở dang như "people love the bitter or". Sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu hoàn chỉnh sẽ giúp câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because of its rich and sweet flavor. Many people enjoy its taste, whether it's sweet or slightly bitter.

제안: Bạn nên luyện tập nói trôi chảy để tránh lặp từ và ngập ngừng quá nhiều. Câu trả lời cần có cấu trúc rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ phù hợp. Hãy mô tả cảm nhận của bạn một cách cụ thể và mạch lạc.

예시: My favourite flavour is bitter dark chocolate. When I eat it, I feel relaxed because of its strong aroma and rich taste.

제안: Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "I find deep is". Bạn nên dùng câu chủ đề và giải thích lý do cụ thể, sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate is a great gift because it is convenient and suitable for special occasions like birthdays or Valentine's Day.

× I am a big fan of chocolate because of my I'm a sweet tooth and I love the sweet taste of chocolate very much.

✓ I am a big fan of chocolate because I have a sweet tooth and I love the sweet taste of chocolate very much.

The phrase 'because of my I'm a sweet tooth' is incorrect. The pronoun 'my' is misused and the sentence structure is confusing. It should be corrected to 'because I have a sweet tooth' to properly express the reason.

× I feel relaxed when I eating them.

✓ I feel relaxed when I eat them.

After 'when', the verb should be in the base form or present tense, not the '-ing' form. 'I eating' is incorrect; it should be 'I eat'.

× I like the taste of it.

✓ I like the taste of chocolate.

The pronoun 'it' is vague here. Since 'chocolate' is the subject, it's clearer to specify 'the taste of chocolate'.

× I usually have a chocolate.

✓ I usually have chocolate.

'Chocolate' is an uncountable noun here, so 'a chocolate' is incorrect unless referring to a specific chocolate item. The article 'a' should be removed.

× Especially in the evening because when I bite a piece of chocolate I feel relaxed and comfortable.

✓ I especially eat chocolate in the evening because when I bite a piece of chocolate, I feel relaxed and comfortable.

The original sentence is a fragment starting with 'Especially'. It needs a subject and verb to form a complete sentence.

× I love their rich or sweet flavor.

✓ I love its rich and sweet flavor.

'Their' is plural pronoun but 'chocolate' is singular. The correct pronoun is 'its'. Also, 'or' should be 'and' to describe both flavors.

× When I was younger, I loved the chocolate very much.

✓ When I was younger, I loved chocolate very much.

'Chocolate' is uncountable here, so 'the chocolate' is unnecessary and incorrect.

× Therefore I usually ate the chocolate every weekend with my close friend and we usually share with each other when every time we had a chocolate.

✓ Therefore, I usually ate chocolate every weekend with my close friend and we usually shared with each other every time we had chocolate.

'Usually ate' is past tense, so 'share' should be 'shared' to maintain tense consistency. Also, 'the chocolate' should be 'chocolate' as uncountable. 'Every time' is sufficient without 'when'.

× Personally I think chocolate one of the most popular food in all over the world because it's rich and sweet flavor.

✓ Personally, I think chocolate is one of the most popular foods all over the world because of its rich and sweet flavor.

Missing verb 'is' after 'chocolate'. 'Food' should be plural 'foods' to match 'one of the'. 'It's' should be 'its' to show possession. 'Because of' is the correct preposition.

× I think the people love the bitter or.

✓ I think people love the bitter flavor.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'The people' can be simplified to 'people'. 'Or' is incomplete and should be removed or replaced with a complete phrase.

× I love the uh, bitter dark chocolate, umm, I when I uh umm, bought a piece of black chocolate, I feel it's umm, so comfortable and uh umm uh, the his smell of his make me.

✓ I love bitter dark chocolate. When I buy a piece of dark chocolate, I feel so comfortable, and its smell makes me happy.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains filler words. 'Bought' should be 'buy' to match present tense. 'Black chocolate' should be 'dark chocolate'. 'The his smell of his make me' is incorrect and should be 'its smell makes me happy'.

× Chocolate. I find deep is so convenient for people to to use the chocolate as a gift for the special occasions such as birthday or Valentine's Day and so on.

✓ Chocolate, I find, is so convenient for people to use as a gift for special occasions such as birthdays or Valentine's Day and so on.

The sentence is fragmented and has pronoun misuse. 'I find deep' is incorrect; it should be 'I find'. 'To to' is a typo. 'The chocolate' is unnecessary here. 'Birthday' should be plural 'birthdays'.