Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ให้ถูกต้องและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น เช่น ใช้ 'sweetness' แทน 'sweets' และปรับโครงสร้างประโยคให้ชัดเจนขึ้น

예시: Yes, I really love eating chocolate because its sweetness makes me feel happier when I am angry or feeling down during the day.

제안: ควรใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้องและคำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม เช่น 'I try not to eat chocolate too often' และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้พหูพจน์ผิดที่

예시: I try not to eat chocolate too often, but I usually have it about three or four times a week.

제안: ควรปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ เช่น ใช้ 'limited the amount I ate' และ 'student's health' รวมถึงปรับประโยคให้กระชับและชัดเจน

예시: I often ate chocolate when I was a kid, but my parents tried to stop me or limited the amount I ate because chocolate is not good for students' health.

제안: ควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'cheer up' แทน 'share up' และใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่เป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น

예시: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and can cheer up your day. Also, people often give chocolate as a gift on special occasions.

제안: คำตอบดีแล้ว แต่สามารถเพิ่มรายละเอียดเพื่อให้สมบูรณ์และน่าสนใจมากขึ้น

예시: Personally, I prefer dark chocolate because of its rich taste, but I also enjoy milk chocolate for its creamy texture.

제안: ควรปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ เช่น 'present' แทน 'presence' และปรับประโยคให้สมบูรณ์และชัดเจน

예시: Yes, I totally agree that giving chocolates as presents is a good idea, especially on special occasions like Valentine's Day or New Year's Day, because chocolates come in various shapes and have a distinctive taste.

× Yes, I really love eating chocolate because its sweets make me more happy when I feel angry or I feel down in the day.

✓ Yes, I really love eating chocolate because its sweetness makes me happier when I feel angry or down during the day.

The word 'sweets' is incorrect here; the correct noun is 'sweetness' to describe the quality of chocolate. Also, 'more happy' should be 'happier' as it is the comparative form of 'happy'. Additionally, 'I feel down in the day' is better expressed as 'down during the day' for natural phrasing.

× I try to not eat chocolate too often, but in a week, maybe 3 or 4 days that I eat chocolates.

✓ I try not to eat chocolate too often, but in a week, maybe 3 or 4 days I eat chocolate.

The word 'chocolates' is incorrect here because 'chocolate' as a substance is uncountable and should be singular. Also, 'try to not eat' is better as 'try not to eat' for natural word order.

× I would say that I ate chocolate often when I was a kid, but my parents tried to stop me or limited my eating amount for chocolate because chocolate is actually not a good thing for students health.

✓ I would say that I ate chocolate often when I was a kid, but my parents tried to stop me or limited the amount of chocolate I ate because chocolate is actually not good for students' health.

The phrase 'limited my eating amount for chocolate' is awkward; it should be 'limited the amount of chocolate I ate'. Also, 'students health' needs a possessive apostrophe: 'students' health'.

× I believe that the chocolate is so popular because it's tasty.

✓ I believe that chocolate is so popular because it's tasty.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'chocolate' when speaking generally about the substance. Removing 'the' makes the sentence correct.

× Chocolate has a very good taste and can share up your day, and chocolate is a thing that you can give as a presence or in special occasions too, so that's why it's popular.

✓ Chocolate has a very good taste and can brighten up your day, and chocolate is something that you can give as a present on special occasions too, so that's why it's popular.

The phrase 'share up your day' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'brighten up your day'. Also, 'presence' should be 'present' when referring to a gift. 'In special occasions' should be 'on special occasions'.

× Personally, I prefer to eat dark chocolate and milk chocolate.

✓ Personally, I prefer to eat dark chocolate and milk chocolate.

No grammatical error detected in this sentence.

× Yes, I totally agree to give chocolates as a presence to other, particularly in special occasions like Valentine's, New Year's Day, because chocolate has a very distinctive taste and it has a different forms and shapes of chocolate and it has a great.

✓ Yes, I totally agree with giving chocolates as presents to others, particularly on special occasions like Valentine's and New Year's Day, because chocolate has a very distinctive taste and comes in different forms and shapes, and it is great.

The phrase 'agree to give' should be 'agree with giving'. 'Presence' should be 'presents' when referring to gifts. 'Other' should be 'others'. 'In special occasions' should be 'on special occasions'. 'It has a different forms and shapes of chocolate' is incorrect; it should be 'comes in different forms and shapes'. The sentence was incomplete and has been corrected for clarity.